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[TheResplendent]

[QUOTE=Kitty][size=1]

I see BK as a character that's rather unenthusiastic and generally useless for the most part because he wasn't originally in trouble until he ran into DW.[/size][/QUOTE]


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Lol. It'll be funny with the clash of personalities taking the same path because they are forced to. We've got a few other comical characters in mind too, as we want to include others from the OB community as well, including a certain one who sees BK and DW quite often throughout their misadventures to provide them with...well, services =P.

If anyone has any name ideas as well based on the main idea of the story too feel free to chime in.[/font]

[Rachmaninoff]

Well first of all sorry I wasn?t around for a bit, I had no Internet yesterday. Secondly, I love the idea you guys have been presenting. I don?t know how to write a screenplay as I?ve never had a need to do one but I can be a second set of eyes for proofreading and once I?ve seen a bit of the script it might help me to have some ideas I can suggest.[quote name='Dragon Warrior][size=1']Of course, you, Rach, are placed as a member of this mafia who follows us the whole time to make sure we don't try to skip town or anything. BKstyles thought it'd be nifty to call you something like 88 Keys, like in Dick Tracey, only with the number of keys on a Harpsicord or something.[/size][/quote]I like it. Though I?d stick with the simple 88 Keys since the number of Keys on a Harpsichord is far more complex than what you would find on a piano, [not that you need me to tell you that ;)] which is more standard and more recognizable to people in general.

Other than to listen to music done with a Harpsichord I?ve never done any research on how they are constructed, well other than to understand how the strings are plucked instead of being hit by a hammer like they are in a piano. So I actually don?t know the number of keys and even then there has been both ones built with a single manual meaning it had one set of keys and ones called double manuals that had two sets of keys like a modern organ.

So I think the 88 Keys would be less confusing. My character could even be particular about how it's said as if it's important to draw it out and say Mr. Eighty Eight Keys, with an emphasis on [U]Mr[/U]. Making him a picky dork over how he's addressed. So anyone who simply says 88 keys he will correct them with a that's [U]Mr[/U] 88 Keys! Or something silly like that.

[Dragon Warrior]

[size=1]Haha, sure, why not! I'll keep that in mind. I'm not really familiar with Dick Tracey, so I don't know if a character in it was called 88 Keys or if that was BK's name he made up. He'll have to hammer that out. If it's already a name in Dick Tracey, we'll just maybe count the white keys on a piano instead or something.

But good feedback, guys. If you keep getting ideas, send 'em our way. I think the writing process is beginning tomorrow and we're going to really nail this thing down. The title will be made by tomorrow too, no doubt. It's a must, since Kitty has graphics to create. If you guys have title ideas, post them now. BK and I are thinking too. Definitely come up with something catchy, whether it's humorous or just plain creative. ;) Good work, folks.[/size]

[Rachmaninoff]

[QUOTE=Dragon Warrior][size=1]Haha, sure, why not! I'll keep that in mind. I'm not really familiar with Dick Tracey, so I don't know if a character in it was called 88 Keys or if that was BK's name he made up. He'll have to hammer that out. If it's already a name in Dick Tracey, we'll just maybe count the white keys on a piano instead or something.
[/size][/QUOTE]That would work we could go either way by using the count of the white or the black keys. There are 52 white keys and 36 black keys and if it's not to dumb if someone points out that he can't count his response will be along the lines of I'm not white or I'm not black, hence he only used the number of the keys that represents him the best.

If that's funny that is, I've never written any type of comedy before. So I don't know if it sounds lame or not. :animesigh

[Dragon Warrior]

[size=1]Heh, yep. I thought ahead to that and figured 52 Keys didn't flow so well, so 36 Keys sounds better--especially with the [i]mister[/i] before it. So you're Mr. 36 Keys, if you wish ;) BK and I have started flowing out the first draft, which when complete, we can post here and show you guys so you can make the changes you see fit.

As for title, we debated how the story really emerges from the card game that's lost at the beginning. Pondering this idea, BK came up with the name "Pair Of Jokers," which is several plays on words. "Pair" as in the card hand, and "Jokers" as in DW and BK. It fit nicely, we thought. But please, if you have better ones, do say. Otherwise, if we're all in agreement, Kitty may begin her graphic designing using that title.[/size]

[TheResplendent]

[FONT=Tahoma]Alright, just wanted to start things off and get that opening scene done with. DW i'm sure you'll have fun with what's to come =P. I'll just reiterate that comedy isn't my strongest point when it comes to writing, so this isn't the funniest hting you'll ever read, but like I said it's pretty much to get things going. Also I already discussed with ya DW about the format, it was just quicker this way. It seems rather long, but everything should work out nicely =P. And we already discussed about the intro.

