Guest Sean Posted February 5, 2005 Share Posted February 5, 2005 [CENTER] [IMG]http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v450/Kyo-Sean/urbandecaychp1.jpg[/IMG] James threw his shotgun over his shoulder as he walked through the streets of OB. BoardWalk or Main Street as it?s commonly known, was used for the usual dealings of myO hits and dodgy deals. This was James? patrol tonight, a lot of people hid as they saw James walking down their way. But all he did was nod towards them as he walked right past them. A sigh of relief went through the group as he walked around the corner. He walked over to a bench and sat down beside another member of the city. ?Hello James? said the voice. ?Corey? James nodded slightly. ?Good night tonight, not been any flames, and the gangs are staying quiet for once.? Corey nodded ?Yes. For once, how long is it going to keep up James? How long is this silence going to last? Members are getting more scared to go out during the day now. Is that what you?re wanting?? James sat up from his seat and glared at Corey who had a hood pulled over his head. ?I run this city the best I can Corey! I can only exile a few members at a time so as not to drive people from moving and staying here.? Corey shook his head. ?Nobody wants to move here, not anymore, all we get walking through the gates of OB are n00bs looking for a fight.? James sighed as he recognised the truth. ?I know that?well I?m going to have to try even harder now, I?m not letting this place die on me. Before tonight is over, there will be at least 3 gangs exiled tonight. Me and Charles will make sure of that?say where is Charles?? Corey shrugged and replied. ?I seen him around 45 minutes ago, he was heading towards the Plaza.? James nodded, and was about to walk off. ?This place is getting worse everyday Corey, I sometimes don?t even feel safe, and I?ve got my Admin Rod. This place is going to get a right kick-in-the-teeth, I can promise you that.? Corey nodded as he watched James walk off into the distance. James turned around, nodded once more and continued around the corner. Corey shook his head, thinking of the city. Almost in some sort of day-dream, and that?s when it happened. A bag over his head, and an injection on his neck, he was knocked out. A group of four or five huddled around Corey and ran off. Meanwhile, James was making his way to the Plaza as it?s known to the general public, no-one knew where it was, and if that sneaky person got around to finding where it was, they needed a password to get in. Only Corey and Alan know where it is, and they can?t get in. James slipped through the back alley and down several different streets before he got to the door he rapped on the door 4 times. The peep hole opened up, and two eyes looked out. ?Password? ?*********? ?Ok, you?re in? James nodded and walked through the door that had zoomed upwards. Charles was sipping with a cup of coffee in his hands, and his Admin Rod on the table. Charles nodded and went back to sipping his coffee. ?They?ve been no fights tonight, so far. Just finished patrol? James said, breaking the aqward silence that had fell upon the room as James sat down. The silence appeared again, but then Charles stood up and poured more coffee. ?Want some?? he asked. James nodded his head, but a smash was heard out on the streets, and a scream of a voice. James and Charles looked up, and ran to the door, both letting themselves out; they ran towards the sound of the cry. They finally got to the commotion, all the way back to the bench James and Corey had been sitting all around 10 minutes ago. James found a girl sobbing in the middle. ?Methuselah?? James spoke. Methuselah looked up, tears streaming down her face. ?You can call me Jamie?and it?s Corey?James, the gangs have taken him!? James looked shocked. He had only been with him 10 minutes back. James and Charles surveyed the scene, and saw the writing carved into the bench. Corey Is No Longer One Of You --iNuYasHa998 James shuddered and walked away. Charles still looking at the bench. A lot of OtakuCity had appeared when they had heard the scream. Kitty ran over to James, he turned around to her. ?We?re calling Alan in, he knows them more than the Moderators do, and he?s more professional with his hunting. Plus, a respectable Admin like me shooting away at n00bs. Would I do that?? James smirked walking over to Charles. He nodded when James told him to get Alan; he would know what to do. Charles turned around before leaving