Bloodseeker Posted October 22, 2005 Share Posted October 22, 2005 I decided that to write a mixed anime CYOF. People that hang out on the GFAQs boards might be familiar with the term. Here?s how it?s going to work: I?m going write a story. At the end of each chapter, I?m going give you several options, as well as the option for the story to do something that?s not on the list. Each time before I start a new chapter, I?ll count the votes from the previous chapter and use the option that got the most votes. I?ll be making some changes to the characters to make them fit my story, but I?ll try to stay somewhat loyal to their original counterparts. Its not really an RPG, but its not really a normal fanfic either. And since the anthology board is practically dead, I thought that I?d put it here. BTW, be sure to vote at the end of each chapter. I?m not going to waste my time on a story that nobody?s reading, and I?ll have no idea that you?re reading if you don?t vote. Also, don?t be afraid to give feedback. If there?s a big flaw in my writing style, or if something about the story is really bugging you, or if you?re just really enjoying the story, let me know. This first entry is going to be a bit long, since I want to get the beginning over with, so bear with it. [B]Chapter 1: Enter Eric Martin[/B] [i]It was great to finally have a chance to relax after so many weeks of being on the move. True safe havens like this one had become a rare find since this whole mess started. It was a nice mansion? the walls and much of the furniture was made of obviously old yet very well kept wood (looked like mahogany). Many things were made of marble, including the kitchen and bathroom floors. The extremely powerful incantations on the walls and gates kept the average individual from even perceiving the mansion, and kept the stronger-than-average individuals out. You sunk comfortably into a black leather couch that formed a crescent moon around a big, round, wooden table.. ?So what?s your deal anyways?? You looked up across the table at Tessa, who looked quiet comfortable sitting on her end of the couch. ?You really are an odd case. You?re obviously pretty strong, yet I was unable to find any information on you? not even a brief mention in the Paladin database! And they have information on everyone and everything related to the supernatural! Honestly, I?ve never seen any group or individual of any significance that didn?t have a full file in the Paladin database!? ?Well I?m relatively new to the game, and I?ve been trying to stay under the radar for obvious reasons. Add the two together, and they probably haven?t had enough time to collect any worthwhile information on me, much less file a full report.? A maid sat a cheeseburger and a Dr. Pepper on the table. You laughed. ?I would have thought that such a nice place would serve rich people food!? ?The young mistress informed me that you prefer this cheap food over expensive food, so I assumed that this would be along the lines of what you wanted. Bu I can use a good dinner if you don?t want it.? ?Nah, your assumption was right. I would have turned down dinner if it were that expensive crap. Honestly, how can people make a diet out of expensive alcohol and fish eggs? ?Speaking of ?the young mistress?, where is she exactly? Or Yusuke for that matter?? ?Yusuke seems to be enjoying the arcade and the young mistress has secluded herself in her room. She?s probably resting.? ?Yeah, that?s probably it.? More like hopefully it? Tessa interrupted. ?It looks like we?re going to have a little free time on our hands, and I?m really curious as to how you got involved in this situation. I don?t see where this should be between anybody but Mythril and the Illuminati?? ?Circumstances demanded that I step in. I guess that I?ll start with my life directly prior to becoming something other than ?normal?.?[/i] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodseeker Posted October 22, 2005 Author Share Posted October 22, 2005 ?Ugh?? The alarm clock blasted static, which seemed to be the only noise that could wake Eric up without startling the crap out of him. He had to be at work in two hours. ?Maybe I should have gone to bed a few hours earlier.? He had taken quiet the journey the day before, walking all over the city. His legs were still chaffed, and he was exhausted as all hell. But he still had to go to work. ?Your shirt?s dirty, your pants are dirty, your visor?s dirty? you?re filthy! Go home and come back after you clean your ass up! As one of our employees, you?re a representative of this company! As the man working the cash register, your face is the company?s face in the eyes of the customer! Now look, I want to help you, but in order for me to do that, you need to follow our policies and help yourself! If we allowed all of our employees to come to work looking like that, the customers?? This stupid manager was delusional! His pants had a little dirt on them, but he definitely wasn?t filthy. This wasn?t the first time that his manager had yelled at him over something really stupid. Just the other day, he?d gotten chewed out for holding the broom wrong (even though he was getting the job done quickly and thoroughly). And not too long before that, he?d gotten sent home for having a little bit of stubble on his chin. And before that, he was getting yelled at for not refilling the already half-way full drink station. The manager got like this whenever something wasn?t absolutely perfect, and it was beginning to become a real pain. The other employees weren?t helping either. Only two of them would even talk to him (a kind of nerdy yet funny guy and a cute Mexican chick). The rest all gave him the cold shoulder. On top of all this, his hours were steadily decreasing and he was only getting paid minimum wage. ??knew what had to happen when you signed that ap-? ?You know what, I?ve had enough this job! Brian, Brenda, sorry? but I?m out of here.? ?FINE! I?ll send your check in a few days. Get out.? Eric went home and decided to call his friend Roy over for a Halo 2 session. ?Tough break, but sometimes things like this happen. Leave it and move on.? ?Yeah, I intend to. I?ve already started looking for another job.? Eric shot Roy in the head with the sniper rifle. ?Grr? Well, at least your Halo skills haven?t declined any.? ?I?m kind of happy to be out of that job though. You knew that I?ve been thinking about quitting for a while anyways. I hated that job. I really did.? ?Yeah, so I?ve