Writing we are what we destroy [PG]

[Claire]

[FONT=Arial]help me mother
they say I'm not like you
That I don't have the things you do
Though I know its true
There is no other
No other one I love as much as you
Don't let them tell you what to do
Why, why

I'm not even alive
But I don't want to die
I'm only swimming inside
Won't you let me say goodbye?

mother, mother
I can't believe you're doing this to me
before I had the chance to be
something worthy
so please, mother
I only want the world to see
I had a person still to be
Why, why

I'm not even alive
But I don't want to die
I'm only swimming inside
Won't you let me say goodbye?
Why, why

They say that I'm not real
And I need to be destroyed
They say that I can't feel
It's a thing you can't avoid
Did I ever deserve to dream
of life beyond this place?
to thrive beyond this seam?
to see your shining face?
Did I ever deserve to care
So much with no return?
that gave you such despair
As away from you, I burn?

I'm not even alive
But I don't want to die
I'm only swimming inside
Why won't you say goodbye?
Why, why
I'm not even alive
But I don't want to die
I'm only swimming inside
I want to say goodbye
Why, why

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I'm sure you can figure out what it's about.[/FONT]

[2010DigitalBoy]

Robots, right? This is so friggin awesome (as are all your works :catgirl: ). I can't help but read it as though it were a song... *can hear it being sung by Coheed and Cambria* so cool...

[Claire]

[FONT=Arial]Of course it's a song! (But are you serious about it being about robots? I thought the answer was obvious.)

I'm not really happy with the title I gave it, but I can't think of anything else. I'm hoping something will come to me, as things usually do. Meh.

And thanks, Tical, for relentlessly commenting when no one else will![/FONT]

[SunfallE]

[COLOR=RoyalBlue]Well I don?t know about a title, but I think it?s pretty obvious as to what it?s about. ^_~ [spoiler] Abortion right? [/spoiler] Not that it needs tags, but maybe others might want to guess themselves.

Anyway, my first impression was that it was a song as well. It has me wondering what type of music it would be set to. The part I like the best is the ?Don't let them tell you what to do? It seems to imply that someone is making the mother?s decisions for her.

Then it goes on to say: ?I can't believe you're doing this to me? It changes the direction of the song from make your own decision to why won?t you keep them from doing it.

There?s only one line that seems to be a little off and that is ?As away from you, I burn?? It just doesn?t seem to fit? Though that might be because I?m reading it instead of hearing it sung. ^_~

Anyway, nicely written. ;) [/COLOR]

[2010DigitalBoy]

Oh... yeah, that does make a lot more sense... but I really was serious about the robots... been listening to too much Coheed.