and asked James ?Are you sure it?s safe getting Alan back out? He could go on a spree. You know how long it took to get him!? James simply nodded, and walked away. A Molotov cocktail went flying into the group around the bench. James scowled at the site of it. ?Flamers?? he grunted. And ran off in the direction it came from, the only area open in OtakuCity this late at night was the library, also known as the archives. The library had full time staff working every hour of the day, and was barely ever used unless for reference of a past memory. James ran towards the archives of OtakuCity, the streets were black, no lights around this area were on apart from the mass of light usually shining out of the library doors. But there was no light, no light to reflect of James? ship-shiny boots, no light at all. His long black leather jacket swishing as he slowed down, the doors to the library looked so black. He opened it, no lights on inside either. Strange. Sniggering came from all around him, vibrating all around the room, taunting him with laughs. He walked over to the main desk, looking down some of the aisles. He seen the bright white eyes of the n00bs shining down them. But still he walked towards the main desk. Looking from side to side he lept over the desk and saw one Sol-Blade lying underneath the desk shaking. ?Sol?what happened? What did they do?? ?They stormed in, threw a flame out, and ran into the aisles with a body or well something that looked like a body over their heads? he said, barely a whisper. James nodded and walked into the aisles, he loaded his shotgun with 3 sedatives. Each would inject one n00b with enough tranquilliser to dose an elephant for a few hours. They would be out for weeks, but they would be getting exiled anyway. N00b: Li3k 0MfG!!!11+Shift. J3h h4S t3h GUN!!!!11111 James glares down an aisle to see a lone n00b, the n00bs bright white eyes looking so innocent, but so did every n00b. They were always so innocent until the spam came, then they went downhill. James had clearly put the laws of the city on billboards all around, but they chose to ignore them. The n00b giggled like the delirious spammer of which it was. But then suddenly the n00b launched a spam grenade towards James. Exploding, it covered the area in a black/brown substance that looked like meat, but everyone knew it wasn?t. James hid at the side of the aisle, but ran towards the unrepentant n00b through the smoke. He fired into the darkness, and heard a deep thud, like a body hitting wood. James smirked and saw what he wanted, the n00b having a fit on the ground. James asked ?Where have you taken Corey?? ?NEVER!!!!11? the n00b shouted. And then the fit stopped and all was silent, the n00bs must have fled once they heard the shotgun and the spam grenade. James shook his head at the sight that the small battle has left behind. He picked the n00b up, and walked back to the staff forum. He would be interrogated once he had woken up, and then he would be exiled out of the city, for life probably. ?We have to get Corey back?we have to.? James sighed as he said this aloud. The n00b spewed on James black suit. James eyes crossed, then galred at the n00b hung over his shoulder. ?Bitch, you?re dead when you wake up.?[/CENTER] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Ezekiel Posted February 5, 2005 Share Posted February 5, 2005 [COLOR=DarkRed][SIZE=1]I told you on MSN but I'll tell you here again. I really liked this and I'm glad you're not going for the comedy approach. I do enjoy your parodies but serious is always the way to go for me. I'm am also elated that I?m in this chapter, I hope that dear Methuselah will be appearing again ^_~ Looking forward to Chapter 2, keep 'em coming.[/SIZE][/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... DeadSeraphim Posted February 5, 2005 Share Posted February 5, 2005 [COLOR=Indigo][SIZE=1][FONT=Arial]Alan, a n00b Hunter? No, never. :rolleyes: Seriously though, it's good, even if your languag does get a bit repitious in places. Especially in that first paragraph. There was a lot of walking going on. :P[/FONT][/SIZE][/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Retribution Posted February 5, 2005 Share Posted February 5, 2005 Whoa. I like this alot. I can't wait for chapter 2 to hit the Anthology. In any event, you may want to throw in more details, things seem like they're moving a little too fast. More dialouge and descriptions to make things more involving. Personalities would be good to, so that we get to "know" the characters. ^.