Writing Distant Lover...[m-vsl]

[Persona]

[COLOR=DeepSkyBlue]Silence grasped the air as the group slept blissfully, except for one. Her hazel orbs were wide open as she laid on the thin green sack. Sango was remembering Naraku?s repeated offer.

?Sango the demon exterminator, if you bring me the testusaiga, I shall release Kohaku?

Kohaku?Her brothers name lingered in her mind possessively as Naraku?s bribe echoed her thoughts. Tears so warm yet painful trailed down her soft cheeks as she began to cry in frustration.

?What should I do?I?ve been down this road before?twice to be exact?.but I failed to bring Kohaku back to me?my dear brother you?re all I have left??I?m sorry??

With that final thought, Sango stood up as quietly as possible and crept towards the other side where Shippo, Miroku and inuyasha laid asleep. She stared at the three and let out a long sigh of forgivenss. Her delicate yet strong hands gripped the old rusted sword, suddenly she froze as a firm hand gripped around hers as she prepared to take the testusaiga.

?Huh! Inu-Inuyasha?I thought you were asleep. I-? Sango couldn?t finish her sentence as a sense of guilt stirred in her stomach and heart.

?Feh, well you thought wrong didn?t ya Sango,? Inuyasha said angrily in his displeased tone.

?I?m sorry please forgive me inuyasha? said Sango as she tried to sheild her eyes behind her jet black bangs.

Inuyasha said nothing, instead he let go of his grip on her hand and stood up. Sango didn?t know how to react, she just simply stood like a frozen statue. Inuyasha advanced towards Sango and grabbed her hand delicately this time and guided her out the shabby hut. Shippo had witnessed what just happened, but instead of informing the other, he fell asleep once again.
There was s soft yet cooling breeze amidst in the forest. So tranquil and beautiful, the rich green leaves hissed as the breeze brushed against them. The trees felt alive as Inuyasha and Sango approached.

?Now I?m only gonna ask you this once Sango?What the hell were ya thinking?? Inuyasha said in his usual tone of voice.

Sango said nothing and that angered him.

?Damn it you wench! Haven?t you learned that Naraku?s fooling ya!? said Inuyasha, this time his voice was load and harsh.

?Don?t you dare call me a wench Inuyasha! He has Kohaku and I need to-to?? Sango was cut off.

?To what Sango! Steal the testusaiga and hand it to that bastard?hell he?ll kill you once he has the testusaiga in his grasp. I thought you were smarter than that..? Inuyasha scorned at her.

?Stop it! You have no idea what I?m going through?..what do you care!? Sango said furiously.

?Feh, shows how much you know!? he said a bit gently this time.

?What?? Sango said in a regretful tone.

?Yea ya heard me?I know damn right how it feels Sango?how to loose someone you love?I was pinned to a damn tree by the woman I love and she died?.now she?s come back?..kagome?kikyo?I?m never happy being with them...I feel so torn apart?my mother died when I was young
?I was casted from the western lands by my brother?.I know how it is?to feel so alone?.its painful?Sango..? Inuyasha said in a hurtful voice.

Then and there Sango realized that inuyasha shared the same pain and loneliness as her. Sango regretted the words she had spoken to him and so she began to cry in frustration and pain. Inuyasha noticed and walked closer to her. Sango suddenly felt clawed fingers tenderly trailing her cheek.

?Sango we care about you..I care?I know how you feel? Inuyasha said softly has he stared hypnotically into her eyes.

Before she could speak, Inuyasha wrapped his arm around her feminine body and pressed it against his. Her cheeks reddened in shyness as he held her. He then whispered gently into her ear.

?I?ll always be here if you ever need me?Sango? he whispered.

With that Sango wrapped her arms around his body and buried her face in his muscular chest as she cried.

?Go ahead..let it all out Sango? He said ever so gently as his other arm wrapped around her body.

As the breeze ceased and the leaves stopped hissing, light raindrops began to fall from the starlit sky. The rain began to get heavier and pressed against their bodies, but the two just stood there holding each other in comfort. As the night began to fade both Inuyasha and Sango fell asleep under the big brown oak tree.
It was morning and the rain had ceased. The group had awakened to see that Inuyasha and Sango were gone. While they searched for the two, Inuyasha and Sango were still asleep under the big oak tree. He sun shined upon Sango?s face causing her to awaken.

?What! Oi!, Sango screamed as she realized what had happened that night.

Inuyasha awoke to Sago?s scream and his golden eyes flew wide open in shock of what happened last night. Both stood up immediately and a slight blush appeared on their faces. Before the two could speak, they heard Kagome?s voice screaming out their names. Finally Kagome and the group found them and let out a sigh in relieve.

?Sango-chan! Inuyasha I?m glad your both alright.What happened?? Kagome said a bit curiously.

?I has left in the middle of the night to be alone?I felt sad just remembering Kohaku?and then Inuyasha came to make sure I won?t get hurt?? Sango said hoping Kagome and the gang would buy her lie.

?Oh I see?I hope you are feeling better Sango?? Kagome said in a caring voice.


My Notes: Ok?Tell me what you guys think..this is my fist ever Anime based fanfic?..if I get enough reviews..I?ll post up the second chapter?[/COLOR]

[Retribution]

I thought it was good. I don't exactly understand what happened to Sango, either I missed something or I didn't see enough of the anime to understand. Is her brother imprisoned? I think that may be it.

I found it rather short, and the description of people's emotions was a little flat. At least the story was interesting and easy to get into.

Other than that, I don't see why it's rated mature, unless things get more ... mature later on in the story.

[Persona]

[COLOR=DeepSkyBlue]I agree about the characters emotion being a little flat, but i gave it a try on writing a anime based fanfic. Yes Kohaku is being held captive by Nuraku and Nuraku uses her brother against her.The story was actually longer, but i cut it short reason being I didn't like the ending being so cliche like every other fanfic of Inu/Sango.But the 2nd chapter will be longer. Plus thank you for giving your honest opinion.[/COLOR]