CaptainAnarchy Posted November 11, 2004 Share Posted November 11, 2004 Shizumai Katari is the greatest swordsWOMAN of the year 2311. Swordsmanship has become a way of survival, as did in the medieval ages. She goes into space to go into intense martial arts training at a space station -until they hit a black hole- then she is warped back in time to the Meiji Era (think Kenshin's time) where she is mistaken for a rich housewife, Yoko Amei. She then defies the swordsmen and no one knows why "Yoko" is a swordsmaster all of the sudden . She then remembers reading about historic events that happened then, and realizes she was a part of every one of them. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kei Posted November 11, 2004 Share Posted November 11, 2004 [color=darkblue]Hm... Well, the premise is somewhat interesting, but in order for me to get a clear view, I think you should expand a little. Why was she going into space? What exactly is Yoko like? Is she famous for something other than being a rich housewife? How exactly do all these strange things happen? And if Shizumai is in the past, is she going to try to figure out how to get back to her own time? Also, if you plan to try and turn this into a manga, will it be shounen or shoujo-style? Who do you want it to appeal to? Some of those questions are more important than others, but I think you may want to answer them so that you can give the people a bit more to base their opinions on, as that's a little short.[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ayokano Posted November 11, 2004 Share Posted November 11, 2004 You should flesh out the story a little. Maybe not the "Oh, I remember reading about this." thing. The character should be confused about this new world. Even in a book I'm reading, Timeline by Micheal Critchon, the characters know the setting, in the middle of the War of the Roses I think, but they are still confused about the setting because they've never really been in the period before. Second, it sounds like you're going for a Si-Fi plot, but it doesn't stick to facts. I don't think you go back in time when you're sucked into a black hole. So please know what you're writing about before you put it on paper. There are tons of books about the space and time. It would also be nice if there were more characters, maybe even have love instrest and friendships. That's my input. I hope your story comes out the way you like it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dielover Posted November 14, 2004 Share Posted November 14, 2004 I think it is a very nice plot. I do however think it needs a little more detail. And maybe instead of a blackhole some sort of disruption in the balance of time or some of that nonsense. ( I'm not really that smart^_~) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Colonel Mustang Posted December 11, 2004 Share Posted December 11, 2004 It's a great idea better than others. I like the whole samurai jack reversed thing and the samurai housewife. Just spend more time on it, play with it a little bit That's it for me ....GOOD LUCK!!!!!! :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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