Writing To An Okay Lady [E]

[Dragon Warrior]

This is a love poem I wrote. It is to be read with all absolute seriousness to get full effect of the humor from it. Humor, I say? Yes, humor! This is a parody of love poetry. If read with a serious (and dramatic, if you can) voice, it can sound quite silly and ridiculous. I actually gave it to a girl at school and she loved me for it. I then read it in front of the school, who cheered happily. So now I give it to you...

... my disasterpiece...

[center][b][SIZE=4]To An Okay Lady[/size][/b]

[FONT=Trebuchet MS]Your love is like something loving.
You smell special,
And I like your neck.

Life without you is like my sandwich
Of peanut butter and jelly
Minus the peanut butter and jelly,
And add expired mayonnaise instead.

When I look upon your face,
I get happy feelings.

When I think of you,
I wanna go ?Yay!?

When I?m with you,
I think of myself as the luckiest guy in the world,
And since I?m already the most handsome,
That makes me some kind of super human.

Rainbows,
Puppies,
Kittens,
Other cute stuff.

I get lost in your eyes.
Not to say they?re freakishly large and hard to find your way through.
You could always use a map,
But I?ve always been bad with directions.
So I guess I?m just saying?
Your eyes are cool.

You?re like a cornfield.
You have nice ears.
I want to frolic in your pig trough of love, oink!

I like being with you and stuff.
It makes me the opposite of sad,
Which would be happy,
In this case.

We?ll be together forever?
? or at least until I find someone better.[/font][/center]

Comments, pwease :3

[Claire]

[FONT=Arial]Hehe, you have too much talent. Dork!

Anyway, I really really liked it. I'm terrible at criticism, though, so don't really expect any words of betterment from me...ever. I just thought it was a really nice poem, very funny, and well-written. You have so much wit, that I bet if we put you in the ocean, it would sink you. =D. I know I'd be a very happy girl if my boyfriend wrote this for me (but he doesn't have to, because he's perfect ^_^)[/FONT]

[Gavin]

[SIZE=1]Interesting, most interesting.

A very odd poem to be sure Gav, and I genuinely don't know whether or not any of my previous girlfriends would find it romantic. Still humour to be sure, and there surely are some women somewhere that would find you to be a bard of such romantic quality that they should swoon in your very presence.[/SIZE]

[2010DigitalBoy]

You will never cease to amaze me, will you? Needless to say (because we [I]are[/I] talking about [I]you[/I]) it was simply amazing. Hilarious, even. The lines about the sandwhich had me reeling with laughter. Also, the lines

[I]I get lost in your eyes
Not to say they're freekishly large and hard to find your way through[/I]

Were perfect.

If I were ever writing a love poem, I'd make it like this.

[Ezekiel]

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[FONT=Trebuchet MS]Your love is like something loving.
You smell special,
And I like your neck.[/FONT][/center][/QUOTE]

Has someone been reading VGCats? The first line reminded me of the Star Wars spoof, with Padme's "Your love is like a lovely river of loving love, love" At least, I think that's how it went.

Anyway.

This made me laugh out loud a couple of times, especially the first verse. Probably because I have actually said, "I like your neck" to Trevor. Yeah, I'm sad.

Seriously, though, if a guy gave this to me, I would love him forever. This is so much better than soppy, romantic stuff that?s supposed to make me cry. Give me humour any day.[/SIZE]

[Dragon Warrior]

Hah, maybe I should consider giving this to a girl I know. If it's that helpful. She likes my humor, so this should astound her. She'll be all over me like a pack of dogs on a three-legged cat. Booyah!