First and Foremost, a few characters planned to show up throughout the story (not a complete list yet):

[b]Main Characters:[/b]

D.W Scallywag ? Dragon Warrior a.k.a The "Down on his Luck" Protagonist
B.K Smith ? BKstyles a.k.a The "Average Joe"
Princess Peanut ? Peanut a.k.a The Princess
Lady Kitty - Kitty a.k.a The Princess's Servant

[b]Mob:[/b]

The ?Boss? ? The Boss a.k.a....um...The Boss
Benny ?The Lighter? ? Blayze a.k.a Named Mobster #1
Randy ?The Socket? ? Raiyuu a.k.a Named Mobster #2
Gavin ?The Grandfather Clock? ? Gavin a.k.a Named Mobster #3
Mr. ?36 Keys? ? Rachmaninoff a.k.a The Recon Mobster
Sunny E. Falls ? SunfallE a.k.a The Boss's Chick

[b]Other Characters:[/b]

Sandy Taylor? Sandy a.k.a The Tailor




[center]Scene 1: A Bad Hand[/center]

[center][D.W stretches his arms as he walks through ?The Buzzkill? tavern?s entrance] [/center]

D.W: Oh man, that last job really tired me out. I need a vacation?or something. "Boss" is always giving me the crap duties.

Barkeep: Sir, the toilet is right over there.

D.W: ??Duties?, not?aw forget it. Just tell me where?*DW shifts his eyes from left to right*?The ?Boss? is?

[center]*Everyone in the bar stops what they?re doing and gasps*[/center]

D.W: What? What are you all staring at? Can?t a mobster ask to see his boss without drawing attention to himself?

Barkeep: Forgive us sir, he?s right over there *pointing at the corner table*

D.W: Thank you, now if you?ll excuse me.

[center][D.W walks over and is let through by 2 mobsters guarding the table] [/center]

The ?Boss?: Ah, Scallywag. I see you?re back from fish scaling duty. I hope you remembered to shower before you came here.

[center][Mobsters laugh] [/center]

D.W: Yeah yeah, who are the new guys?

The ?Boss?: Ah yes, let me introduce you. This here is Benny ?The Lighter??

Benny: Yo. *Benny fiddles with 2 zippo lighters, spinning them around in quick fashion*

The ?Boss?: This here to my right is Randy ?The Socket?

D.W: The Socket? The hell kind of name is that?

[center][Randy walks over to D.W and presses his pointer finger to his arm, crating a static electricity shock][/center]

D.W: Ow! What the hell man! Hope you aren?t on whacking duty?

Barkeep: Sir, again the bathroom is over?

D.W: Shut up and get your mind out of the gutter old man!

The ?Boss?: Finally, this one here they call Gavin ?The Grandfather Clock?. He?s a man of few words.

Gavin: Interesting?Most Interesting.

D.W: ?what is?

Gavin: Interesting?Most Interesting.

D.W: ?dude, what?

The ?Boss?: Don?t mind him, Scallywag. That?s how he communicates?now, are you ready for your next job?

D.W: Um, actually?I came here to tell you something.

The ?Boss?: What?s that?

D.W: Well?I uhh?you see, I think it?s time I parted ways with the mob.

[center][Everyone stops and gasps again][/center]

D.W: Holy crap, what?s with you people? Don?t you all have drinking and brawling to do?

The ?Boss?: Part ways? You?want to part ways? Hahaha! You gotta be kidding me. Who?s giving your permission to do that?

D.W: Well, It?s just?I kinda want to get my life back on track. So I think it?s best.

Gavin: Interesting?Most Interesting.

D.W: ?does he say anything else!?

The ?Boss?: You have to get used to it, don?t worry.

D.W: Ah ha?

The ?Boss?: Oh, right?*ahem*?well then, how about we decide your fate like men? You happened to interrupt us in the middle of a poker game. How about we deal you in, and if you win I will grant you your freedom.

D.W: ?and if I lose?

The ?Boss?: You pay up what you owe?PLUS interest.

D.W: What!? Those terms are completely unfair, why would I accept?

[center][Benny, Randy, and 3 other generic mobsters with no names who will probably never be seen again throughout this screenplay stand and position themselves around D.W, cracking their fists][/center]

D.W: I uhh?heh heh. Alright then?so then I?ll just have to win!

The ?Boss?: Hehe, deal him in boys. Straight game for $5000 flat.

D.W: FIVE THOUSAND!? Wait a minute, I don?t have that kind of money! You pay me in empty coke cans for god sake!

Gavin: Interesting?Most Interesting.

The ?Boss?: That?s [u]enough[/u], Gavin.

[center][Cards are dealt in 5 card draw fashion to The ?Boss? and D.W. D.W gets a 5, 2 Jacks, and two Queens][/center]

D.W: [I] Ha, alright?looks like this could be my lucky day![/I]

The ?Boss?: Give me one.

[center][?Boss? is dealt one card][/center]

D.W: I?ll take one too!

[center][D.W is dealt one card, it is the Jack of diamonds][/center]

D.W: [I]Haha! This is it, I?ll win for sure. I?ll be free to live my life, five thousand dollars richer![/I]

The ?Boss?: Alright, what do ya got?

D.W: Read em and weep bossman, full house!

[center][D.W reveals hand][/center]

Gavin: Interesting?Most?

The ?Boss? and D.W: SHUT UP!

[center][Gavin slumps his head with a frown on his face][/center]

The ?Boss?: Well, that?s quite a good hand. Too bad though?

[center][?Boss? reveals a four of a kind of aces][/center]

D.W: N?no way! You cheated!

The ?Boss?: Cheated? You accusing me of [u]cheating[/u]!?

