Shinmaru Posted January 12, 2005 Share Posted January 12, 2005 Good god, that picture in my signature is [i]Hilarious[/i]! Yes, with a captial H [i]and[/i] italics. It's just that damn funny. Might I also mention that [spoiler]One Night In Yoshi's Island is the greatest porno name in the history of mankind?[/spoiler] Looks like you girls showed me what's up. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kitty Posted January 12, 2005 Share Posted January 12, 2005 [COLOR=Blue][SIZE=1]O_O My hat... T_T ... I'm gonna chase down Charles now. >_>;; But yesh. A very great chapter-ses Annie! And I was one of the two to go with you to see The Charles! I feel so.. sexy! :^D And I can't believe [strike]you[/strike] WW2 [^_~] actually made a picture. OMG Th47s 73h F_1nG b3s7. (<- Try and unscramble [i]that[/i]. :P) I'm saving that to my desktop. ^_~ -Now with out a hat, Kitty P.S. :bawl: Evuu.. ;_;[/SIZE][/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Annie Posted January 12, 2005 Author Share Posted January 12, 2005 [size=1][color=darkslategray]I'd like to add that WW2 made that Yoshi picture. Props to WW2! Mah homeslice![/size][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Albel the Wicked Posted January 13, 2005 Share Posted January 13, 2005 *Looks at Yoshi picture* AHHHHH! MY EYES! MY PERFECTLY EVIL EYES! AHHHHHHHH! MAKE IT STOP! *Backs out of it* Look what that did. *Smoke comes out of his eyes* LOL! Another great chapter Annie. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jim_Hawking Posted January 13, 2005 Share Posted January 13, 2005 This is the funniest thing I've read in a very long time. Can't wait for the new chapters, Annie! -Still laughing at the Yoshi/Paris porn, Jim. ...(Now that I have posted here, how much you wanna bet I'll end up a target?)... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Annie Posted January 14, 2005 Author Share Posted January 14, 2005 [size=1][color=darkslategray]How much you want to bet you won't ~_^ Anyway, thank you all for your comments, and your dedication to reading. Without your comments and feedback, I wouldn't be able to continue writing on this. And I must say, The Bikini Bandits has turned out far better than I expected..so far. I seriously thought it would be a big flop. Thank you all.[/size][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KarmaOfChaos Posted January 18, 2005 Share Posted January 18, 2005 [color=deeppink][size=1]A group of barely-clad sexy-delicious women prancing around kicking guys asses - how could that possibly be a flop? Especially with all the H.O.R.N.Y. members around here...* cough * Great work Annie. I can't wait to see who your next victim is. ;) -Karma[/size][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lilt Posted January 18, 2005 Share Posted January 18, 2005 [font=Book Antiqua][size=2][color=darkorchid]That had to be the best chapter yet, Annie. ^.^ (And I'm not just saying that because I went with you to edit Shin's sig. Okay, okay so I [i]am[/i] just saying that because you put me into the story some more. ^.~)[/color][/size][/font] [font=Book Antiqua][size=2][color=darkorchid]My two favorite parts, (besides the end, of course.) had to be you walking around with one shoe on, and when Kane explained that James only tests you when you brink back the rod. lol.[/color][/size][/font] [font=Book Antiqua][size=2][color=darkorchid][/color][/size][/font] [font=Book Antiqua][size=2][color=darkorchid]P.S. Kitty, I'll help you get your hat back! We'll grab it from him when he's not looking![/color][/size][/font] [font=Book Antiqua][size=2][color=darkorchid][/color][/size][/font] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Albel the Wicked Posted January 31, 2005 Share Posted January 31, 2005 Say, when ya gonna come up with the next episode? You waiting for someone to give a lesson to? OK! *runs to myOtaku and edits site.* Let's see this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Revelation Posted February 1, 2005 Share Posted February 1, 2005 [size=1][color=#696969]Bikini Bandits strike again. I'm proud of that chapter. And I'm happy to know we have Reise as a Bandit. Who shall we take down this time, Bandits?[/size][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Annie Posted February 3, 2005 Author Share Posted February 3, 2005 [center][IMG]http://img31.exs.cx/img31/9715/beach5kw.jpg[/IMG] [/center] [b]"So, Annie, Shin wasn't upset?"[/b] asked Queen Asuka. She sat ontop of a light pole--don't ask where it came from--and flipped her hair into the breeze. [b]Male Gender:[/b] O.O So beautiful. After taking care of Shin's signature, the Bikini Bandits have found themselves on the Australian beach. Some of the girls, and guys, took to surfing. While the rest stayed ashore to play volleyball or baske in the sunlight. The sound of the waves breaking onto the beach, the sound of her friends laughing, the taste of a cold drink, Annie was pleased. The Bandits have worked hard. Annie felt that a nice breather for completing two missions in a row was in need. [b]"U-uh, no Queeny. Actually, he commended me.."