Writing Bleach fanfic - PG(V/L)

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[FONT=Palatino Linotype][COLOR=Orange] A Bleach Fic

Rukia gazed across the classroom at the sleepy looking blonde haired boy. She knew just from looking at him, that he was exhausted, and it was taking all of his energy not to fall asleep right then and there. She couldn?t blame him. They had been out until the early morning the night before, looking for a hollow that continued to disappear and reappear on her radar. By the time they had caught up to the creature, it had been at least 3 in the morning, and after finding it, Ichigo was still required to battle it. His eyes slowly eased themselves shut, and his head drooped forward until it met with his desk. He snapped out of his daze immediately, and rubbed the spot where his forehead had connected with the desk. After another moment, he realized he was being examined by Rukia, and turned his head to glare at her, as was the normal facial expression for the teen. Her eyes flickered with amusement at his reaction, and she turned away immediately to focus on the notes being written on the board.

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??The hell wazzat about, baka?? it was after class and Ichigo was standing over his Shinigami ?coach?, trying to be as menacing as possible, and doing a very bad job of it.

?I don?t know what you are talking about, Ichigo. Please try to keep your incoherent ramblings to yourself.? Rukia shot back immediately, her calm, emotionless exterior unwavering, as always.

?You know exactly what I?m talking about. Don?t give me that, Rukia.? Ichigo replied, pissed as ever. She sure was good at pissing him off? He wasn?t sure if it was how calm she always was, or if it was that she knew exactly what buttons to press. Maybe it was the fact that she always seemed to know exactly what was going on inside his head, when he had absolutely no inkling of what was going on in hers. Perhaps it was a combination of all three. In any case, she was damn good at making him angry. And he hated it. Especially when she knew exactly what she was doing.
She seemed to be ignoring him now, looking over his shoulder and waving.

?Bye Inoue-san! Tatsuki-san! See you tomorrow!? she called out cheerfully to her classmates in her saccharine sweet schoolgirl voice. The voice that seemed to say ?I?m innocent and defenseless, please come save me!?

?Feh.? Ichigo muttered under his breath ?Innocent my ass??

?What was that?? Rukia?s voice instantly changed back to her usual ?take no prisoners, and definitely take no bullshit.? voice that matched the real Rukia so well. ?Something to say, Ichigo??

?Don?t talk to me like that! Damnit! I?m not a child, Rukia!? Ichigo glared at the petite woman standing next to him.

?Well then stop acting like one. Let?s go home already. We can argue on the walk back, if you?d really like.?

?Nevermind. Let?s go.? Ichigo grunted and exhaled, looking up at the sky for a moment. His glare softened as his gaze fell on Rukia. He stood there another minute before trudging along behind her.

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?What was that, today? I can?t believe he caught me staring at him... how embarrassing. Why was I staring at him, anyway? He is only a mortal, after all. We are only in this situation because we have to be for right now? soon enough, I?ll be gone, and his life and mine can return to normal once again? but why do I feel like that isn?t what I really want?.?? Rukia sighed and stared out the window, without really looking at anything in particular. She was seated at his desk, waiting for him to return with her dinner. He was downstairs eating with his family now, like he didn?t have a care in the world. Sometimes just thinking about it, her chest would tighten up with yearning. She wanted to share the bond that Ichigo seemed to have with his family. To be cherished like he cherished his sisters Yuzu and Karin. Or to be remembered and thought of as fondly as his Mother? she found herself wondering what it would be like to eat dinner with them... To be like Ichigo?s what?? His girlfriend? She usually laughed at that thought. Silly nonsense is what it was. But today was different. The thought wouldn?t leave her head.

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?SON! IT IS BAD MANNERS TO DAYDREAM AT THE DINNER TABLE! IF YOU ARE DAYDREAMING, IT IS MORE POLITE TO SHARE WITH THE ENTIRE GROUP! I THOUGHT I RAISED YOU BETTER THAN THAT!? Ichigo?s father leapt off his chair, and onto the table, knocking off all the dishes and silverware in the process. He attempted to kick his son in the face, but Ichigo was faster, and grabbed his ankle, and throwing him off the table.