Benny: Haha, you lost fair and square sucker. Pay up.

D.W: You can forget about that!

[center][D.W throws an elbow and takes the mobster blocking his back by surprise. He makes a fun for it, shoving people out of his way.][/center]

The ?Boss?: Get him, but don?t kill him!

[center][Mobsters chase D.W toward the tavern?s swinging doors. D.W shoves his way through the doors and makes a sharp left turn.][/center]

D.W: [I]If I can get aboard that ship, I?ll be home free! Just a little bit furth?[/I]

[center][D.W crashed into a man buying something from a merchant mid-thought and tumbles along with him onto the ground][/center]

D.W: Ow?who the hell?

Man: Oh no! My money! Where did it go!?

[center][The merchant picks the man?s money up from near his foot and slips it into his pocket while whistling innocently][/center]

D.W: Oh man! You?re gonna get me killed buddy!

Randy: There he is!

D.W: Oh shit! Move it!

Man: Hey! You don?t even apologize and now you?re shoving me?

[center][D.W scrambles to his feet but is tackled down by generic mobster number 1][/center]

D.W: Hey! Get the hell off, I?m not paying you bums!

Generic Mobster #2: Hey! I think this guy here is his accomplice. He?s been planning on stiffing the boss this whole time!

Randy: You mean The ?Boss??

Generic Mobster #2: No?I mean boss. The regular noun, not the proper noun.

Generic Mobster #3: Noun?

Randy: So you?re not saying his name?

Generic Mobster #2: No! I mean?he?s our boss, and his name happens to be The ?Boss??but he?s still our boss, so I called him that!

Man: Hey look, I don?t know what?s going on here?but I?m not with this guy?

Randy: Shut up! You guys are done for!

[center][Randy rubs his hands together and presses his finger against the man?s arm, shocking him ever so slightly][/center]

Man: ?ow.

D.W: You weakling!

[center][The ?Boss? walks up from behind Randy with a crowbar in hand][/center]

The ?Boss?: So, you got yourself a partner eh?

Man: What!? I don?t know this guy! Look, my name is B.K Smith, I?m just a normal guy trying buy some fruit, and he bumped into me!

Benny: B.K? Hm, pretty cool name bub.

B.K: Well, actually?it stands for Brian Kerry.

[center][Mobsters laugh hysterically, clearly offended B.K frowns.][/center]

The ?Boss?: Well then, since I?m such a nice guy?tell ya what I?ll do. By my count you owe me $5000 plus interest, which comes out to about?ohhhh?.$10,000.

D.W: WHAT!? You?re insane!

The ?Boss?: Shut up! Since you and your buddy here were trying to pull a fast one on us, he can help you get my money. You bozos have till next week to get me my money or else the both of yous will be sleeping with the fishes!

[center][?Boss? points toward water with crowbar][/center]

Randy: Hehe, yeah and remember that we got the whole city under watch?so there?s no way you guy?s are going to be able to get away from us.

[center][Mobsters rough up D.W and B.K a little bit before walking away.][/center]

The ?Boss?: Remember, one week. You know where to find me, and if you don?t have my money?I?ll know where to find you!

B.K: Wait a minute?don?t get me involved in this!? Everything was going to well! I just got rid of that rash and everything! Plus, my job doesn?t pay nearly that much!

D.W: Well, no use complaining now. You?re gonna help me out buddy, unless you want us both to get killed!

B.K: Wait! Noooooooo!

[center][D.W gets up and drags B.K along with him. ?Boss? raises his arm and motions for someone.][/center]

The ?Boss?: 36 Keys?follow them. Make sure they keep to their ?commitment?.

Mr. 36 Keys: Um?sir, that?s [u]Mr.[/u] 36 Keys.

The ?Boss?: ?yeah, whatever have fun with that. Just go.

[center][Mr. 36 Keys mumbles under his breathe as he secretly trails D.W and B.K][/center]


[center]* * * * *[/center]

Alright, feel free to make changes if ya want. Like I said, it's to get us started =P.
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[Rachmaninoff]

Oh my. That was fun. That was just beautiful. The only thing I noticed was a tiny typo here:

[D.W throws an elbow and takes the mobster blocking his back by surprise. He makes a fun for it, shoving people out of his way.]

Where you have he makes a [U]fun[/U] for it when it needs to be He makes a [I]run[/I] for it.

Anyway, that whole thing was awesome.

[TheResplendent]

[QUOTE=Rachmaninoff]Oh my. That was fun. That was just beautiful. The only thing I noticed was a tiny typo here:

[D.W throws an elbow and takes the mobster blocking his back by surprise. He makes a fun for it, shoving people out of his way.]

Where you have he makes a [U]fun[/U] for it when it needs to be He makes a [I]run[/I] for it.