[/b] Annie spoke, pondering just how Asuka got up on the pole. Annie shrugged it off, the Chobit looked too cute to be clobbered with stones to get her down. [b]"So, what's on our agenda now, Annie-sama?"[/b] asked Kyuai. [b]"Hm, well. I don't know actually. So far, the OB has been pretty quiet,"[/b] she stretched and walked over to the water. She stared into the blue horizon. [b]"You know, Annie,"[/b] Dr. D'Zanth stood next to her, [b]"There is a new fear arising in this part of the OB." "What is that?" [/b]Annie slid her sunglasses down. Drix D'Zanth scratched at his chin for a bit before answering. [b]"Well, it's a fear that I'm taking personally. You know there are ethnicities in the OB, duh. We're in the Australian part of the OB right now..and there is one man who's begining to frighten me,''[/b] Drix looked around,[b] "Actually, he's right over there."[/b] Drix pointed towards a tiki post. Annie peered around Drix, sliding her shades down. There he stood in the shadow of an over-sized umbrella. He wore a pair of khaki shorts, a pair of flip flops, a white trucker's hat, and no T-shirt. Around his neck was a single-shelled, hemp necklace. Annie squinted and glanced up at Drix. [b]"Is that who I think it is?" [/b]Annie stood up straight and sipped on a cold drink that just happened to appear into her hands. Drix did the same. [b]"Where did these come from..Anyway, yes. That is who you think it is," [/b]Drix nodded, [b]"He's very dangerous, I hear." "What do you suggest? I don't even know why he's so 'dangerous'. What's he done?"[/b] asked Annie over her glass. The two began to walk the shore. [b]"Well, I just don't know for sure. Everything I've heard was 'oh, I can't talk about it..bye!' And I couldn't get any substantial details. It's like..he's classified or something, ya know?"[/b] Drix glanced over his shoulder. [b]"Really...Well, I won't send the Bandits out on a job blindfolded,"[/b] said Annie, shaking her head slowly. [b]"I know, I know," [/b]Drix paused, stopping in his tracks, [b]"Annie, I have a bad feeling on this one. I'd like to investigate into it more." "Drix, you're our doctor. I can't put you at risk. What will happen if Chaos has another fit?"[/b] Annie stood in front of Drix. He looked away. [b]"Fine, do as you please. But, take Kane with you. You may need his investigatory..ness.." [/b]Annie stopped, [b]"Then, whenever you have found out something, report back to me. I'll do what I can to find out about this...James." "Thank you, Annie," [/b]with that, Drix rode off into the sunset..dragging Kane along. Okay, he really didn't ride off into the sunset, dragging Kane along. But he did walk away, beckoning Kane to his side..and not in that way, ya pervs! *shakes fist* Annie glanced over in the James' direction. He was gone. [b]|-Hours later-| [/b] The sun had set, the autum colors painted the sand with warmth. The beach had begun to chill, forcing the girls out of the water, and around a fire. They all chatted about the day's events, how they would love to just stay in this section of the OB for a long time, or what the next mission should be. [b]"By the way, where are Drix and Kane? I haven't seen them in hours," [/b]Corey picked at the sand. [b]"They're doing some research. Drix has a hunch on something, but I don't know what he's going on about," [/b]Annie sipped on a cup of warm tea,[b] "Where are all of my drinks coming from..Any how, it sounded kind of personal for him, so I let him go to check it out. Does anyone have any information on a James?"[/b] The group remained quiet, all eyes stared blankly at Annie. She shrugged. [b]"Guess not,"[/b] Annie stood,[b] "Well, I'm going to go see if I can find out anything about him. Maybe ask a couple of locals. You all know how to contact me." "Wait, Annie," [/b]sweetreyes stammered to her feet, [b]"Can I come with you?" "Sure thing. But it may get dangerous," [/b]Annie said over her shoulder. sweetreyes brushed sand off of her backside and trotted up to Annie. She nodded without a word and started towards the road. [b]"So, where do we start?" "I don't know for sure. I hear James is hard to make contact with," [/b]Annie shook her head and looked down the street. A small light caught her attention, and she headed toward the source. sweetreyes followed and yawned. [b]"It's a small souvenir stand. I thought they had all closed for the night," [/b]sweetreyes pulled back the wooden bead curtain. The inside of the stand was tiny; Annie and sweetreyes barely fit in the aisles. Glass cases lined the walls, containing dozens of hemp, leather, sea shell, necklaces and other assortments of home-made jewelry. There were some other products such as backpacks and hats. The sound of a light, but bizarre, music fluttered in the air. [b]"Is anyone here?" [/b]Annie called out, looking into a small enterance to where she assumed led into a backroom. The sound of beads swishing and clapping together was soon heard, followed by the head of a young man poking through the bead divider. Annie and sweetreyes jumped slightly, bumping into eachother. [b]"Oh, sorry 'bout that,"[/b] the young man laughed nervously and stepped into the main part of the stand, [b]"I was just makin' som'ore souvenir..stuff.."