Manga Blue Marble

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Turtle spirits, High School, and Baseball! Blue Marble is a manga I'm working on, here are a few notes on it I made, tell me what you think.

[b]Blue Marble[/b] Here are a few notes on the characters, plot, and setting.

Characters: Yoshio, Jiro Takamura, and Asuka Utagawa.

[b]YOSHIOI[/b]: Yoshio is the spirit of the legendary turtle which holds the world on his back. He is naive, spontaneous and has the attention span of a puppy. He is a child at heart, but when provoked a force not to be reckoned with. His godly abilities lay dormant deep within him. His favorite color is sky blye.
[b]JIRO[/b]: Jiro is the second son of the very wealthy and famous family Takamura. He is the star baseball player at Shimamura Highschool, with a bright future in professional baseball up ahead. Because of this, his mind is set to one thing, baseball. His father and brothers want him running the family business and for that reason they have set out on a mission to put his baseball endevours to a hault. Jiro is a very neglegent person, he feels whatever doesn't intrest him is unimportant and should be ignored. He is very highstrung at times, but can also be one of the nicest people you'll meet. His careless attitude towards Asuka and his relationship stems from the fact that his ego is as big as the Tokyo Tower.
[b]Asuka[/b]: Asuka leads the perfect life. Her parents love her, she has money, she has the highest grades, and she?s dating Jiro. Okay, well that part isn?t so grand. Asuka is beautiful, though she is very modest, she usually keeps to her self and is very quiet. She loves to read, listen to music that inspires her to do and try things she?s never done. She longs for attention from Jiro.
[b]Setting[/b]: Modern day Tokyo, Shibuya District, Jiro's home in the Aoyama District, and Shimamura High School.
[b]Plot[/b]: Asuka and Jiro are bored with their meek existence, they long for something remotely exciting to happen. Their lives consist of transits between home, school, work,and Jiro's baseball games. They soon start to realize that it?s hopeless, they will forever be locked in the viscous cycle that is life, when a seventeen year old boy falls from the sky and almost literarily into their laps. A strange and curious boy, with no name or family history. With no recollection of who he is or where he is from he only knows a name, Atlas. His strange actions and even stranger personality attract Asuka and Jiro to help him.
Copyright to Hamza Pecenkovic and Bruce Shikuryadomosamachan.

Here is a character refrence sheet I made of the three: [URL=http://www.deviantart.com/view/34123888/]Character Ref Sheet[/URL]

As of right now I'm working on finishing page one and getting layouts down for page two, also I'm working a wallpaper for my self of the three and developing a more indepth look at the Manga. When I have some of it done I plan on submitting it to the Tokyo Pop Rising Stars of Manga contest, we'll see what happens.

If you have any questions you can leave them here or directly send them to me!

[Up4anime]

Sounds good.I would definetly read it.Saw the pictures also nice.
I do have a question.What does he want their help with?

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Why are they trying to help him? Good question! Chapter One will be out soon. Soon being a relative term.

Thank you for your interest.

[kalon]

You have great artwork, but there are a few points I would like to bring up. Why does Jiro wear an eyepatch? Is he actually blind, or does he just like it? Why are the rich kids "bored with their meek existence"? Sure, Asuka's boyfriend ignores her, but they sound like they have a pretty sweet life.

I find that sometimes it is harder to relate to main characters with such great lives. I mean, if they are rich and bored, can they not just go somewhere besides school, home, and baseball with their money?

One more thing: Yoshio looks in no way like a turtle to me. His character design is good, but it might be even better if he had a few turtle-like qualities, considering the fact that he is really a turtle spirit.

I'm not trying to be harsh or anything, I just wondered about that stuff. Your art is solid and the story sounds pretty interesting, so keep working at it. I look forward to anything else you post about this story.

[bluemarble]

[QUOTE=silver_blade]You have great artwork, but there are a few points I would like to bring up. Why does Jiro wear an eyepatch? Is he actually blind, or does he just like it? Why are the rich kids "bored with their meek existence"? Sure, Asuka's boyfriend ignores her, but they sound like they have a pretty sweet life.

I find that sometimes it is harder to relate to main characters with such great lives. I mean, if they are rich and bored, can they not just go somewhere besides school, home, and baseball with their money?

One more thing: Yoshio looks in no way like a turtle to me. His character design is good, but it might be even better if he had a few turtle-like qualities, considering the fact that he is really a turtle spirit.

I'm not trying to be harsh or anything, I just wondered about that stuff. Your art is solid and the story sounds pretty interesting, so keep working at it. I look forward to anything else you post about this story.[/QUOTE]

Lol. I love these questions! The eye patch happens about four pages into to the first volume, that's all I'll tell you because I really don't want to give away what happens. Let's just say it's a result of Yoshio's entrance. Jiro and Asuka have money yes, but Jiro wants nothing to do with it since he is trying to make it on his own means, Asuka on the other hand sees her life as boring because nothing exciting happens.... Rich people are like this sometime, any way by "her parents having money" I meant that she's not completely poor, but she's not insanely rich.
Why in the world would I want to give someone turtle like qualities, that's ridiculous, any way, he's transformed himself into a human to fit in. He's a god, he can do almost anything he wishes. The whole turtle thing isn't literal any way. If you read manga on a regular basis you'd find out that alot of things are sort of hinted at and very subtle. If I gave Yoshio turtle qualities it wouldn't be very Mangaka of me would it?