?Asshole?? He muttered and stood up, and walked out of the dining room.

?You?re such a fool, Dad. I still can?t believe we?re related.? Ichigo?s younger sister Karin, following his example, stood up and headed into the den.

?No Karin! Not you too! I thought you were better than that son of mine!?

?Get a life, Dad.? She called back to him, before blasting the volume of the TV.
Isshin sighed, and wiped the blood from his nose with the back of his hand.

?Atleast I still have you, right Yuzu?? he called out happily to his other daughter? to which came no reply. Yuzu had already gone up to her room about twenty minutes ago.

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Ichigo was pacing quietly outside the door to his room. He didn?t know exactly what it was he was hoping to avoid by not going in there, but there was something. Lately every time he?d seen Rukia his heart had started beating like crazy. He?d been even more temperamental than usual with her, and he knew it had to be a lot more temperamental if even he could notice it. His mind kept racing back to that afternoon in class when he?d caught her staring at him. Part of him was just wondering exactly what she?d been looking at. Was she judging him on how he?d been doing with his fights with hollows lately? No, it didn?t seem like that sort of stare? the other part of him was just thrilled she?d be staring at him. God knows she had her pick of almost any boy in the school, and yet it had been him that she was staring at. He shook his head violently, as if trying to shake the thought right out. Why did he care who she was looking at? She would be gone soon enough and he?d never have to worry about her, or her stupid Shinigami duties ever again? But then Ichigo began to really wonder? Is that what he honestly wanted?

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?Grub's up.? Ichigo called to Rukia, as he opened the door to his room, the tray of food in his free hand.

?Took you long enough.? She scoffed at him as she stood up and walked swiftly across the room to retrieve her meal.

?You?re welcome.? He sneered at her and grabbed his mp3 player from his desk, before plunking down on his bed, slipping his earphones on, and cranking up the music. She watched him for that moment, and as soon as she was sure he couldn?t hear her, she sighed. She?d done it again. Been far more snappish with him than she?d meant to be, and now he was pissed. She couldn?t even blame him. He was nice enough to bring her three meals per day, and yet she still took it for granted.

?I?m? sorry?? she whispered. So he couldn?t hear her. Big deal. It was a start, right?

Rukia finished her meal quickly, so that she could get started on the rest of her homework. She had fallen asleep earlier, and had lost a lot of time because of it. Ichigo may have believed that she was never tired, but after only a 3 or 4 hours of rest, a Shinigami can get pretty sleepy too. Her homework seemed to take such a monumental effort, and it wasn?t that hard, either. Her mind kept going back to one thing ? Ichigo.

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The moon had just risen, and a sliver of moonlight had made it through Ichigo?s blinds, and was resting on Rukia, accentuating her already striking features.
?Why did I never realize how pretty Rukia is?? he thought to himself. Yeah, she was definitely pretty. But there was something about her? she seemed? so old. Well, not ?old? exactly. But it was like she had the weight of the world on her shoulders. And to slack off for even just a moment, could mean the end of life as she knew it. And in that moment he really wanted to see her smile. It was amazing how much a small smile could transform her face. More than anything, he wanted to whisk her away from this life for one day. Help her forget her worries, and just have fun. He wondered if that was even possible for Rukia. Even if it wasn?t, he wanted to give her an hour to just relax. To be Rukia. Not a Shinigami. He glanced at his digital clock.
?Wow, it?s later than I realized.?
?Alright Miss. Shinigami, I?m going to bed, so that means that light?s gotta be turned off. You can work in the closet if you like, but don?t keep me awake.? He said to her, then added a bit more softly ?But you should probably just go to sleep? We?ve both had a long day. ?Night, baka.? He rolled over and shut his eyes.

