Writing "Sanctuary" - PG

[Bullet Theory]

This song is a little darker than my usual writing style permits but...I hope you like it.

"Sanctuary"

Intro-
Lost in the world
Left Alone
Rotting away inside

Ch-
My Search goes on for my lost sanctuary
I'm slowly falling behind
My eyes are wired shut and there's nothing I can do
My search will never reach the end

Verse 1-
I lay my head down and close my eyes
Praying that somehow there will be blackend skies
So I will spread this virus throughout my soul
And harness that feeling and make it whole

My Search goes on for my lost sanctuary
I'm slowly falling behind
My eyes are wired shut and there's nothing I can do
My search will never reach the end

Verse 2-
My lungs are tired from all of my screaming
I'm fed up with this and now I am leaving
You only bring me pain...
But now I'm coming back again

My Search goes on for my lost sanctuary
I'm slowly falling behind
My eyes are wired shut and there's nothing I can do
My search will never reach the end

My Search goes on for my lost sanctuary
I'm slowly falling behind
My eyes are wired shut and there's nothing I can do
My search will never reach the end

Lost in the world
Left Alone
Rotting away inside...

I'll find that sanctuary
I'll search until I die...

[DeadSeraphim]

[COLOR=Indigo][SIZE=1][FONT=Arial]The lyrics of this song make me think it would go best to very distorted guitar, and doing the whole hard rock/metal thing, heh. But I could envision any lyrics to metal. XD

That aside, I like this. It's quite cool, and I like how you haven't bound yourself to making everything rhyme, as a lot of song writers I know do. The lead in and lead out bits are quite cool and fitting, too.[/FONT][/SIZE][/COLOR]

[Bullet Theory]

Why thank you. I usually tend to not strain to find a rhyme scheme throughout an entire song but I will occasionally. The feel of the song is more metalish, as you stated, and my band is working on the musical part to this song. Thanks again for the compliments!