de1ayna Posted January 12, 2005 Share Posted January 12, 2005 uuh oh! I was sad and mad out of my mind but then you came you gave me nothing but lines and lies i gave my self away I guess i was only thinking about "us" Maybe ill think twice another day? hows this? nevermind i dont care XD because i wont be visiting this site again untill i come up with a better poem or a story...XD dont bother to reply, because most likely i wont even see it :wigout: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeadSeraphim Posted January 16, 2005 Share Posted January 16, 2005 [COLOR=Indigo][SIZE=1][FONT=Arial]This poem seems... awkward. Like it's trying to be a love poem and a comedic poem at the same time. Which I guess might be the case, lol. ^_^; It seems somewhat too short, and the last line is completely wrong, sorry to say. It just doesn't work. I'm willing to bet the 'heh' is to blame. And yeah. It's an improvement over your last poem, though. ^_^[/FONT][/SIZE][/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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