^ But I [B]<3[/B] it so far. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Guest Sean Posted February 5, 2005 Share Posted February 5, 2005 [center][img]http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v450/Kyo-Sean/urbandecaychp2.jpg[/img] Alan walked out of the cold cell, both hands cuffed together, he was led by the prison guard, Zidargh. Alan was locked up in the highest and most guarded vault in the OtakuCity. Led down through a mass of halls, all with security gates which had a 16 digit plus code in it. Alan shook around, but even if he did escape Zidargh?s hands he still had a long way to go. And that long way was full of more prison guards. So Alan finally gave up as they reached the final gate. Zidargh stopped at the final gate, and punched in the code. He then pulled out the small pistol in his holster. He motioned for Alan to go through the gate, where Charles was waiting. Alan humbly followed, but as a goodbye present, he spat directly into Zidarghs face. With that he walked through and then joined Charles. They exchanged a nod. ?What do you need me for this time?? Alan growled as they walked away from OtakuCity Prison. ?You haven?t heard? Corey?s been kidnapped by n00bs? Charles said. Alan?s eyes closed slowly as he glared in front of him. ?Fucking n00bs, if you let me do my job you wouldn?t be in this predicament.? ?You were going after n00bs, taking our jobs, you don?t know how annoying it is. But if you help us get Corey back, you?re out for good, and you can hunt.? ?Interesting, but I would like to take that offer and rise it.? Charles was the one glaring now, they were letting him out, he would be able to hunt all he wanted, but he wanted more. ?What is it? You know we could lock you back up if you don?t agree? Alan laughed at the prospect, ?You wouldn?t lock me back up, you wouldn?t get me out for anything, unless it was large scale.? Charles cursed under his breath, he was right. James and Charles would have to give into what he wanted, this could cost them a lot, knowing Alan, it would be in conjunction with the myO and visits. ?I?m wanting a legalised position to hunt them, I want my own group, Juu is already under my wing, but we?re not legalised in OtakuCity. She could get arrested, not what I want. We only want to help rid of spam and n00bs.? Charles pondered on the idea, it wouldn?t do any harm, and it would possibly make the Moderator and Admins? job a little easier. But a whole new member group. But he would have to give it to them, there was no other choice. ?Ok, it?ll be done as soon as Corey is safe, and the n00bs responsible are exiled from OtakuCity.? ?Good enough for me.? Alan replied with a smirk on his face. He knew they would give it to him, he was there last choice, only because of his past encounters. He knew that he was there best chance. But where to start, thoughts running through Alan?s head. Charles and Alan walked for quite a distance, OtakuCity Prison was quite far from the centre of the city. They seen weak n00bs lying around them as they lost energy from a night of spamming. They would be resting for some time, Charles glared at them, suspecting the mall for Corey?s disappearance. A rustle came from behind the two characters, they both turned around. The rustling stopped, and a tall figure walked out from the wooded area that surrounded them. Charles laughed as he realised who the mysterious character was. ?Mr. Jokopoko, we meet again? Charles laughed. ?Yes, yes we do. I?m here about business Charles, and why is he been let out? pointing towards the figure of Alan who had a hand squeezing tightly on his shoulder so he wouldn?t run at Jokopoko. ?What business would this be? And we let him out because of the epidemic at hand.? ?Well, whilst you have been travelling, I?ve been gathering information.? ?Information?? ?Yes, we will talk in private though. Meet me in the Lounge when you get back.? Charles nodded, and Jokopoko disappeared into the tree?s one more. Charles nodded again, and looked up to the sky which was turning into a dark grey. It was about to rain a storm, and Charles knew it. A crackle came from Charles PM Box. James had just sent him a message. [I]They?ve tried it again. This one escaped from them though. She?s going to tell us the story. Get here with Alan now. --James[/I] Charles growled as the walked on, Alan was persistently asking what it said but Charles chose to ignore him and keep up the pace. They