Manga I've been working on my new manga, Gensuteki Hikari!

[Guest Call Me "Masa"]

I'm sorry I can't write a short story description about it, but i'd be glad to answer some questions on it or if you have any suggestion or comments that may help me. Thanks. I'll write one later...

[Chikara Kokoro]

It's nearly impossible for anyone to give real feedback on this with so little to go off of.

Write the story. Make it not take place in Japan. Change the title accordingly.

That's all I can say. I would like to say more, possibly positive, things, but how can I when you aren't even willing to write up information on the manga idea before you try to start a topic about it?

[Animesword]

I might join. I'm not sure what to ask, though. I'll ask some questions when I think of some.

I agree with this person, too. ^^;

[QUOTE=Chikara Kokoro]It's nearly impossible for anyone to give real feedback on this with so little to go off of.

Write the story. Make it not take place in Japan. Change the title accordingly.

That's all I can say. I would like to say more, possibly positive, things, but how can I when you aren't even willing to write up information on the manga idea before you try to start a topic about it?[/QUOTE]

[ashwolf]

[QUOTE]It's nearly impossible for anyone to give real feedback on this with so little to go off of.[/QUOTE]

Read your post in the thread below, Masa and I have to say I am in agreement with these two. There isn't enough to go off of here in order to properly review it. I think you should write MORE before you ask for help so it will get people interested, eh?

Also, I agree with the whole thing not being in Japan. Too many mangas take place in Japan and have Japanese names...I have nothing against the culture but the manga community needs more variety. Why not try making up your own world or something? *shrugs*

[Guest de_valentine]

honestly why try to copy other anime ty to make a freah story who knows you might make a great one

[Guest Call Me "Masa"]

If you have any comments, questions, reviews or would like to contribute to the manga, Gensuteki Hikari, please feel free to.

Story Summary: The year is 2015, crime and violence has become a common thing in the streets of Xion. It is the outcome of what they call the "Chaos War". Many describe it as the "War Without a Hero". The many people who fought in that war were bramded traitors, leading to the rise in rebellions and thievery going on. The citizens strive to survive against a new threat, the "Hohono Syndicate", which suddenly appeared after the war. Maku Sero, a top thief among the rest, once fought among his comrades in the war. A destined meeting with an old friend and an incident in the town stirs up old scars as well as new. This leads him on yet another adventure. This time his target is the "Hohono Syndicate" and those who stand in his way. Will a mysterious girl bring light into his heart or will the darkness consume him? From the Creator of "Oni Pimp" and "Gensuteki Rei".

Here are the main characters as well as minor characters:

Main Characters

Maku Sero - Main Character
Nationality- Xionese (Born in Xion)
Gender-Male
Age 19
Blood Type O
Weapon - Twilight Blade w/ Attachments
Occupation Ex-Thief
Likes Rice Balls
Hobbies Stealing
Many fear him because of the fact that he has 3 souls (Due to a childhood accident)

Hikari Yasuhiko - Mysterious Girl
Nationality- Makinese/Xionese (Born in Maki/Xion)
Gender- Female
Age 18
Blood Type A
Weapon- Barehanded
Occupation Violinist
Likes Miso Soup
Hobbies Playing violin
A mysterious young girl Maku meets along his adventure

Side Characters w/o profile

*Suki Yaki
*Koji Takashima
*Senko Oyabuda
*Master Hagura
*Mamano Kogashira
*Kai Dohmaru
*Hayao Miyazaki
*Akira Miyazaki
*Haku Izumi
*Samahono Senshi
*Yume Takaramono
*Rakusho Kutsuki
*Samashi Chikara
*Maki Kijinoni

*Its funny bacause most of the names of the characters have meanings in Japanese
*For those who don't know Japanese, "Gensuteki Hikari" translates in "Fantastic Light" in English.

Oni Pimp (Copyright 2003), Gensuteki Rei (Copyright 2005), and Gensuteki Hikari (Copyright 2006) are all part of "Team Darkeye" Productions.

[Suzuhiko]

[quote name='Call Me "Masa"']Its funny bacause most of the names of the characters have meanings in Japanese[/quote]
[COLOR=DarkGreen]Don't all japanese names usually have meaning? XD

Your manga seems alright to start off with but I'd rather read a sample of the story than a summary. Summaries tend to all sound the same. Have you started wriitng it yet?[/COLOR]