Bullet Theory Posted December 24, 2004 Share Posted December 24, 2004 [font=Franklin Gothic Medium]Here's a poem I wrote today. [color=DimGray]"Tonight..." Tonight will be my trial by fire This fight will be a tough one These actions cut me deep like a line of briars But in the end it will be us who have won Tonight is the fight of my life and it is for you I wouldn't have it any other way I will make things right and make them true We will make it to another day Now this is the dawn of our lives and we cannot quit We will draw this line and never leave it Tonight we shall break free from this all And we shall never fall... [color=Black] What'cha think?[/color] [/color][/font] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Persona Posted December 24, 2004 Share Posted December 24, 2004 I love the poem...so sweet...your a true romantic love! keep it up... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kaisha Posted December 24, 2004 Share Posted December 24, 2004 wow, awsome poem i love it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Sean Posted December 24, 2004 Share Posted December 24, 2004 [SIZE=1]Jake, my man. The cool guy. Writing poetry. Excellent. Pure Sex my friend, absolute sex. And the poem. Exactly the same. I don't know if this is what it's meant to mean. But I think it's that your pressured by love. Even though it means so much to you. But you finally get over the pressure, and a term I'll use 'run-away' with the girl you love so. Again Jake. Pure Sex.[/SIZE] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lady Asphyxia Posted January 4, 2005 Share Posted January 4, 2005 [font=Verdana][size=1]Fantastic poem! I love the passion that comes through. When I read it I get a story in my head of a couple leaping over the Beltane Fire, of someone taking exception to that and the couple having to fight in order to stay together. Just magic. [/size][/font] [font=Verdana][size=1][/size][/font] [font=Verdana][size=1]This is a really expresive poem, and it really leaves a lot of room for interpretation. There's [i]love[/i] in there and you can feel it, but at the same time it's slippery and the reader isn't sure exactly [i]how[/i] the love comes through. [/size][/font] [font=Verdana][size=1]Well done, again. ^_^[/size][/font] [font=Verdana][size=1][And, just a reminder to everyone that we do require [i]reason[/i] behind a post. You can't just say, "Good poem, I like it," as it doesn't fulfill OB's post requirements. ^.~][/size][/font] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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