Anyway, that whole thing was awesome.[/QUOTE]

[font=tahoma]Ja, should be run :D, lol. Thanks for pointing that out, Rach. [/font]

[Dragon Warrior]

[size=1]I've been working on more of it. I hope it doesn't come down to one of us cramming it all in. Here's some more finished work so you guys can see. It includes what BK wrote as well.[/size]

[center][b][u]A Pair Of Jokers[/u][/b][/center]

[b]Main Characters:[/b]
D.W Scallywag ? Dragon Warrior
B.K Smith ? BKstyles
Princess Peanut ? Peanut
Lady Kitty - Kitty
The ?Boss? ? The Boss
Benny ?The Lighter? ? Blayze
Randy ?The Socket? ? Raiyuu
Gavin ?The Grandfather Clock? ? Gavin
Mr. ?36 Keys? ? Rachmaninoff
Sunny E. Falls ? SunfallE
Sandy Taylor The Tailor? Sandy
Farmer Shy ? Shy
Ezekiela ? Ezekiel
Sir Darren ? Darren
King White ? White



Scene 1

[D.W stretches his arms as he walks through ?The Buzzkill? tavern?s entrance]

D.W: Oh man, that last job really tired me out. I need a vacation?or something. "Boss" is always giving me the crap duties.

Barkeep: Sir, the toilet is right over there.

D.W: ??Duties?, not?aw forget it. Just tell me where?[DW shifts his eyes from left to right]?The ?Boss? is?
[Everyone in the bar stops what they?re doing and gasps]

D.W: What? What are you all staring at? Can?t a mobster ask to see his boss without drawing attention to himself?

Barkeep: Forgive us sir, he?s right over there [pointing at the corner table]

D.W: Thank you, now if you?ll excuse me.
[D.W walks over and is let through by 2 mobsters guarding the table]

The ?Boss?: Ah, Scallywag. I see you?re back from fish scaling duty. I hope you remembered to shower before you came here.
[Mobsters laugh]

D.W: Yeah yeah, who are the new guys?

The ?Boss?: Ah yes, let me introduce you. This here is Benny ?The Lighter??

Benny: Yo. [fiddles with 2 zippo lighters, spinning them around in quick fashion]

The ?Boss?: This here to my right is Randy ?The Socket.?

D.W: The Socket? The hell kind of name is that?
[Randy walks over to D.W and presses his pointer finger to his arm, crating a static electricity shock]

D.W: Ow! What the hell man! Hope you aren?t on whacking duty?

Barkeep: Sir, again the bathroom is over?

D.W: Shut up and get your mind out of the gutter old man!

The ?Boss?: Finally, this one here they call Gavin ?The Grandfather Clock?. He?s a man of few words.

Gavin: Interesting?Most Interesting.

D.W: ?what is?

Gavin: Interesting?Most Interesting.

D.W: ?dude, what?

The ?Boss?: Don?t mind him, Scallywag. That?s how he communicates?now, are you ready for your next job?

D.W: Um, actually?I came here to tell you something.

The ?Boss?: What?s that?

D.W: Well?I uhh?you see, I think it?s time I parted ways with the mob.
[Everyone stops and gasps again]

D.W: Holy crap, what?s with you people? Don?t you all have drinking and brawling to do?

The ?Boss?: Part ways? You?want to part ways? Hahaha! You gotta be kidding me. Who?s giving your permission to do that?

D.W: Well, It?s just?I kinda want to get my life back on track. So I think it?s best.

Gavin: Interesting?Most Interesting.

D.W: ?does he say anything else!?

The ?Boss?: You have to get used to it, don?t worry.

D.W: Ah ha?

The ?Boss?: Oh, right?ahem?well then, how about we decide your fate like men? You happened to interrupt us in the middle of a poker game. How about we deal you in, and if you win I will grant you your freedom.

D.W: ?and if I lose?

The ?Boss?: You pay up what you owe?PLUS interest.

D.W: What!? Those terms are completely unfair, why would I accept?
[Benny, Randy, and 3 other generic mobsters with no names who will probably never be seen again throughout this screenplay stand and position themselves around D.W, cracking their fists]

D.W: I uhh?heh heh. Alright then?so then I?ll just have to win!

The ?Boss?: Hehe, deal him in boys. Straight game for $5000 flat.

D.W: FIVE THOUSAND!? Wait a minute, I don?t have that kind of money! You pay me in empty coke cans for god sake!

Gavin: Interesting?Most Interesting.

The ?Boss?: That?s enough, Gavin.
[Cards are dealt in 5 card draw fashion to The ?Boss? and D.W. D.W gets a 5, 2 Jacks, and two Queens]

D.W: [Thinking:] Ha, alright?looks like this could be my lucky day!

The ?Boss?: Give me one.
[?Boss? is dealt one card]

D.W: I?ll take one too!
[D.W is dealt one card, it is the Jack of diamonds]

D.W: [Thinking:] Haha! This is it, I?ll win for sure. I?ll be free to live my life, five thousand dollars richer!

The ?Boss?: Alright, what do ya got?

D.W: Read em and weep bossman, full house!
[D.W reveals hand]

Gavin: Interesting?Most?

The ?Boss? and D.W: SHUT UP!
[Gavin slumps his head with a frown on his face]

The ?Boss?: Well, that?s quite a good hand. Too bad though?
[?Boss? reveals a four of a kind of aces]

D.W: N?no way! You cheated!

The ?Boss?: Cheated? You accusing me of cheating!?

Benny: Haha, you lost fair and square sucker. Pay up.

