Writing Culmination - [G]

[Bullet Theory]

Everything will eventually come to a peak
Where you know this will be alright
You thought that you were much too weak
But you're the strongest one tonight

So they can try to tell my otherwise
That this wasn't the right choice
They had better open their eyes
Because they will hear my voice

Now the Culmination of everything has become
The happiest I've ever been because I've found the one
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This is a poem I quickly wrote last night. I know it's not the best but constructive [size=2]criticism[/size] please.

[Persona]

The poem is short, but holds a meaning to it.

[QUOTE]Everything will eventually come to a peak
Where you know this will be alright
You thought that you were much too weak
But you're the strongest one tonight[/QUOTE]


I like this part..you tellem!

[QUOTE]So they can try to tell my otherwise
That this wasn't the right choice
They had better open their eyes
Because they will hear my voice[/QUOTE]

This part does need fixing..the last two lines somehow just don't go right..maybe it needs to be reworded.....or something..but i do get the point.

Aww but it was good...I love the last two lines of the ending....Anywho keep up the good work.