Manga 3051: A manga

[Guest darkspirit]

I'm writing a manga called 3051. There are only 6 humans left (and a cat). We are on a spaceship in space. Contarry to what we thought there were other lifeforms in the Galaxy and they have taken over. We are the last alliance and we must fight. Basically this could be a video game, a manga, or an anime. Right now, I'm thinking video gamE!

Characters:

Keiko: A girl who knows all languages. She is 15 and very smart. She is Japanese

Kii: A Chinese guy who is a little smart. He is good looking but a bit headstrong He is 18

Saike: A Japanese kid. He is only 8, but a genuis.

Lana: An American girl who hates to harm anyone or anything. She is 14. She is suprisingly very good with a gun

Emma: An English 16 year old. She complains a lot and has a big crush on Kii.

Andre: He's from South America. He is a normal 12 year old and gets confused when Saike talks

Korougu: The cat. He's nice and smart. He likes Andre a lot.

So what do you think?

[EternalxDusk]

[FONT=Franklin Gothic Medium][SIZE=1][COLOR=RoyalBlue]The characters: have overused personalities, all of which are boring. If you're going to barrow a personality, at least pick better ones.

The Plot: is literally non-existant. You posted so little on the gist of the story that there isn't anything here to comment on.

I don't know why, but for some reason I get the feeling I've read this before.

Maybe it's the fact that you've mixed plots from several different manga and anime series, added in some empty drivvle and called it your own. [/FONT][/COLOR][/SIZE]

[SteelAngle Somi]

hhmmmmm sounds more like a veido game the way your characters are based.... and the plot line. you should put more back story to what you are talking about. if you need any help im great with storys unless you have more of a back story, and you did not post all of it witch you should have done.

[Guest darkspirit]

I think it would be best as a video game. You play as Keiko and you have to kill the asliens. It's and RPG with a lot of fighting and good scenes.

[Kei]

[color=darkblue]I think it would be best to take everyone else's advice and actually post a plot.

The only thing you have up now are very weak character descriptions. I would suggest that you try to flesh things out some more.[/color]

[Sheikahmon]

I think Final Fantasy only has two things your "game" idea lacks.
1) Well-developed character personalities
2) A plot

Don't give up, though.
Remember that the Final Fantasy series is made by a whole bunch of people, and few people are self-made geniuses.
Learn a bit about character development and plots, and you could probably turn this "game" from something only a dime store would stock into something that would at least sell with other anime maniacs.