D.W: You can forget about that!
[D.W throws an elbow and takes the mobster blocking his back by surprise. He makes a fun for it, shoving people out of his way.]

The ?Boss?: Get him, but don?t kill him!
[Mobsters chase D.W toward the tavern?s swinging doors. D.W shoves his way through the doors and makes a sharp left turn.]

D.W: [Thinking:] If I can get aboard that ship, I?ll be home free! Just a little bit furth?
[D.W crashed into a man buying something from a merchant mid-thought and tumbles along with him onto the ground]

D.W: Ow?who the hell?

Man: Oh no! My money! Where did it go!?
[The merchant picks the man?s money up from near his foot and slips it into his pocket while whistling innocently]

D.W: Oh man! You?re gonna get me killed buddy!

Randy: There he is!

D.W: Oh shit! Move it!

Man: Hey! You don?t even apologize and now you?re shoving me?
[D.W scrambles to his feet but is tackled down by generic mobster number 1]

D.W: Hey! Get the hell off, I?m not paying you bums!

Generic Mobster #2: Hey! I think this guy here is his accomplice. He?s been planning on stiffing the boss this whole time!

Randy: You mean The ?Boss??

Generic Mobster #2: No?I mean boss. The regular noun, not the proper noun.

Generic Mobster #3: Noun?

Randy: So you?re not saying his name?

Generic Mobster #2: No! I mean?he?s our boss, and his name happens to be The ?Boss??but he?s still our boss, so I called him that!

Man: Hey look, I don?t know what?s going on here?but I?m not with this guy?

Randy: Shut up! You guys are done for!
[Randy rubs his hands together and presses his finger against the man?s arm, shocking him ever so slightly]

Man: ?ow.

D.W: You weakling!
[The ?Boss? walks up from behind Randy with a crowbar in hand]

The ?Boss?: So, you got yourself a partner eh?

Man: What!? I don?t know this guy! Look, my name is B.K Smith, I?m just a normal guy trying buy some fruit, and he bumped into me!

Benny: B.K? Hm, pretty cool name bub.

B.K: Well, actually?it stands for Brian Kerry.
[Mobsters laugh hysterically, clearly offended B.K frowns.]

The ?Boss?: Well then, since I?m such a nice guy?tell ya what I?ll do. By my count you owe me $5000 plus interest, which comes out to about?ohhhh?.$10,000.

D.W: WHAT!? You?re insane!

The ?Boss?: Shut up! Since you and your buddy here were trying to pull a fast one on us, he can help you get my money. You bozos have till next week to get me my money or else the both of yous will be sleeping with the fishes!
[?Boss? points toward water with crowbar]

Randy: Hehe, yeah and remember that we got the whole city under watch?so there?s no way you guy?s are going to be able to get away from us.
[Mobsters rough up D.W and B.K a little bit before walking away.]

The ?Boss?: Remember, one week. You know where to find me, and if you don?t have my money?I?ll know where to find you!

B.K: Wait a minute?don?t get me involved in this!? Everything was going to well! I just got rid of that rash and everything! Plus, my job doesn?t pay nearly that much!

D.W: Well, no use complaining now. You?re gonna help me out buddy, unless you want us both to get killed!

B.K: Wait! Noooooooo!
[D.W gets up and drags B.K along with him. ?Boss? raises his arm and motions for someone.]

The ?Boss?: 36 Keys?follow them. Make sure they keep to their ?commitment?.

Mr. 36 Keys: Um?sir, that?s Mr. 36 Keys.

The ?Boss?: ?yeah, whatever have fun with that. Just go.
[Mr. 36 Keys mumbles under his breathe as he secretly trails D.W and B.K]



Scene 2

[D.W. and B.K. are walking downtown later that same day contemplating.]

B.K: What?s our next move? What do we do? Why am I here? How come I?m getting threatened with death? Who are you, exactly? And why do I smell circus folk?

D.W: Calm down, man. I?ve got this all under control. We can think our way out of this.

B.K: Okay. I?m calm.

D.W: We just need money. Let?s rob a bank.

B.K: What?! No! No way! If we?re going to get that money, we?re doing it in a civilized manner and through normal methods.

D.W: [Pause] Wha?

B.K: We?re getting jobs.

D.W: Pff, jobs. You can?t make 10 grand in a week pumping gas.

B.K: There?s bound to be jobs where we can make a lot of dough in a short amount of time where we can still at least keep our dignity.



Scene 3

[D.W. and B.K. stand on a farm they have to trudge through mud and cowpies alike.]

B.K: Somehow the part I said about keeping our dignity must?ve been lost to you.

D.W: Nah, trust me. We can easily get a good, high-paying job here on this farm. I know of this guy here who needs a few expert crop-dusters.

B.K: I know nothing about crop-dusting!

D.W: Oh, it?s really easy.

B.K: Have you done it before or something?

D.W: No, but I eat corn.

B.K: [Pause] What?s? that have to do with? ?

D.W: Trust me. I?ll talk him into giving us the job. There?s no way we can fail.

[D.W. and B.K. approach Farmer Shy].

D.W: Hi, Farmer Shy.

Shy: Howdy. What can I do you fer?

D.W: No, we?re not hookers.

