Art pshop/3dsmax fun

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[COLOR=DarkRed][SIZE=1]This is my first real peice in over 3 years. I used 3dsmax7 and pshopcs2. It looks like its missing something :animesigh what do you guys think?[/SIZE][/COLOR]
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[jigglyness]

The piece is really great but i think in comparison to the lower part, the top sections seems incomplete. It looks like you took more time on the bottom than the top. I really can't say what you should work on since I don't even know how to make abstracts or work any of the programs you use. lol. ^^' but i say great job on this one. :)

[GTK]

Agreeing with the top seeming less finished.

I mean, there's a lot of white in the middle also, but it seems more filled than the white area in the top left. Does that make sense? (because there's that sort of black streak that breaks it up)

maybe another shape would help break it up?

Though, like jigglyness, I don't really know anything about abstract stuff or the programs XD;;

I think the piece looks pretty cool though~

[Sloth Girl]

Well, if you hadn't said it looked like there was something missing, I wouldn't have paid it much mind but your darker areas near the top need a little more white I think. I don't use any programs like that at all so I don't know.

I like it though. It'd be fine the way it is. It's not too much or too little. It works out just fine.

[Retribution]

[size=1]Well, it's pretty good. I'll say that before I get into the nitty-gritty.

Now, it looks rather low quality as far as 3D renders go. I'm not sure if you were intentionally going for a frosty look, but it makes it look like a drawing instead of a 3D model. This also lacks a focal point. When I look at it, my eyes sort of roll all around... there's no unifying element here, which is what I think you're looking for. You were on the right track with the red text, but it's hidden in a corner, so it doesn't do you much good.

Also, don't be afraid to add effects like Displace, Fragement, or Sharpen to your advantage on abstracts like these.

Keep in mind that this critique came from someone who has very little 3D experience under his belt. However, I did spend about a year on a forum called Tagmonkey... they definitely taught me a thing or two about this sort of stuff.[/size]

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[QUOTE=Retribution][size=1]Well, it's pretty good. I'll say that before I get into the nitty-gritty.

Now, it looks rather low quality as far as 3D renders go. I'm not sure if you were intentionally going for a frosty look, but it makes it look like a drawing instead of a 3D model. This also lacks a focal point. When I look at it, my eyes sort of roll all around... there's no unifying element here, which is what I think you're looking for. You were on the right track with the red text, but it's hidden in a corner, so it doesn't do you much good.

Also, don't be afraid to add effects like Displace, Fragement, or Sharpen to your advantage on abstracts like these.

Keep in mind that this critique came from someone who has very little 3D experience under his belt. However, I did spend about a year on a forum called Tagmonkey... they definitely taught me a thing or two about this sort of stuff.[/size][/QUOTE]

[COLOR=Red]I deff agree there is no focal point. I will try and fix that. I'm not the best at typography but maybe i'll try something different. As far as the frostyness, thats what I was going for..a monochrome type of feel. Its been a long time since i touched these programs I gotta get my legs back. Thanks everyone for your suggestions. :animesmil:[/COLOR]