Writing My Facade [PG] please give me some pointers and good comments

[echoavalon]

In this hole wrapped up in earth
I have this famailar feeling.
Being attacked from all sides
the bottom and the ceiling.
I am shrouded in my personal hell
Without my hate I will fall
My soul I will sell
The walls are just too tall.
Help me find a precipice
To stand on to fight on.
Give me grace to dominate.
Inside this elongated fake fascade.

[Noir_vagabond]

Sometimes there are these moments where ones hell is more than a failure to communicate something to another....
Don't worry all people play the facade at one time or another

[2010DigitalBoy]

Well, the horrible spelling and the last line not rhyming were turnoffs, but other han that it wasn't bad. Id be interested in seeing more of your work, if you have any.

[renayiiq]

I love the rhyme scheme, how it goes from a|b|c|b to a|b|a|b to |a|b|c|d. To me it kept the poem a bit interesting, because there was no mixture of long and short lines. It needs some better punctuation and a spell check, but besides that, it's good.