[/b] The two girls stared at the young man. His Australian accent mesmerized the two girls. His tanned skin gleamed lightly under the dim light of the stand, only to brighten up as he smiled. [b]"Annie..can I have a few dollars?"[/b] sweetreyes grasped onto her friend's hand. The young man smiled in slight embarrassment. [b]"Ssshh. Um, excuse our intrusion, but-" [/b]Annie began. [b]"Nonsense. You're most welcome to be here," [/b]he smiled and grabbed a sleeveless T-shirt. [b]"Please, don't-"[/b] sweetreyes began before Annie threw a hand over her mouth. [b]"Hehe, she's just..hyper tonight," [/b]Annie blushed. The young man winked and pulled over his shirt. sweetreyes growled lightly under Annie's hand. [b]"Oh, how rude o' me. My name is Baron Samedi. But you girls can call me Baron," [/b]Baron extended his hand to shake both Annie's and sweetreyes' hands, [b]"Please, tell me what you'd like." "Oh, I'll tell you what I want-" [/b]sweetreyes was once again cut off by Annie's hand. [b]sweetreyes: [/b]-_- [b]"Baron, darling, would you happen to know anything about a James?"[/b] Annie smiled sweetly, hugging her friend innocently. Baron narrowed his eyes and folded his arms over his chest. Annie's smile slowly dimmed, she knew there was something to be heard. Whether it was going to be an interrogation from Baron, or a confession, Annie only knew it was to be serious. He walked over to a glass case and reached behind it. Annie and sweetreyes tensed up, ready for an attack. Baron noticed the girl's body movements and smirked before pressing a button. Then, an all too familiar greeting: "Welcome Baron Samedi. You've got no new messages.", followed by a holographic screen just above the case. The two girls relaxed a tad, gazing in awe at the technology. Baron walked around to touch the top of the case, revealing a flat, transparent keypad. [b]"What do you want to know about James?"[/b] Baron again narrowed his eyes. [b]"Are you going to find him on the internet?" [/b]Annie questioned. [b]"No, I'm just going to check my e-mail,"[/b] Baron grinned playfully. [b]Annie: [/b]-_- [b]"Well, let's just say it's personal..."[/b] Annie shifted, [b]"Do you know anything about him?" "Of course I do. James is a good friend of mine. We are both Australian, ya know," [/b]Baron smirked,[b] "However, I'm not going to rat him out. I'll answer the questions I want to answer. Is this understood?"[/b] Annie and sweetreyes nodded, finally letting go of each other. Baron turned his attention back to the holographic screen. He chuckled at whatever letter he was reading, then fell silent. Annie tapped her fingers on the glass she was leaning against. He then laughed some more. [b]"Baron?" "Oh, right. Sorry-"[/b] he paused. [b]"I'm Annie, this is sweetreyes,"[/b] the two played with their fingers, embarrassed now. [b]"Heh,"[/b] Baron closed the window and turned to focus on the girls, [b]"Now, ask away." "Why would someone think James might be dangerous?"[/b] Annie began. [b]"Well, James is rather seclusive..unless he's known you for a while. But, I suppose his quietness can be rather intimidating to someone who doesn't know his personality." "Hm, okay then. What is he interested in?" "That's hard to say. James is an interesting person. He's really interested in anything that holds his interest.."[/b] A long pause, Annie stared blankly at Baron. [b]"Right," [/b]she quirked an eyebrow,[b] "That made sense." "Yeah.." [/b]Baron coughed. [b]"Well, is there any one thing in particular that you know about James? Something that stands out?"[/b] sweetreyes piped in. Baron scratched his chin and sighed in thought. He stood quiet for minutes. Annie glanced at sweetreyes, who was gazing flirtatiously at Baron. She chuckled. [b]"There is one thing. The Orient. James is particularly fond of the Oriental life-style. I've heard use the honorifics* to address people. And I know he has an insatiable love and obsession for the Geisha,"[/b] Baron snapped his fingers. [b]"Is that so..." [/b]Annie smiled and nodded. [b]"Yes, in fact, he created a skin for the OB in the Geisha scheme. It's really quite vibrant,"[/b] Baron nodded and waved his finger in the air, [b]"I hope this helped?" "Muchly," [/b]Annie clapped her hands together, [b]"Thank you, Baron." "No problem. But I'm afraid that's all I'm going to tell you. So don't ask where you might be able to find him," [/b]he firmly set his hand on an imaginary table in front of the girls. [b]"You've given us enough information, and we appreciate your time," [/b]Annie pushed herself up from the glass case and reached out to shake his hand once more. sweetreyes did the same and sighed. Annie smiled at her and started for the door. Minutes later, the girls rejoined the group around the bonfire. They shared the information they received. [b]"I've got to get in touch with Drix, though," [/b]Annie stretched. [b]"I wish you could have let me