Writing Barrier Broken[PG]

[TOTALIMMORTAL]

[FONT=Century Gothic][SIZE=2][COLOR=Black]I've been wanting to do this for awhile now. I've written quite a lot of poetry so I decided I'd share some of it. Please tell me what you think.[/COLOR][/SIZE][/FONT]

[FONT=Arial][SIZE=3][COLOR=DarkRed]I seek shelter inside myself,
And try not to question my own mental health,
I look in the mirror, and what do I see?
Everything this world has with the exception of me,
The ugly duckling, swan yet to appear,
Haze drawing thin, I see the end near,
Trapped under ice, I stare back at my cage,
Mind going numb as I bottle the rage,
Save it up for a better time and place,
Despite the fact it eats away at my face,
Twisting it, turning it, making me frown,
Head under water, I've long since begun to drown,
I try to fight Death's final kiss,
But my eyes have become adjusted to the darkness.....[/COLOR][/SIZE][/FONT]

[2010DigitalBoy]

That was really good! All of it sounded really cool, and much better than some of the other poems Ive read here (no offense to those people). I really like the fact that it rhymes, because I can't stand non-rhyming poetry. So, got any more?