-End Chapter One-

I hope you guys enjoyed that! This is my very first fic, and I'd love some feedback, because I'm always looking to improve. Depending on the interest, I have two more chapters I can post. Thanks again![/COLOR][/FONT]

[wayofthreversed]

That was good could you please post the other two chapters I would like to see how it turns out.

[Nomura]

9 out of ten... I'm hoping for a lil less writing... It hurt my eyes :animestun LOL, but you're cool with writing. Oh yeah, throw in alil' more action, since Bleach is an Acyion manga...

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[quote name='Nomura']9 out of ten... I'm hoping for a lil less writing... It hurt my eyes :animestun LOL, but you're cool with writing. Oh yeah, throw in alil' more action, since Bleach is an Acyion manga...[/quote]

[FONT=Trebuchet MS][COLOR=Orange]Yeah, I know, it needs more action. Unfortunately, there's no real battles until chapter 3, though I did find there was more action between the characters in chapter 2.

And sorry for the amount, I always go overboard :animeswea as is apparent, yet again in the next chapter. I hope you enjoy anyway! Criticism always welcome!

-Chapter 2-

Rukia glanced over at the clock, through the tiny crack in the door she?d left a little bit open.
?2:48 AM...? She sighed, and then her gaze fell upon the sleeping figure of Ichigo. Her lips tugged up at the corners. ?Asshole?? she whispered, to no one in particular. Ichigo rolled over, so he was now facing her, some extremely attractive drool running down his chin. She snorted quietly and closed her eyes, falling asleep much more easily than she would?ve expected?
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?ICHIGO! TIME FOR YOU TO WAKE UP! HAVE A BREAKFAST KICK!!!!? Ichigo?s Dad screamed at the top of his lungs, as he came barreling into his son?s room, and jumping straight at his bed, foot aimed straight at Ichigo?s head.
3?2?1? we have impact.
Ichigo shot straight up, landing with a thud on his floor, and rubbing his nose.

?DAD???!! WHAT THE HELL WAS THAT? FOR CHRIST SAKES, I HAVE AN ALARM CLOCK! WHY CAN?T I WAKE UP LIKE A NORMAL KID???!!?
Isshin laughed.

?Why Ichigo, that?s because you AREN?T a normal kid! LET?S FIGHT!? with that, he jumped back off of Ichigo?s bed, and tried to land on Ichigo. Ichigo simply got up, shoving him out of the way as he did so.

?Go downstairs and bother Karin or something?? Ichigo mumbled, kicking his father into the hallway and shutting the door in his face. ?Idiot.? He shook his head, and walked across his room to knock on the closet door. ?Rukia? Time to wake up, Miss. Shinigami.?

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Rukia opened the door before right as he finished his sentence, already dressed in her school attire, her hair neatly brushed, and immaculate as always.
?How the hell did you know it was time to get up?? Ichigo asked, almost in amazement. Rukia laughed

?Your father woke me up. Actually, I wouldn?t be surprised if he woke up the next few neighbourhoods, too.? She yawned lightly.

?What, not enough sleep?? Ichigo asked casually, though taking note that this was the first time he?d ever seen her yawn.

?Not that it is any of your concern, but I slept fine. I think it?s just all those late nights beforehand catching up on me.?

?Right, right...? Ichigo nodded, though he didn?t really believe her. She pushed him lightly out of the way, and jumped down out of the closet.

?I?ll be going to school now. See you there, Ichigo.? She gave him a brief wave, before walked over to his desk, opened the window behind it, and climbed out before he even had time to offer her some breakfast.

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??Actually Ichigo, you?re right. I had a terrible sleep. That is, when I did sleep. I spent most of the night staring at you?? Why can?t I say that to him? Why am I even being so ridiculous? I have no reason to miss sleep for him? I think? Not that I really know anything anymore. This stupid human body is definitely beginning to take its toll on me. Perhaps I have become mentally unstable? There has to be a reason for these illogical thoughts and behaviours.? Rukia walked far more slowly than usual to school, her mind quite far away from the real world. She was so slow in walking, that for once Ichigo managed to catch up to her.