tell him what I really wanted," [/b]sweetreyes sulked. Annie shook her head and signed onto her AIM account. [b]GoddessUnluck:[/b] Drix, you there? [b]jfettDwermer: [/b]yeah..how'd it go? [b]GoddessUnluck:[/b] I have information for you. Did you find anything? [b]jfettDwermer:[/b] yeah, i found out a few things [b]jfettDwermer:[/b] what did you find? [b]GoddessUnluck:[/b] Meet with me? At the boardwalk. [b]jfettDwermer:[/b] it's a date ~_^ [color=darkslategray]This is only the begining of a great project I'm doing with this. This journey will be different from the other chapters. Much different. Not just because James is in this, but because it's a different type of story. It's hard to explain, but it won't be rushed..no, this journey (as I'm going to call it) is going to be written in a more serious tone. It's basically me trying to focus on a member..not just myself. This journey will carry out through two, perhaps, three more chapters..or more. I have a great plan with the idea that Drix and James helped out with. And I just want to make them proud, and thank them both. Thank you guys! *hug*[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kitty Posted February 3, 2005 Share Posted February 3, 2005 [SIZE=1][COLOR=Blue]That was another great chapter, Annie. We're getting involved with James, eh? That'll be interesting, indeed. I must know more... @_@ Baron!! Yee! *glomps* Very sexy Aussie, right there. Of course, not sexy enough to be a [i]bandit[/i], but still very appealing. ^_~ Can't wait for the next chapters. :3[/COLOR][/SIZE] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shugo54 Posted February 3, 2005 Share Posted February 3, 2005 [COLOR=Navy][FONT=Book Antiqua](^_^"<--------- took 20 minutes of reading all the posts and spent 30 minutes fighting with himself trying to decide wheter to post or not...because he knows he will not fit in) Job Well Done! I read through all of them and They are very good and also very funny! Well Keep up the good work and I will be awaiting the next Chapter =P[/FONT][/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Revelation Posted February 3, 2005 Share Posted February 3, 2005 [size=1][color=#696969]Sounds interesting. I can't wait to read the next few chapters. Yet.... something tells me something big, and when I say big I mean GODZILLA big is going to happen. o_O???? Lost at the moment. It's alright, I'll just go burn something. *Glances around* Sorry, forgot to mention that I'm a pyromaniac as well. *Shrugs and walks away*[/size][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Annie Posted February 3, 2005 Author Share Posted February 3, 2005 [color=darkslategray]How silly of me, I forgot to explain this * In the chapter, I mentioned honorifics. Honorifics are nothing scary. Actually, they are really respectful..well, mostly respectful. Honorifics are suffixes to names. They can be of great respect, or to tease one of age or appearane. Some examples: [b]-san[/b]: This is the most common honorific, and is pretty much equivalent to "Mr., Ms., Mrs..." et cetra. It's called the "all-purpose" honorific because you can never go wrong with addressing someone with this suffix. It's very polite. [b]-sama[/b]: This is a step above "-san", signifying much more respect. [b]-dono[/b]: This beats the two above. This originally comes from the word "tono" which means "lord". This is for utmost respect. [b]-kun[/b]: This suffix is used at the end of a boy's name, and expresses familiarity or endearment. Sort of like how Americans would say "babe" or "hun". Adult males use it to converse with one another if they are good friends..or when they address the younger. [b]-chan[/b]: Another endearment, mostly directed at the female gender. It can also be used to address little boys, pets, and even among lovers. Basically, anything that holds a sense of childish nature/cuteness. [b]Sempai[/b]: The title addresses someone who might be a "senior". Often used in school to address a teacher, or upper classmen. Or even at a job to address the boss. [b]Sensei[/b]: Literally means "one who has come before". This is commonly used for teachers, doctors, or masters of any profession or arts. Very respectful. [/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Delta Posted February 4, 2005 Share Posted February 4, 2005 [COLOR=#B33D79][SIZE=1]My goodness... Chapter 6's has got me grinning right from the start! I'm gonna have to sue you if something weird happens to my facial muscles. Good work on portraying Baron *insert squeal here*. Still very sexy, Annalisse. Excellent job![/SIZE][/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