[Shy gives a look of confusion.]

D.W: We?re here about the crop-dusting job.

Shy: Are you professionals?

D.W: Of course! How rude of you to say we aren?t!

Shy: Sorry. I?m jus? a bit cautious. Last time I had two jokers come to me saying they were professionals, but didn?t have any IDs to prove they were. Turns out, they were just trying to make $10,000 dollars in a week to pay back a mob boss they lost a card game with. Hah, you can?t write stuff like that there, eh?

[D.W. and B.K. look at each other.]

Ezekiela: Father!

[Everyone turns to see Ezekiela, who is approaching the group.]

Shy: Oh, boys, this here is my daughter, Ezekiela.

D.W: You?re hot.

Shy: What did you jus? say?!

[B.K. elbows D.W.]

D.W: I said? um? I smell rot? [Looks to B.K.] Brush your teeth more, idiot! [Smacks him to the ground.]

Shy: Good. ?Cause if you even complimented my daughter, I?d kill yooouuu.

D.W: Well noted!

Shy: So, I reckon you have IDs, right?

D.W: Yes? but you have to hold on first. We have to go do something. 'Cause we left... the cat by the... cat-killing machine.

[D.W. and B.K. take off running. B.K. is being practically dragged.]

B.K: What now, huh?

D.W: I have an old friend who can help us out! C?mon!



Scene 4

[D.W. and B.K. enter a small quaint shop in town. Sandy sits at the counter.]

Sandy: Oh, no, not you again. [Puts his head in his hands.]

D.W: Hewwo, Sandy, my dear friend.

Sandy: Look, I don?t have any more women?s underwear for you, D.W.

D.W: [Embarrassed] Hah? uh? what are you talking about?

Sandy: You bought me out. I?m sorry. I can?t sell you any more.

D.W: [Catches B.K.?s odd looks.] Oh, Sandy, you?re such a kidder. [Nervous laugh.] I?m here on new business.

Sandy: What now?

D.W: We need IDs for being crop-dusters.

Sandy: And what in your pea-sized mind makes you think I could possibly do that for you? I?m a tailor.

D.W: Yes! But you?re Sandy!

Sandy: This is true. [Notices B.K.] Who?s he?

B.K: I?m-

D.W: That?s Barney Gumble.

B.K: No, I?m Brian Kerry.

D.W: Right. What did I say?

B.K: Are you able to do this so we can get out of here and I can get on with my life?

Sandy: No need to be so pushy. I?ll see what I have. [Reaches into a drawer and pulls out two crop-duster ID cards.] Here you go. Already made.

[D.W. and B.K. look at each other.]

B.K: Okay, that wasn?t weird.

D.W: Put it on my tab, Sandy, m?man!

Sandy: This is a tailor shop. There is no tab, you- [Notices D.W. and B.K. already left.] I hope he gets poisoned and crashes the plane, which explodes and sends him into a fiery death of horror. Wow, I need my pills.



Scene 5

[D.W. and B.K. return to the farm and meet Shy.]

D.W: Here you are. [Shows IDs.]

Shy: Wow. How authentic. Yer hired. You?ll get paid the ridiculously high payment of 10 grand by the end of the week. [Walks away mumbling and shaking his head.] Why I pay 10,000 for crop-dusting is beyond me?

D.W: Let?s go check out the plane!

[D.W. and B.K. enter the barn where the plane is stored and they begin studying it.]

B.K.: You sure you know anything about this?

D.W: Please, B.K. I?m an excellent aggravator.

B.K: Aggravator?

D.W: [Sighs.] Yes. A pilot? Someone who flies planes? Hello!

B.K: An aviator, you mean?

D.W: I know what I said, Ben.

B.K: It?s Brian! And I?m just saying? we could get in big trouble.

D.W: You?ll get in trouble if I don?t get myself a glass of raspberry lemonade in a second.

B.K: ? wait, what?

D.W: Get me my damned lemonade!

B.K: Fine! [Runs off towards the farmhouse.]

[D.W. continues working. Ezekiela emerges from the piles of hay.]

Ezekiela: Hey, good-lookin?.

D.W: Ahh! Ezekiel!

Ezekiela: No, it?s Ezekiela.

D.W: My boob. I mean?my bad!

Ezekiela: You look so strong workin? on that plane there.

D.W: Yeah. It?ll be done in a sex. I mean?in a sec! Uhh?

Ezekiela: I?m not makin? you uncomfortable, am I?

D.W: No! I?m just a little hungry, I guess. I?m wondering where Bart went with my nude. I mean?food!

Ezekiela: Oh, don?t worry about him right now. [Sexually approaches D.W.] It?s just you and me.

D.W: Please be gentle?

[Suddenly Shy busts in with his shotgun while B.K. runs by screaming.]

B.K.: RUUUN!

D.W: [Takes off at a sprint after B.K.] Wait for me!

Shy: I told you not to touch my daughter in the generic farm fatherly way! You disobeyed me and must die! [Fires the shotgun.]



Scene 6

[D.W. and B.K. return to sitting in Sandy?s shop. Sandy is reading the newspaper]

B.K: That was fun.

Sandy: No good, eh?

B.K: D.W. couldn?t keep his hands off the farmer?s daughter.

