Writing The Fate of Zany Lovers [Poem-E]

[kalon]

Just a short poem I wrote spur of the moment last night. I'll be [i]extremely[/i] impressed if you know why I specifically chose the adjective "Zany" for this poem. This is partly a poem about two characters in my novel, and partly just a bit of silliness. Any comments/criticism will be appreciated.

The Fate of Zany Lovers

At one young Columbina
Sighted her jester love.
At two the Harlequin
Found his little dove.

At three she approached him,
Her heart pounding strong.
At four he grasped her hand
And together they walked along.

At five she saw him as the
Only color in a world so bleak.
At six he brushed a hand
Gently across her cheek.

At seven she spoke so sweetly
Of future hopes and dreams.
At eight he laughed and said
?We?ll be together, it seems.?

At nine her soul was flying,
For love had given it wings.
At ten he offered to her
His heart, attached by no strings.

At eleven her lips were sealed
With a kiss that stole all breath.
At twelve he murmured, ?I love you,?
Then pulled her to her death.

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[FONT=Arial]It appears we shall once again match our wits, my friend. Haha, I do love a challenge.[/FONT]

[indent][size=3][FONT=Times New Roman]za'- ny: [I]n.[/I] 1.) a fool, buffoon, or clown. ....[/FONT][/size][/indent]

[FONT=Arial]Like I said, I've read the dictionary. I need to read it again, though....

Ah, yes. The poem. For this, I have little to say. I like it, but poetry is not my area of expertise, not having praticed it much, but since I have been tracking you I feel honor bound to say at least [I]something[/I]. I did like the clock reference and the meter, the latter of which I hold a very important element in most poetry, and I thought your ending stanza was well executed. (Whatever that means.)

I may or may not have some puzzles for you to solve in the future ? it all depends on how much I end up posting. I do feel that playing our little game both ways would be most entertaining, so we shall see.

Very nice.[/FONT]