James Posted February 4, 2005 Share Posted February 4, 2005 [color=#334366]Very cool, Annie. This is getting better each time; I like how you've mixed different settings in there. I'm also very humbled that you put me in the story. I'll definitely watch out for the next chapter, as I'm interested to see where you take it. ~_^[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Drix D'Zanth Posted February 4, 2005 Share Posted February 4, 2005 I don?t want to be too harsh, but this is terrible stuff. I was expecting a lot more from a person who I used to consider somewhat of a writer. Honestly Annie, I hadn?t stumbled upon this thing until the last chapter you posted, but I am thoroughly offended. What am I to you? Some sort of one-sided character that you can manipulate? What is with your portrayal of me as a doctor? Is that some sort of joke? So I?m not a doctor yet, that doesn?t mean you need to rub it in my face. Oh, by the way, I resent being portrayed as a homosexual. My dog Jake cares for me very much, thank you. By the way? third grade called, they forgot to teach you spelling and grammar. What is this? Did you vomit on your keyboard and forget where all the keys were located? Oh, and incorporating myO and AIM conversations is a real novel idea *rolls eyes*. I can?t believe how ridiculously well-received this story is? I think you should be booed off the boards for this mindless puss. How is James tolerating this? Has Otakuboards lost all semblance of justice? Thanks a lot, I can?t believe you would sink so low.[COLOR=White]^_~[/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Annie Posted February 4, 2005 Author Share Posted February 4, 2005 [QUOTE=Drix D'Zanth]I don?t want to be too harsh, but this is terrible stuff. I was expecting a lot more from a person who I used to consider somewhat of a writer. Honestly Annie, I hadn?t stumbled upon this thing until the last chapter you posted, but I am thoroughly offended. What am I to you? Some sort of one-sided character that you can manipulate? What is with your portrayal of me as a doctor? Is that some sort of joke? So I?m not a doctor yet, that doesn?t mean you need to rub it in my face. Oh, by the way, I resent being portrayed as a homosexual. My dog Jake cares for me very much, thank you. By the way? third grade called, they forgot to teach you spelling and grammar. What is this? Did you vomit on your keyboard and forget where all the keys were located? Oh, and incorporating myO and AIM conversations is a real novel idea *rolls eyes*. I can?t believe how ridiculously well-received this story is? I think you should be booed off the boards for this mindless puss. How is James tolerating this? Has Otakuboards lost all semblance of justice? Thanks a lot, I can?t believe you would sink so low.[COLOR=White]^_~[/COLOR][/QUOTE] [color=darkslategray]I'm terribly sorry, Drix. I had no intention of offending you. I was only trying to give you props with the doctor routine. I would have guessed you would have enjoyed me portraying you as a good doctor. I never said you were homosexual, either. I'm sorry that it looked as if I were trying to make you out to be homosexual. I know your views on homosexuality, and I am terribly sorry that it seemed that way. Well, s**t, I'm sorry. I'm not perfect with my grammar or spelling! I never prided myself on that subject! I know damned well enough to get me by. Isn't that enough? Who are you to just flame me like that, anyway?! If you didn't appreciate my story, you could have at least PMed or IMed me. Thanks to you, my story may be at jeopordy! Whatever, you don't like it, that's your problem. I don't see how you can be so ungrateful when I'm shining the spotlight on you. I'm going to continue my story, whether you like it or not. You have a problem, IM me.[/color] [center][IMG]http://img208.exs.cx/img208/6113/bar8mh.jpg[/IMG][/center] [b]"Where did you get that information?"[/b] Drix leant against the wooden railing. The sea's breeze was cool and swept over the beach like a wave. The soft amber glow of the boardwalk lanterns dotted into the horizon. [b]"A young man named Baron Samedi. He claims to know James as a friend,"[/b] Annie zipped up her hoodie and looked over the beach. Like a mother, checking on the Bandits hundreds of feet away. [b]"Do you believe him?" "I think I can." "Well, let's think here,"[/b] Drix began to pace. [b]"Drix, why would you fear James? Has he said something to you?"[/b] Annie still really confused. [b]"I was just saying that I 'feared' him so I could have an excuse to investigate,"[/b] Drix stopped and laughed. Annie growled and threw her shoes at him. [b]"Sorry, Annie. But seriously, don't you just feel something about him?"[/b] he kicked a the small, colorful pebbles that littered the boardwalk. The breeze picked up speed, blowing up between the cracks of the boards. [b]"Well, he does give off an ominous aura. Wait, James is the James that knows I don't like the GameCube or XBox. Crap, now I really have to watch my back,"[/b] Annie mumbled, rubbing her arms. The two walked further down the boardwalk, occasionally glancing back to the shore. The breeze, as soon as it began, stopped; leaving the air to linger with a strange sense of company. [b]"Do you feel like we're being watched?"[/b] Annie stopped, shoving her hands into the hoodie pouch. [b]"Yeah, maybe we should head back,"[/b] Drix put his hand on Annie's back and turned them around to head back towards the beach. Their footsteps echoed into the blackness of the night. The reached the edge of the beach and started for the group. [b]"Oh, Annie, Drix, you just missed it!"