D.W: She came onto me!

[There is silence, then B.K. and Sandy bust out laughing.]

Sandy: Ohhh, D.W., no girl will come onto you! Haha!

B.K: Woo! That almost made this whole experience worth while.

D.W: Bite me.

B.K: Which acre?

Sandy: Settle down, you two! It says here in the newspaper there?s a new job opening. Maybe you guys can try this.

D.W: What is it?

Sandy: Well, have a look!

[D.W. and B.K. walk over and read the paper. They are suddenly interested.]

D.W: Sandy Taylor the Tailor, make me a match. Find me a find. Catch me a catch.

Sandy: What?

D.W: Make us goddamn costumes!



Scene 7

[An alarm goes off waking Mr. 36 Keys up.]

36 Keys: Crap. I was supposed to be following those guys. I missed out on one fourth of the script already then. Gah! I suck.



Scene 8

[D.W. and B.K. arrive at a castle.]

B.K: This explains the armor I?m wearing.

D.W: Welcome to Kingdom White.

B.K: Why is the castle black then?

D.W: I think that?s the color the castle originally came in and our crew was too cheap to paint it white for the movie.

B.K: Dang.

D.W: I know.

Sir Darren: Helt! [Draws sword.] I mean? halt! [Puts away the sword.] Please? don?t hurt me!

D.W: Who are you?

Sir Darren: I am Darren and I am much stronger than you! Prepare to die!

King White: Nonsense, Darren. You suck. [Pushes Darren into the moat.] Greetings. I am King White of White Kingdom.

B.K: That makes sense.

D.W: We?re here about the Knights For Hire job.

King White: Well, you certainly do look ripe for the job. Think you can handle sleeping all day, drinking all night, getting all the loose women in the kingdom you want, lounging around and having servants wait on your every beck and call?

D.W/B.K: ? we?ll manage?

King White: Welcome, then!



Scene 9

[D.W. is being fed grapes by several beautiful women while B.K. sulks by a fire.]

B.K: D.W.! We should be trying to get money.

D.W: Relax. Opportunity will show itself. Now shut up. I?m using witty pick up lines. [To a female.] I?m a treasure hunter, may I investigate your chest?

[King White enters with Sir Darren by his side.]

King White: The time has come, Knights For Hire!

D.W: Whaaat? I was getting my boom-shank-a-lanka on.

King White: There will be plenty of time for that later. My daughter has been stolen!

B.K: Don?t you mean kidnapped, not stolen?

King White: Off with his head!

Knight #1: No, sire! Not now!

King White: Fine. You two must go rescue her.

Sir Darren: No, Your Majesty! Not them! I don?t like them. They smell funny.

King White: Enough, Sir Darren! You suck too much to take seriously.

Sir Darren: Whimper?

King White: Go to the dreaded castle called The Castle of Dread and save her from the Dreaded Castle Keeper.

D.W: How much will we get for it?

King White: Five gold coins.

D.W: Charlie horse my elbow hair?! Are you serious? Only five coins?

King White: It?s exactly equivalent to 10,000 dollars in American money.

B.K: That?s? convenient. Much like the farmer.

King White: Then you must ride immediately!

Sir Darren: This sucks butt!

[D.W. slays Sir Darren quickly with his sword.]

D.W: We all know it had to be done.
[Everyone nods in agreement. D.W. then proceeds to toss the corpse out the window into the moat where 36 Keys is hiding. He is hit by the body.]

36 Keys: Ugh! I?m allergic to dead bodies! [Breaks out in hives.] Ahhh!

[Kitty]

[size=1]Loving the story so far, guys. xD As expected, lots of DW's 'trademark' comedic style. Can't wait to see my debut, of course. And oh yeah! I finished the graphic, and DW has it, so you'll all get to see it when he adds the final draft of the script to the main thread. Be patient. ;D

... Now what could DW want with ladies underwear? >_>;[/size]

[Rachmaninoff]

[quote name='Kitty][size=1']... Now what could DW want with ladies underwear? >_>;[/size][/quote]I was wondering the same thing. o_O

Anyway, excellent work, I was reading through it and I didn't see any problems as far as typos go.

If you have anything you want me to do please tell me. Because I'm not sure where you are going at this point with the story so I've no clue what to write or if you actually need me to try and write up a part. :animedepr

[TheResplendent]

[QUOTE=Rachmaninoff]I was wondering the same thing. o_O

Anyway, excellent work, I was reading through it and I didn't see any problems as far as typos go.

If you have anything you want me to do please tell me. Because I'm not sure where you are going at this point with the story so I've no clue what to write or if you actually need me to try and write up a part. :animedepr[/QUOTE]
[font=tahoma]
Well i've got a bit of the next parts written up, I intend on finishing it later and having it posted before I go to sleep (which hopefully is within the deadline that Sandy set in reference to my time here). I don't know the exact "give or take" for hours are between time zones but with the timezone confusion between the second and current challenges I don't think Sandy will penalize for being a couple of hours off seeing as how there was no exact hour specified along with the day.[/font]

[Rachmaninoff]

[quote name='Sandy][FONT=Century Gothic]Who holds your team back? Who doesn?t pull his or her weight? Who do you think enabled the loss of this challenge? It?s time to vote [i]who[/i'].[/FONT][/quote]* raises hand* [B]Me[/B].

