cancer Posted January 16, 2006 Share Posted January 16, 2006 [COLOR=Green]I fall into your loving arms With thoughts of love upon my mind. You gaze at me with eyes of blue And speak of dreams that you once had. You've always kept me safe from harm; Of wretched sights you've kept me blind. Difficult times you've led me through And dried my tears when I was sad. Your blessed gift is a genuine charm. It's true you are one of a kind. Now I say to you: thank you; For all these things you've done I'm glad.[/COLOR] [I]I wrote this in December 2005, and I actually really like this rhyme scheme.[/I] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
2010DigitalBoy Posted January 16, 2006 Share Posted January 16, 2006 Like your other one, it's acceptable, but not spectacular. You get a passing grade. The rhyme scheme is good, but nothing I've never seen before, same goes for the subject. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lady Asphyxia Posted January 16, 2006 Share Posted January 16, 2006 Again, this thread is closed for reasons I've explained in your Lost in Love thread. ^-^" Thread Closed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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