[/b] Kitty greeted them with a worried expression, [b]"There's been a stir on the OB. An outraged member tried to strike out against Adam!" "What?! Who was it?"[/b] asked Annie. [b]"They're calling the person 'the messenger'. I don't think it was anyone we knew from way back, but they are really angry,"[/b] Kane stood, [b]"Supposedly, this madman is leaving riddles in the beaches..as drawings."[/b] Drix's face tensed, [b]"What kind of drawings?" [b]"Just things like symbols, stick figures, objects..random things really. They don't make sense,"[/b] Kane scratched his head. The entire group shook their heads in confusion and concern. [b]"What are we going to do, Annie? We can't just let Adam get attacked,"[/b] said Reise, holding onto his marshmellow roaster. Annie paced the sand. Drix coughed lightly. [b]"Oh, Annie, while you and Drix were talking, I went to visit that Baron myself,"[/b] Kitty perched on a log, [b]"And I was able to persuade him to let me in on a very valuable piece of information." "And what was that?" "Well, the information didn't come free,"[/b] Kitty pointed at her head. She was wearing a new, and bigger, sunhat. [b]"I see. You had to purchase something. Well, what did Baron tell you?"[/b] Annie sat across from the now extremely happy Kitty. [b]"Apparently, James has been showing his face more frequently. Isn't it odd how he suddenly starts appearing out of nowhere when all of this spiteful member shows up?"[/b] Kitty peered around the group, [b]"Well, it just so happens that James is Adam's bodyguard. He was on the beach today to scope the area, looking for the madman." "I see,"[/b] Annie nodded. Drix stood up and shifted his stance a little nervously. [b]"What's wrong, Drix?"[/b] Lalith Ril looked up curiously. Drix was starting to act strange...granted, he's strange anyway, but this was getting serious. Annie squinted up at Drix. [b]"Annie, you wanted to know what was worrying me about James. Well, it started yesterday; when we first arrived at the beach. Everyone was off in the water, or playing games. I was taking some privacy, and just doodling in the sand. You know, like those rock gardens? It's just peaceful; I meant nothing by it. Then, I noticed James sitting by himself, just watching over the beach. I shrugged it off. But today, he was there again, as you know. However, he kept eyeing me. Like I was some sort of spammer,"[/b] Drix paused. [b]"So, you think James might suspect you,"[/b] Annie finished before Drix could begin. [b]"That's a reasonable guess,"[/b] Kane nodded, [b]"Kitty, did Baron happen to tell you what they plan to do with this member?" "The penalty is banning, with no last words. Once the perpetrator is caught, there will be no Miranda Rights. Just straight banned."[/b] Annie sighed heavily and buried her face into her sleeves. Her mind raced. If James were to get ahold of Drix.. [b]"No! I won't allow it,"[/b] she stood abruptly, throwing sand on those who sat next to her, [b]"We have to go talk to him, and try to set this straight!" "No, there's no 'we'. I will have to go set things straight,"[/b] Drix inhaled. [b]"But-"[/b] Queen Asuka tried to throw in her two cents. [b]"No, I must. If anyone is to get burnt, it will be me,"[/b] Drix stood up and straightened his shorts, [b]"Annie, don't follow me. No matter what you hear over the OB, do not follow." "Drix,"[/b] Annie growled. [b]"I'm serious, Annie." "Fine,"[/b] Annie folded her arms under her breasts. Drix smiled appreciatively and waved the group "good-bye" before vanishing. The group all focused upon Annie. She had her back turned and was swaying side to side. [b]"You're going to follow, aren't you?"[/b] sweetreyes tried to sound enthusiastic. [b]"We'll just see what happens. If he doesn't contact me by mid-afternoon, I'm going after him,"[/b] Annie turned around, [b]"We have to get a back up plan going..just in case."[/b] The group huddled and began to discuss what could be done. [b]|-Meanwhile, on Drix's end-| "Where do I even begin to look?"[/b] he grumbled, combing the horizon of a strange garden. He looked around to see that he had been transported somewhere in the html coding to an ancient Japanese dojo. The courtyard was serene and lit with several rice paper lanterns. Bonzai trees and a simple sandpit to his left, a small menagerie of colorful birds to his right. His swim shorts and T-shirt were now white robe and red pants. [b]"So, you have found me. How?"[/b] a smooth Australian accent drifted around Drix, seemingly coming from every direction. [b]"Honestly, I really don't know. You know the net, it just does crazy things sometimes,"[/b] Drix chuckled slightly. [b]"Indeed it does,"[/b] the voice got stronger, slowly narrowing down to one direction, [b]"Nevermind petty matters, I have something more of a serious tone to inquire."