Darker Alucard Posted September 3, 2005 Share Posted September 3, 2005 I Dream't i was an Asshole Really the worst of them all God Intended Me to Fall To the Hell, Last Call. So I went in the plain In the middle of pouring rain see my life had been so lame and then i woke up and my life was never the same. This is a song-like poem Criticize your way through. Your Minion Darker Alucard Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sandy Posted September 3, 2005 Share Posted September 3, 2005 I'm sorry, but this whole poem was kind of lame... Poetry is something beyond words that rhyme, although it's the most basic form of it. You should also have rhythm and some consistency in the poem, not just phrases that end in a rhyming words put together. If I have to try to say something positive about this poem, I'd say it has a certain amusing irony in it. Sorry if I sound too hard, but I reckon you don't place this piece among the best poems of all times either... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darker Alucard Posted September 6, 2005 Author Share Posted September 6, 2005 jeje i actually put it in a journal i call the bad poem compilation from Daniel Afonso (me). But i wanned to see wht ya thought about it. anyway anymore criticism would be welcome. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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