were approaching the registrar office which was the just before the Main Gates to the centre of OtakuCity. Charles waved his Admin badge at Chaos who was working in the office at the time. He ticked off Charles? and Alan?s name as they walked through the gate. They had finally entered the city, after around a day. But Charles kept up his pace as they walked through the city. They ended up at the library, where James was sitting inside with a young girl. Charles couldn?t make it who she was, but Alan knew. ?Hevn!? he shouted. She turned around, and he saw tears streaming down her eyes, but her face glowed when she seen Alan?s face. She was pretty beaten down, the n00bs didn?t go easy on her. She had a black eye growing, and the skin around her neck was marked. ?They tried to strangle her.? James said, as he saw Alan looking at her neck. ?She just managed to get away, I was jus around the corner and her aswell, so the n00bs got scared when they saw me.? ?Fucking n00bs? Alan spat, Charles had just let Alan go, his cuffs just taken off. He ran over to Hevn who was still shivering and still crying. She had a large white towel wrapped around her. Alan attempted to comfort her, her crying stopped slowly. Charles and James went outside to talk. ?What fucking n00b goes after females?? Charles started. ?One wrong in the head, and there are a lot of them around these days.? Charles nodded in agreement, then remembered what Jokopoko had said to him. ?Listen James, I have to go, it?s important, try and get something from Hevn, anything, appearance, voice, anything.? James nodded but looked annoyed at the same time. ?Nothing is more important than this Charles, nothing, but if you think there is then go.? Charles shook his head and took off for the Lounge. Rain had just started and was making puddles all around him. But still he ran, rain bouncing off everything and colliding with anything that got in its way. He finally made it to the lounge where he saw Jokopoko sitting with a cup of coffee. The place was empty, and it was mid-afternoon. The only person occupying the space was Panda who was working. Charles greeted Panda, and then went to sit beside Jokopoko was had a relative smirk on his face. Charles sat down at the table which was placed at the back corner of the Lounge. ?You know I could just ask Panda to leave us for a little while so that we can talk, we don?t need to site up the back.? Charles said. Joko waved it off. ?So what is this business we?re talking about?? Jokopoko?s face was now as serious as ever, he took out a piece of paper and wrote something on it. He then passed it towards the confused Charles. Charles read the piece of paper. Then looked up at Jokopoko. ?You mean it?s?? ?Yes? ?But how?? Joko paused, then his eyes widened. ?GET DOWN!? he roared. Charles jamp to the side, and Jokopoko pulled out of his sheath, Japanese Steel, with the markings of a trained assassin engraved into the metal. Plunging it deep into the leaping n00bs body, no sound was made. Panda wasn?t even in the room. Joko pulled the sword out of the wretched carcass of the bleeding n00b. He cleaned it on the n00bs shirt and walked back to Charles, he helped him up. ?Guess they don?t want you to know then?? Charles nodded.[/center] [size=1][color=DarkRed]Thanks muchly for all the marvelous comments made. I'm sorry Alan, and Hevn for that in there, but I can assure you that vengance is someting to look out for in Chapter 3. Again sorry, but this will be part of something major. Comments if you please?[/color][/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Create an account or sign in to comment You need to be a member in order to leave a comment Create an account Sign up for a new account in our community. It's easy! Register a new account Sign in Already have an account? Sign in here. Sign In Now Share More sharing options... Followers 0 Go to topic listing