[/b] Drix turned to see a robbed figure leaning against a lamp post. The lamp dangling gently above the man illuminated a navy blue robe and white pants. The glint of the man's hip expressed he was carting a weapon, most likely to be a sword. Drix looked at his hip to find he, too, carried a sword. [b]"How in the-?"[/b] he started. [b]"The internet makes it possible, Drix D'Zanth. However,"[/b] the man pushed himself off of the post, drawing out his katana, [b]"It cannot save you." "Wait, I am not the one you want!"[/b] Drix grabbed at the hilt of his katana, [b]"James, please listen. It was pure coincidence. I only just arrived on the beach yesterday. I had no idea about this estranged member. Please, hear me out."[/b] An uncomfortable silence weighed heavily on Drix. His palms began to sweat under such pressure. He kept his face calm and collected. James stared meticulously, raising his katana chest high. [b]|-Back at the beach-| "Alright, everyone know what's going to happen if Drix doesn't contact us?"[/b] Annie slapped her hands together. [b]"Yes!"[/b] they saluted. [b]"Right. But just one more time, I'm going to go over it,"[/b] Annie cleared her throat, [b]"If, for some reason, Drix doesn't make it back, I have to figure out where James may be located. Then, in a Geisha get-up, I'm going to infiltrate his whereabouts. Hopefully, I'll be able to hold his attention long enough for you all to fan out and find Drix. Now, I'll keep in contact with you all through the little ear pieces Kane is going to issue us. You all will be able to hear me when I tug on my ear, and vice versa. If something goes wrong with James, I will inform you all. If something goes wrong with your end, you let me know."[/b] The group nodded. The fire burning brightly, crackling under gusts of the sea breeze. [b]"Will we be teamed up?"[/b] Corey raised his hand. [b]"Yes, great idea, Core. You all need to choose your buddy. I can't have all of you guys spread out at once, that would be a nightmare,"[/b] Annie chuckled. The bandits all chattered about who was to be teamed up with who. Annie watched the arguements with amusement, but her mind kept wandering over the current shift of events. [b]|-Back at the dojo-| "Unsheath your sword, Drix. If you can put up a good fight, I'll allow you to confess,"[/b] James smirked, [b]"However, if you prove nothing; you'll do better to save your confession for whatever power of being you believe in." "Very well,"[/b] Drix sighed. He realized James was true to his word. The glitter of the smooth blade danced across the garden. Drix gripped the hilt with both hands, watching James with caution. The two took their stances. Drix with the blade close to his face and his feet apart. James stood straight, his body to the side, holding the katana with one hand. His blade still level with Drix's chest. Not a sound was heard; the birds of the menagerie stopped ruffling their feathers, the crickets had silenced their instruments, the two men's breath held steady. Without warning, James flicked his wrist and lunged; the katana drawn back. The sharp clink of metal pierced the silence, a small blue spark lit up the blades as they crossed. The birds remained still, and the fight began. [color=darkslategray]Okay, okay. Sorry, Drix, I can't hold it back any longer. *laughs* That whole tiff was staged guys. Don't worry, Drix and I are on great terms. He informed me that he was going to "flame me". Why? We were bored. If you don't believe me:[/color] "Thanks a lot, I can?t believe you would sink so low.[COLOR=White]^_~[/COLOR]" [color=darkslategray]Hightlight that entire sentence. We originally planned to keep a joke going, but I chickened out. I'm sorry, Drix, hun. I just didn't want my thread to get closed. I love my story too much ^_^; So, no worries guys. Please, how did you like this chapter? I know, it's kind of short. But I was in a hurry to get it up before my thread got closed, hehe. I basically wanted to set a stage, hopefully it didn't get rushed. What do you all think? Do you think I went about it to quickly?[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Brasil Posted February 4, 2005 Share Posted February 4, 2005 Drix, your reply is toolish. [quote name='Drix D'Zanth']I don?t want to be too harsh, but this is terrible stuff. I was expecting a lot more from a person who I used to consider somewhat of a writer. Honestly Annie, I hadn?t stumbled upon this thing until the last chapter you posted, but I am thoroughly offended.[/quote] Harsh? Bah. You're sugarcoating things, Drix, but there's nothing to sugarcoat here, because Annie's story is fantabulousness. I don't believe that Annie's faltered as a writer here, not at all. If anything, her writing is top-notch. [quote]What am I to you? Some sort of one-sided character that you can manipulate? What is with your portrayal of me as a doctor? Is that some sort of joke? So I?m not a doctor yet, that doesn?t mean you need to rub it in my face. Oh, by the way, I resent being portrayed as a homosexual. My dog Jake cares for me very much, thank you.