Writing Dire Time [Tell me what ya think] (PG)

[echoavalon]

My hate, my corruption, the fools!
They thought that I would fold.
They thought that I would help them.
Now I have the power over the country.

They voted me in and that is their undoing.
They might survive, if I allow them.
They will worship me for I am their god.
I am their apocalypse, I am their hell.

I will stay in power, I am forever.
I will conquer the people and then the world.
Anyone who tries to stop me will be killed.
Those who join me will die forever.

I am the ultimate, the only.
Nothing comes before me.
If only you knew, that what is holy,
Is nothing about me.
I am the incarnation of your worst dream.

[Sora]

That was actually pretty lame, to tell you the truth. I can't do much better, but really now, what a topic... The topic itself and the ideas that you tried to convey weren't too horrid, but I really didn't like the wording. Just figured I'd comment as no one else has.

[Suicide Jury]

I liked it in some way, though I would perfer more colorful words to explain what you are trying to convey.
I fully grasp the idea and I like the fact that you chose certain times to break the sentences, overrall it had good flow and explained its main idead throughrly