Ezekiel Posted February 5, 2005 Share Posted February 5, 2005 [COLOR=DarkRed][SIZE=1]I told you on MSN but I'll tell you here again. I really liked this and I'm glad you're not going for the comedy approach. I do enjoy your parodies but serious is always the way to go for me. I'm am also elated that I?m in this chapter, I hope that dear Methuselah will be appearing again ^_~ Looking forward to Chapter 2, keep 'em coming.[/SIZE][/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeadSeraphim Posted February 5, 2005 Share Posted February 5, 2005 [COLOR=Indigo][SIZE=1][FONT=Arial]Alan, a n00b Hunter? No, never. :rolleyes: Seriously though, it's good, even if your languag does get a bit repitious in places. Especially in that first paragraph. There was a lot of walking going on. :P[/FONT][/SIZE][/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Retribution Posted February 5, 2005 Share Posted February 5, 2005 Whoa. I like this alot. I can't wait for chapter 2 to hit the Anthology. In any event, you may want to throw in more details, things seem like they're moving a little too fast. More dialouge and descriptions to make things more involving. Personalities would be good to, so that we get to "know" the characters. ^.^ But I [B]<3[/B] it so far. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Sean Posted February 5, 2005 Share Posted February 5, 2005 [center][img]http://img.photobucket.com/albums/v450/Kyo-Sean/urbandecaychp2.jpg[/img] Alan walked out of the cold cell, both hands cuffed together, he was led by the prison guard, Zidargh. Alan was locked up in the highest and most guarded vault in the OtakuCity. Led down through a mass of halls, all with security gates which had a 16 digit plus code in it. Alan shook around, but even if he did escape Zidargh?s hands he still had a long way to go. And that long way was full of more prison guards. So Alan finally gave up as they reached the final gate. Zidargh stopped at the final gate, and punched in the code. He then pulled out the small pistol in his holster. He motioned for Alan to go through the gate, where Charles was waiting. Alan humbly followed, but as a goodbye present, he spat directly into Zidarghs face. With that he walked through and then joined Charles. They exchanged a nod. ?What do you need me for this time?? Alan growled as they walked away from OtakuCity Prison. ?You haven?t heard? Corey?s been kidnapped by n00bs? Charles said. Alan?s eyes closed slowly as he glared in front of him. ?Fucking n00bs, if you let me do my job you wouldn?t be in this predicament.? ?You were going after n00bs, taking our jobs, you don?t know how annoying it is. But if you help us get Corey back, you?re out for good, and you can hunt.? ?Interesting, but I would like to take that offer and rise it.? Charles was the one glaring now, they were letting him out, he would be able to hunt all he wanted, but he wanted more. ?What is it? You know we could lock you back up if you don?t agree? Alan laughed at the prospect, ?You wouldn?t lock me back up, you wouldn?t get me out for anything, unless it was large scale.? Charles cursed under his breath, he was right. James and Charles would have to give into what he wanted, this could cost them a lot, knowing Alan, it would be in conjunction with the myO and visits. ?I?m wanting a legalised position to hunt them, I want my own group, Juu is already under my wing, but we?re not legalised in OtakuCity. She could get arrested, not what I want. We only want to help rid of spam and n00bs.? Charles pondered on the idea, it wouldn?t do any harm, and it would possibly make the Moderator and Admins? job a little easier. But a whole new member group. But he would have to give it to them, there was no other choice. ?Ok, it?ll be done as soon as Corey is safe, and the n00bs responsible are exiled from OtakuCity.? ?Good enough for me.? Alan replied with a smirk on his face. He knew they would give it to him, he was there last choice, only because of his past encounters. He knew that he was there best chance. But where to start, thoughts running through Alan?s head. Charles and Alan walked for quite a distance, OtakuCity Prison was quite far from the centre of the city. They seen weak n00bs lying around them as they lost energy from a night of spamming. They would be resting for some time, Charles glared at them, suspecting the mall for Corey?s disappearance. A rustle came from behind the two characters, they both turned around. The rustling stopped, and a tall figure walked out from the wooded area that surrounded them. Charles laughed as he realised who the mysterious character was. ?Mr. Jokopoko, we meet again? Charles laughed. ?Yes, yes we do. I?m here about business Charles, and why is he been let out? pointing towards the figure of Alan who had a hand squeezing tightly on his shoulder so he wouldn?t run at Jokopoko. ?What business would this be? And we let him out because of the epidemic at hand.? ?Well, whilst you have been travelling, I?ve been gathering information.? ?Information?? ?Yes, we will talk in private though. Meet me in the Lounge