[/quote] I found this paragraph pretty darn humorous, because, truth is, Jordan, you are a one-sided character that we can manipulate. Remember when you were a Mod? I had you wrapped around my pinky finger so tightly that you may have just as well been part of a glove. Also, I'd hardly think that Annie's Doctorization of you was an insult. If anything, she was complimenting you, because we all know you're just going for a PhD so you can "administer" some "treatment" to beautiful and buxom babes on an exotic beach. I mean, honestly. The part fits you to a fricking T, man! And you weren't being portrayed as homosexual, necessarily; you were just written to be a pussy. Er, I guess that's not entirely accurate. Your character foundation was clearly based on Sean William Scott's character in Jay and Silent Bob Strike Back, in that you both are playing the caring, sensitive male so you can get some tail. There's nothing wrong with that. It makes for an insanely ironic and side-splitting good time. Your "criticisms" have no basis whatsoever!!! ~_^ [quote]By the way? third grade called, they forgot to teach you spelling and grammar. What is this? Did you vomit on your keyboard and forget where all the keys were located? Oh, and incorporating myO and AIM conversations is a real novel idea *rolls eyes*. I can?t believe how ridiculously well-received this story is? I think you should be booed off the boards for this mindless puss. How is James tolerating this? Has Otakuboards lost all semblance of justice?[/quote] [Jewish mother]Oh, and perfect spelling and grammer you have in spades? Do I read what I think I am reading? This is a time like the pot calling the kettle black if ever there was one. Drix, your grammar and spelling are not as so perfect for you to go and bash my little Chavaleh Annie like you are doing this moment now. For one whose writing looks and sounds like Instant Message conversations and MyOtaku rants, you don't look to be able to rant and rave like this on this, the story thread of my little Chavaleh's. Shame on you, Jordan! Stab a knife into my heart you are! If I were your mother, I'd be cleaning the Schmutzpah out of that foul mouth of yours, young man. Shame, Jordan, shame! And for you to share the name of one of the greatest men to have ever lived, pains me dearly.[/Jewish Mother] [quote]Thanks a lot, I can?t believe you would sink so low.^_~[/QUOTE] Same to you, Hetero Lifemate...same to you. ~_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arcadia Posted February 4, 2005 Share Posted February 4, 2005 [quote name='Annie']"...However, he kept eyeing me. Like I was some sort of spammer," Drix paused.[/quote] [size=1]Ha ha, that part was great. The last couple chapters have been fantastic, Annsie darling. Very excellent writing, and very funny. All the stuff with Kitty's hat was great. ^_~ This new fight scene screams Kill Bill to me, heh. I guess that's rather fitting, considering who it is we're talking about. Oh well, yeah for shiny swords! And something about Alex as a Jewish Mother... *shudder* Good grief.[/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Baron Samedi Posted February 4, 2005 Share Posted February 4, 2005 [size=1]Woah...that Baron Samedi dude sounds cool. ;) Great writing here Annie. I'd have to agree with Arcadia about that 'spammer' quote. That was choice, heh. I think that as you've been writing this, it has only gotten better, as you've come to 'feel' the characters more accurately. For example, you and Drix on the boardwalk, and the small details like Drix 'straightening his shorts' when he stands up. Your writing is very involving, and I love your style. Can't wait to see where this plot is headed ^_^; And I don't know about anyone else, but I realised that Drix was...pulling everybody's leg, metaphorically speaking, heh.[/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kitty Posted February 5, 2005 Share Posted February 5, 2005 [COLOR=Blue][SIZE=1]The flaming thing confused me.. So.. I'm going to skip it, 'kay? ^_~ Wow you got the next chapter up fast!! I hadn't checked in the past two days since I didn't think Chapter 7 would be up for a while. XD Oh well. Glad I didn't have to wait. ^_^ I got a new hat! Yay!! I don't have to go chasing down Charles now. >_<;; And I got to visit Baron! I feel so special. :3 I wonder who my partner will be! Whatever you do.. don't stick me with Chaos. T_T - Kitty[/SIZE][/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezekiel Posted February 5, 2005 Share Posted February 5, 2005 [COLOR=DarkGreen][SIZE=1]I really liked both the chapters but I wasn't mentioned in either of them *sad*. I really liked the Messenger the best what with the doodles in the sand being some sort of evil deed, heh heh. The beach sounds lovely; as I look outside my window I see grey. I want a beach ;_;[/SIZE][/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Albel the Wicked Posted February 7, 2005 Share Posted February 7, 2005 Wow, I never would've thought James loved katanas as much as me. I have a new respect for ya James! I wish to be your apprentice! Great chapter as always. Love it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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