echoavalon Posted January 11, 2006 Share Posted January 11, 2006 My life has begun a change, that might affect the operation. So many people thought, that I could complete the task without hesitation. So when I start out on that road of death and pain, I can remember that I belong to everything. I belong to the earth and rain, I belong to the sea and sky, I belong to the cars and trains. I make it known that my power erupts, from my mind I transform into a man. My soul at peace with Him. My love for her, forever. Give me time and I will emerge and show the world who I am. I am a life form, a crescent spirit, a greatness beyond unknown, I am human. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
2010DigitalBoy Posted January 11, 2006 Share Posted January 11, 2006 This was interesting. The rhythm, while strange, was intriguing and for some reason I liked this poem. The only thing I didn't like where the threee I belong lines, not for any reason, I just didn't like them (yes, I am THAT picky) but in the end, it's a great poem. You should try writing a really long one some time, it could be interesting. It's always fun to try out new forms of poetry. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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