when you get back.? Charles nodded, and Jokopoko disappeared into the tree?s one more. Charles nodded again, and looked up to the sky which was turning into a dark grey. It was about to rain a storm, and Charles knew it. A crackle came from Charles PM Box. James had just sent him a message. [I]They?ve tried it again. This one escaped from them though. She?s going to tell us the story. Get here with Alan now. --James[/I] Charles growled as the walked on, Alan was persistently asking what it said but Charles chose to ignore him and keep up the pace. They were approaching the registrar office which was the just before the Main Gates to the centre of OtakuCity. Charles waved his Admin badge at Chaos who was working in the office at the time. He ticked off Charles? and Alan?s name as they walked through the gate. They had finally entered the city, after around a day. But Charles kept up his pace as they walked through the city. They ended up at the library, where James was sitting inside with a young girl. Charles couldn?t make it who she was, but Alan knew. ?Hevn!? he shouted. She turned around, and he saw tears streaming down her eyes, but her face glowed when she seen Alan?s face. She was pretty beaten down, the n00bs didn?t go easy on her. She had a black eye growing, and the skin around her neck was marked. ?They tried to strangle her.? James said, as he saw Alan looking at her neck. ?She just managed to get away, I was jus around the corner and her aswell, so the n00bs got scared when they saw me.? ?Fucking n00bs? Alan spat, Charles had just let Alan go, his cuffs just taken off. He ran over to Hevn who was still shivering and still crying. She had a large white towel wrapped around her. Alan attempted to comfort her, her crying stopped slowly. Charles and James went outside to talk. ?What fucking n00b goes after females?? Charles started. ?One wrong in the head, and there are a lot of them around these days.? Charles nodded in agreement, then remembered what Jokopoko had said to him. ?Listen James, I have to go, it?s important, try and get something from Hevn, anything, appearance, voice, anything.? James nodded but looked annoyed at the same time. ?Nothing is more important than this Charles, nothing, but if you think there is then go.? Charles shook his head and took off for the Lounge. Rain had just started and was making puddles all around him. But still he ran, rain bouncing off everything and colliding with anything that got in its way. He finally made it to the lounge where he saw Jokopoko sitting with a cup of coffee. The place was empty, and it was mid-afternoon. The only person occupying the space was Panda who was working. Charles greeted Panda, and then went to sit beside Jokopoko was had a relative smirk on his face. Charles sat down at the table which was placed at the back corner of the Lounge. ?You know I could just ask Panda to leave us for a little while so that we can talk, we don?t need to site up the back.? Charles said. Joko waved it off. ?So what is this business we?re talking about?? Jokopoko?s face was now as serious as ever, he took out a piece of paper and wrote something on it. He then passed it towards the confused Charles. Charles read the piece of paper. Then looked up at Jokopoko. ?You mean it?s?? ?Yes? ?But how?? Joko paused, then his eyes widened. ?GET DOWN!? he roared. Charles jamp to the side, and Jokopoko pulled out of his sheath, Japanese Steel, with the markings of a trained assassin engraved into the metal. Plunging it deep into the leaping n00bs body, no sound was made. Panda wasn?t even in the room. Joko pulled the sword out of the wretched carcass of the bleeding n00b. He cleaned it on the n00bs shirt and walked back to Charles, he helped him up. ?Guess they don?t want you to know then?? Charles nodded.[/center] [size=1][color=DarkRed]Thanks muchly for all the marvelous comments made. I'm sorry Alan, and Hevn for that in there, but I can assure you that vengance is someting to look out for in Chapter 3. Again sorry, but this will be part of something major. Comments if you please?[/color][/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options... Create an account or sign in to comment You need to be a member in order to leave a comment Create an account Sign up for a new account in our community. It's easy! Register a new account Sign in Already have an account? Sign in here. Sign In Now Share More sharing options... Followers 0
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