?RUKIA!!! RUKIA!? He yelled to her as he sprinted to meet up with her. She didn?t turn around. Didn?t even seem to listen to him. Even when he was right next to her, and catching his breath, she didn?t even look over at him. ?Hello, earth to Rukia?? he looked at her curiously, and waved a hand in front of her face. She suddenly snapped back to reality.
?OH! Ichigo! I?m sorry, I didn?t even notice you. When did you get here?? she looked genuinely surprised to realize he was walking with her.

?About 5 seconds ago, actually? but I called to you from down the street. You ignored me, dumbass.? He narrowed his eyes at her, but they sparkled with a sort of childish amusement.

?Gomen, Ichigo. My mind was on other things? I really did not mean to ignore you.? She gazed over at him, her voice completely apologetic and sincere. He didn?t even know how to reply to that, it was so? unRukia-like! Just as they round the corner to the school, Ichigo cleared his voice as if to say something, but was interrupted. ?Inoue-san! Tatsuki-san! Ohayo!? Rukia called to the two girls coming towards them, and started running to meet them, she turned around for a moment, and smiled sweetly at him ?See you in class, Ichigo!? All Ichigo could muster in reply was a sort of half grunt half yes, and he turned and stalked off in the direction of his friends.

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?What the hell do you mean, am I dating Rukia? What the hell kind of question is that, Keigo??? Keigo grinned slyly at Ichigo?s fury.

?Just a question any guy would ask a friend who spent a lot of time around a certain girl? especially a certain very cute girl? So is that a yes or a no?? at this question, all the guys leaned in, also quite curious about this. Ichigo turned a lovely shade of fuchsia.

?No, of course not. Why would I want to date her?? He mumbled and glared down at the ground.

?Perhaps because she?s charming, beautiful, kind, fun to talk too? cute?? Keigo listed.

?Don?t forget that she?s smart too!? chimed in Mizuiro.

?I think you guys?re seeing things?? Ichigo shook his head. ?Why?d you ask, anyway?? Keigo smiled broadly at his question.

?Because, I want to ask her out on a date, of course!? The colour in Ichigo?s face completely drained at the words.

?Y-you-you can?t do that!? He spluttered.

?Why ever not? She?s sooooo cute! And I mean I haven?t been on a date in a long time!?

?You mean you haven?t been on a date ever.? Corrected Mizuiro.

?Shut it!? Keigo sobbed, and slugged his friend on the arm.

?You just can?t. Her parents are really strict. She?s not allowed to date.? Ichigo mumbled lamely.

?Oh she isn?t, is she? Well we?ll see what she says after I turn on the ole? Keigo charm? She?ll be putty in my hands. Thanks for the advice Ichigo, I?ll ask her at lunch time today!? The bell rang and Keigo grinned at Ichigo and patted him on the back, before starting towards the front door.

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?Oh shit oh shit oh shit shit shit?? Ichigo glared down at his desk, paying no attention to the lesson. ?How can I tell Rukia to say no to Keigo without seeming jealous?? Is that even possible? I guess I should though? no telling what Keigo would do on a date? I wouldn?t put anything past him. Alright, on the walk home, I?ll tell her she should say no to him.?

**After School**

?Ichigo, what is a ?date??? They were on their way home from school, and Rukia was dying to know what Keigo had meant when he?d asked her on one. Ichigo kept facing forward, as if trying to decide how to best answer her question.

?Huh?? He tried to sound as nonchalant and uncaring as possible, and did a rather good job.

?Because Keigo asked me to go on one with him on Friday night? I told him I didn?t know and he asked that I give him an answer tomorrow.? Rukia replied. This time Ichigo stayed silent because he really was trying to find the right words to answer. He scratched his head thoughtfully.

?It?s when a guy and a chick go somewhere together.. Like a movie or dinner or something.? He said lamely.