heard. That?s enough Halo? what do you say we go and torment Wesley for a while? I hear that he recently told the teacher on Lisa for turning him down on a date?? ?You?d think that you?d learn how to take care of your own problems by high school! I still haven?t forgiven him for convincing the school board to ban handheld gaming consoles, so I?m up for it.? Eric wasn?t a bully, but this kid had caused him a lot of problems in his school life. It was Wesley?s tendency to snitch that had put Eric on detention for skipping Mr. Walter?s class, that same tendency that got one of Eric?s best friends expelled for defending himself against Los Beaner Squad with Baggy Pants and Red Bandanas (stupid wannabe gang banging pieces of sh*t), and most recently, Wesley?s report that got gaming and manga banned from the school grounds. The fact that he was a scrawny nerd that chose not to work out didn?t justify any of this. All of these were fairly recent, and he was about to pay? again. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodseeker Posted October 22, 2005 Author Share Posted October 22, 2005 ?Hey Wesley, what the hell were you trying achieve by getting gaming and manga banned from the school?? ?It?s for your own good. Videogames and manga are violent, they corrupt your mind, and they?re definitely not appropriate for a house of learning.? Both Eric and Roy were pretty aggravated by this. Eric got especially p*ssed? ?What we choose to do during our spare time is not your business! If you don?t like it, that?s fine, but don?t take action against it just because you find it distasteful!? Wesley smiled arrogantly. ?Well obviously it is my business, because videogames have turned you both into violent degenerates. And not only you, but most of the school.? ?They?re only violent towards you because you pull this kind of bullsh*t! You bring it on yourself! If you didn?t go around snitching on everybody and trying to get everything that you see as inappropriate banned, they wouldn?t attack you!? Roy stepped forward. ?And even if they did, there would always be people like us that wouldn?t that slide.? ?Exactly!? ?I?m not going to let you guys stop me from doing the right thing!? ?Its not the right thing! Authority isn?t always right!? ?They are here!? Roy shook his head. ?Idiot.? ?So you?re not even willing to look at things from our angle? And you call yourself an intellectual?? ?Why would I want to see things from the perspective of a couple of barbarians?? ?It?s obvious that he?s not listening. Let?s just pound this guy already.? ?Agreed. Hey, you don?t mind if I take him by myself, right?? Roy sighed. ?Alright, I beat him down less than a month ago anyways.? ?STAY AWAY! I?LL GET YOU BOTH EXPELLED!? ?Shut up.? Eric punched Wesley in the stomach then picked him up and threw him. Weasly screamed like a little girl before his head slammed hard against the rough brick wall. Weasly picked himself up on all fours. ?Oh? oh?? Pathetic noises from a pathetic boy. Eric kicked him in the mouth. ?This really is pathetic. Are you even going to try to help yourself?? ?Ahhh, ahhhh?? ?You?re not a man, you?re not even a boy? you?re a f*cking rat. You?re the rat that the other rats sharpen their teeth on because you?re too scared to do anything about it. How do people even turn out like that?? Eric stomped on his stomach. ?You?re not worth any more of my time. I?ve really enjoyed this bit of dialog, rat.? ?See you at school, punk. Don?t ruin everyone else?s free time, and things like this won?t happen to you.? Eric would have been lying if he said that he didn?t enjoy that. It was starting to get dark, and Roy?s family apparently insisted that he go with them to visit his older sister, so he and Eric parted ways for the night. Eric always thought that it was weird that even though he?d known Roy for three years, he?d never once been to his house or met his family. Well, if Roy wanted him to meet his family, he?d introduce them. Mom wasn?t home, so Eric made himself a grilled cheese for dinner. Good stuff. He spent the next three hours crashed out on the couch? Eric was woken up by his mom coming through the door. Eric yawned. ?Hey mom, what?s up?? His mom didn?t answer. ?What kept you out so late?? Eric felt a sudden chill down his spine? but it was weird? it was his spine? but it wasn?t? ?Fine, be that way. I WAS going to offer to make you dinner...? Eric got up and checked the temperature. 75 degrees? perfect. Then why did he feel so cold? ?Hey mom, does it feel cold in here to you? Think that AC?s broken? ? ??? This was getting weird. Why was his mom standing near the door not saying anything? And why was that wierd chill spreading throughout his entire body? And? why did mom look so pale? [b][SIZE=2]Okay, this is definitely NOT normal! WTF is going on?! This is bad! I can?t shake the feeling that something terrible is about to happen here. An injustice too terrible for words? The chill?s spreading? I need to take action while I still can. But what can a guy like me do in a situation like this? A. There?s obviously something wrong with mom? I?ll put on a sweater and drive my mom to the hospital. B. I?ll call an exorcist. Weird stuff like this is their field. It?s the most logical choice. C. The chill?s getting really bad? I need to get out of here... I don?t have time to take mom with me, and she?s obviously not herself. Who knows what she might do if I try to take her! I?m so sorry, mom? D. I?ll just turn the heater up and watch some TV. It?s obviously my imagination. Mom's just messing around. (I hope?) E. Other, please specify.[/SIZE][/b] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ozymandius Jones Posted October 22, 2005 Share Posted October 22, 2005 [COLOR=DarkOrange]Hello, Bloodseeker. Interesting concept you've got here. But there's a few things wrong. 1.[B] Triple Posting:[/B] [I]Double[/I] posting is not permitted, so why would [i]triple[/i] be ok? Short answer: it's not. The only, [i]only[/i] place triple posting is permitted is in the Anthology, when what you're posting is too long for one post. 2.[B] Not an RP.[/B] You mentioned this already; but the fact that it's "not an actual fanfic" does not prevent you from posting it in the Anthology forum. It is not "kinda dead" - someone posted there less than twenty four hours ago. Feel free to repost it there; but until then [B]Thread Locked[/B][/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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