Discuss Accolytes: Rebirth [M-LSV]

[JT Darkfire]

Please read and respond to this thoroughly, so I can make it the best it can be.

Okay, everyone, while this is nowhere near perfect, it is an upgraded version of Accolyte: The Beginning. Let me know how you feel with this back story. If you have any suggestions on how to improve it, just let me know by posting on this page.

Oh, and just for the record, there is a method to my madness. I changed the name because I feel the whole story of the world of Colegria would best be portrayed in three parts. Rebirth will be the beginning of the story while Accolyte: The Beginning will be a prequel to this story. The final installment will be released, but its title has yet to be created.

Okay, enough rambling. Let the story begin!


[I]Long ago, Colegria was a beautiful place. The world teemed with life. Powerful mages kept the peace, healed the sick, and brought life to the land. Everything was undeniably perfect.

That is, until the day the magic died.

Thousands of mages fled Colegria, never to return, and they took the magic with them, leaving the world to fend for itself. No one knows exactly why or when this happened, or even if it happened. The true story of the paradise that once was Colegria was lost in time, and had become nothing more than a mere children?s bedtime story.

Millennia later, Colegria separated into two factions: The Empire of Torcos and The Empire of Largos, two warring nations whose sole purpose seemed the destruction of their rival. The cause of the war was unknown, but that never stopped it.

The two nations continued their struggle, victorious at times, while failing others. The Torcan Empire managed to maintain their position via tactical prowess, but Largos was slowly gaining the upper hand, their technological advances an incredible asset to their arsenals. Torcos was barely managing to survive their deadly encounters, and their time was running out.

It was then that the tides of war turned. The Torcan army had a new weapon in their hands, a weapon that would prove to be the downfall of The Empire of Largos.

They had rediscovered the lost arts, brought back magic, and ensured their victory.

The Torcan army marched into battle with newfound confidence. Largos charged recklessly, expecting it to be a battle like any other.

They were wrong.

Wave after wave of Largan soldiers fell to the onslaught of Torcan sorcerers. Nearly the entire Largan army fell that fateful day. The surviving troops retreated, and Larcos surrendered. The war was finally over.

One would assume that the end of the war would have made Colegria a more peaceful place, but this was not so. The Emperor was a tyrant, and he ruled through fear. His cruel methods eventually led to the creation of The Rebellion, a group of ex-Largans dedicated to overthrowing the throne. This ragtag group of warriors would never be powerful enough to defeat the well-armed sorcerers of the regime, so a secret weapon was created.

A special task force was designed to combat the magic-wielders of the Torcan Empire. Through advanced cybernetics and genetic engineering, each operative of this force was enhanced to their optimal physical and mental capabilities. The soldiers were also gifted via inhibitor chip magic capabilities and mastery of an element.

These powerful soldiers are known as the Accolytes, and this is their story.[/I]



Well, what do you think? That is the backstory and teaser for Accolytes: Rebirth. While some things may not seem to bear any significance to the plot, I assure you that they do. If I do breathe life into these words, I will probably use the chapter method for posting.
[B]Off Topic:[/B] While this story has a scifi feel, I assure you that The Beginning will be more of a fantasy.
Please, any tips or constuctive critcism would be greatly appreciated.