?Oh? You mean like when you and I go to fight hollows?? she gazed at him questioningly, and her face was completely serious. ?Is that like a date, Ichigo?? Ichigo snorted

?No, baka. A date is when a guy and a girl go out somewhere, and they have feelings past friendship? those feelings are what make the date, I guess you could say.? Rukia pondered his answer for a few moments.

?Do you have anybody that you would like to go on a date with, Ichigo?? she asked. Ichigo?s heart skipped a beat at her question, but he recovered almost immediately.

?Nope? no girls at the school are interesting enough for me.? He finished, rather hastily.

?Really? So you don?t even like Inoue-san?? Ichigo gawked at her next question.

?No, she?s my friend. Why would I?? Rukia looked up at the sky, trying to remember a comment she?d heard earlier in the day.

?Because? ?She?s a total babe, with a huge rack.? That?s what I heard one of the boys say today at lunch.? She nodded, pleased that she could remember. Ichigo snorted, and the snort turned into a full out laugh. He doubled over, almost unable to breath from all the laughing. Rukia stood next to him, glaring, and not amused. ?I don?t see what?s so funny here, Ichigo.? He could tell she was very annoyed. He straightened up and cleared his throat.

?Sorry Rukia. It?s just that Inoue-san is my friend, and that?s what she?ll always be.? They started walking again, in silence for a few minutes.

?So what should I say to Keigo? I?d rather like to try one of these ?date? things.? She asked him, really wanting to hear his opinion on the matter.

?Feh. I wouldn?t? It?s Keigo, and there?s no telling what he?ll do. Besides,? Ichigo added, his cheeks flushing faintly ?If you really want to go on one, I?ll take you. On the weekend. Is that okay?? he finished hastily, and didn?t look over at her.

?You know Ichigo? I think I?ll take you up on that. But remember? this doesn?t change a thing. You?re still just a mortal, and I?m still the real Shinigami? Our relationship will extend nowhere past this line.? She replied, and exhaled gingerly, before finishing a little more softly ?Who knows? It could just be fun??

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?Alright Ichigo, we?re almost there. Continue down this street, and hang a left at the temple? Be prepared, this is a pretty large Hollow we?re facing this time. No stupid compulsive moves, got it?? Rukia called to him as they ran, just a few steps behind.

?Un.? Ichigo nodded, not even taking the time to turn around and reply. She said that every time. ?No stupid compulsive moves.? Usually it would annoy him. But not tonight.

?I can?t believe we?re going on a date. Me and Rukia. Rukia and me. Who?da thunk it? Why the hell do I care, anyway? I must be going retarded from spending all this time with her?? Ichigo said to himself. Though he still felt like he was flying, just as he had when she?d answered him. They rounded the corner, and Ichigo stopped dead in his tracks, causing Rukia to crash straight into him, and fall backwards. ?Holy shit?? Ichigo breathed. The hollow was huge. Unlike any of the hollow?s he?d fought before.

For a second he was really considering just grabbing Rukia and high-tailing it outta there. But this was a fleeting thought, and as soon as he?d yelled at Rukia to ?get the hell out of the way,? he unsheathed his soul slayer and ran straight at the ugly beast, Braveheart style?[/COLOR][/FONT]

[Nomura]

LOL, I'll give that one a 9 out of ten too... I also thought that maybe Inoue-san...(if I spelled that correctly) and Ichigo would date, but I guess Rukia might steal him... :animesmil You had a few grammar porblems... I suggest you write it, then go relax (problems are better found when relaxed)come back and read it, fix the few mistakes it contains, then post it.

[wayofthreversed]

Nomura is right about every thing. But I still think that it was good and Now I can not wait until you post the next chapter.

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[COLOR=Orange][FONT=Trebuchet MS]Here is Chapter 3! It's the shortest of the 3 so far. This is the first chapter with actual action. I'm still working on my skills as an action writer, so it's definitely not my strong suit. Always open to criticism! Please enjoy!

Chapter 3

?CRACK!? The hollow?s fist slammed down onto the pavement, narrowly missing Ichigo. He sprung up immediately to his feet, brandishing his soul slayer fiercely and looking incredibly pissed. He jumped up again, as the hollow unleashed another wave of attacks, slashing and punching at him. He managed to avoid most of them. However, most of them wasn?t good enough.
?Shit.? Ichigo breathed, and reached his side with his free hand. His fingertips had barely brushed it, but he winced from the immense pain. He cocked his head to the side and saw that his Shinigami robes had been shredded in that area, and the strips of fabric hanging off were already soaked in blood.

He glared at the Hollow and wrapped his now bloodstained hand around the hilt. ?YOU?RE GOING DOWN, YA STUPID BASTARD! HIYAAAAAAA!!!? Ichigo screamed at the monster, and ran at it full tilt, dodging it?s swinging arm at the last second and going in for a quick jab at it?s head. It worked. He caught the beast off guard, and it staggered under the strength of the blow. Unfortunately, staggering is all it did. The Hollow let out a blood curdling roar and began another barrage of fast, difficult to dodge attacks. ?Oh, fuck me.? Groaned Ichigo, as he sprang again into action, fending off the strikes with great difficulty.

?ICHIGO! GET OUT OF THE WAY!? Rukia yelled at him, running out from the tree she had been hiding behind. She stood directly in the Hollow?s line of fire, shut her eyes, and clasped her hands together, pointer fingers together and pointing upwards. She began chanting under her breath, concentrating all of her energy on one great attack to stop the Hollow.

?Rukiaaa!!!? She could hear him screaming at her. She could feel the panic in his voice. The Hollow had turned it?s focus on her.

?Good,? she thought ?even if this isn?t enough to stop it, the hollow is distracted and Ichigo will be able to make an attack that counts?? She could now here the beast lumbering towards her. She began to chant even harder, furrowing her brow and biting down hard on her lip, hard enough that it started bleeding. The salty taste combined with her? fear? Anticipation? She wasn?t sure what it was, but the combination was enough to make her ill. Finally, she could keep the spell bottled up inside her no longer. She knew the hollow was close. She could smell its terrible stench. She opened her eyes and unleashed a blood curdling yell, pouring everything she had into the attack. Rukia knew that it was the only shot she had, and it that if it worked, would knock the hollow out cold before it could even realized what hit it.

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A blinding light emitted directly from Rukia?s clasped hands, so bright it temporarily blinded Ichigo. Once the spots disappeared from his vision, he saw the hollow split into two pieces and quickly dissolve into the air, leaving only the destruction of the park as testament that it had ever really been there. His vision also cleared in time to see Rukia collapse on the ground in a tiny fragile looking heap.

?RUKIA!!!!!!!!!? Ichigo bellowed, practically flying to her aid. ?Rukia! Rukia please be alright! You have to be alright!? He managed to choke out, while turning her over onto her back, and cradling her head gently in his lap, he carefully moved her hair out of her eyes. ?Damnit, you baka?? Ichigo quickly checked for a pulse. The second he felt her heart beat, weaker than normal, but still there, he was immediately relieved. He looked her face over carefully, and, making sure her eyes were still shut tight, he leaned in and placed a soft kiss on her forehead. ?I?m sorry that you ended up protecting me? I guess I?ll just hafta train harder, won?t I? Just like you told me to do in the first place... You always do have to be right.? He half chuckled at that before sighing.

He picked her up, as gently as he could, holding her as if she would break with the slightest bump. Ichigo then started towards home, hoping his father had left the backdoor unlocked. He really didn?t want to have to move Rukia more than necessary, and climbing through his window, it would be pretty difficult to avoid a bumpy ride?[/FONT][/COLOR]

[wayofthreversed]

This was a good chapter. Although there were some spelling and gramer mistakes. You should get someone to proff read it for you. but other then that you did a magnificent job and the action was done well I thought. I can nit wait until you post the next chapter.