I?ll be placing my vote for the simple reason I can?t vote for myself. But I was completely lost in this challenge and other than proofreading and helping define my character?s name I wasn?t able to add much of anything to this challenge.

I was glad we had a more interactive challenge this time around, but I failed to figure out how to actually help. I?m not very good at writing things of this nature. Hell if SunfallE wasn?t giving me clear objectives in the Silver One rpg I'm in, I?d be just as lost there as I was here when it came to ideas and writing.

So even though I was able to do my part last time, this time I was not, sorry team. And since I think I helped contribute to our loss and that I?ll be voted out this round, best of luck and no hard feelings on my part. Since I feel bad I didn?t do more. :animesigh

[Kitty]

[quote name='Rachmaninoff']So even though I was able to do my part last time, this time I was not, sorry team. And since I think I helped contribute to our loss and that I?ll be voted out this round, best of luck and no hard feelings on my part. Since I feel bad I didn?t do more. :animesigh[/quote] [SIZE=1]You're not the only one. >__> I barely even commented at all, and the only thing I really contributed was the (omgsuckybad) banner/splash. ):

No matter who gets voted out (*cough*me*cough*), no hard feelings to anyone. :3 Go LOLs!
[/SIZE]

[Dragon Warrior]

[size=1]Hah, guys, we can't beat ourselves up over this. We all made some mistakes out there. BK and I wrote the script, so heck, a lot of the bad critiques were against us. I think it's all pretty fair here. Even if we lose someone, we need to pick up the slack. Next round, we're not going down![/size]

[TheResplendent]

[quote name='Dragon Warrior][size=1']Hah, guys, we can't beat ourselves up over this. We all made some mistakes out there. BK and I wrote the script, so heck, a lot of the bad critiques were against us. I think it's all pretty fair here. Even if we lose someone, we need to pick up the slack. Next round, we're not going down![/size][/quote]

[font=tahoma]Aye, I wanted to say that as well. We are just as much to blame for not taking everything into consideration when writing up the script. Though i personally think it's great and funny, Sandy has some strict guidelines to go by. By no means are we out of the game yet though, i'm almost confident one of the prizes for the next round will be a chance for recruitment so we can atleast replenish our numbers by nailing the next challenge. If not, then we can make sure the other teams lose someone instead of us :cool: .

All teams except the Titans will be on even ground with 3 members come the next challenge, so in a way we're not really that far behind.

Edit - Sorry to see ya go Rach, we'll avenge you and Peanut with a win for the next round ><.

Anybody have any ideas what Sandy might be using this "volounteer" for? It's definitly hard to choose when we don't know the criteria...the volounteer could be excluded, or the whole challenge could rest on his/her shoulders, or they could have some special responsibility.

Of course though, i'm willing to throw my name in if you two would rather not...I think...um...*wipes sweatdrop off*. Damn you Sandy.[/font]

[Kitty]

[size=1]Like BK has already said, it's sad to see another team member go, but hopefully we'll be able to win the next challenge, and the ones after that one!

Normally, I wouldn't volunteer myself for something like this (being the coward that I am, lol), but I feel like I haven't been doing a lot so far, so I'm asking you guys if it's okay that I volunteer. :3 Feel free to turn me down; it won't hurt my feelings or anything. In fact, I'm probably more worried about what's about to happen than both of you are. xP But if BK's theory that those who volunteer are, indeed, excluded from the next challenge, I'm positive you two would be able to perform fine without me. ^__^

If it rests on my shoulders, then... I hope I'm allowed to ask for tons of help. >_____>;;;;[/size]

[TheResplendent]

[QUOTE=Kitty][size=1]Like BK has already said, it's sad to see another team member go, but hopefully we'll be able to win the next challenge, and the ones after that one!

Normally, I wouldn't volunteer myself for something like this (being the coward that I am, lol), but I feel like I haven't been doing a lot so far, so I'm asking you guys if it's okay that I volunteer. :3 Feel free to turn me down; it won't hurt my feelings or anything. In fact, I'm probably more worried about what's about to happen than both of you are. xP But if BK's theory that those who volunteer are, indeed, excluded from the next challenge, I'm positive you two would be able to perform fine without me. ^__^

If it rests on my shoulders, then... I hope I'm allowed to ask for tons of help. >_____>;;;;[/size][/QUOTE]

[font=tahoma]I do think the possibility that the chosen one will have a seperate responsibility then the others is a greater one then he or she being excluded, but what that responsibility is will be pretty difficult to know. I don't think something like team swapping will be probable since i don't think anyone's loyalties are so wavering that they would opt NOT to mess the other team up purposely.

My guess is that one will rely on the other (the one vs the rest of the team or vice versa) a great deal in order to complete the event, though.[/font]

[Dragon Warrior]

[size=1]Yes, we all mourn Rach :( I hate having to choose who to vote off. But I guess it has to happen and life goes on. Having said that, we thank you for your help and support, Rach!

Also, since we have to have one volunteer for the next challenge, I'll leave it up to you two to choose who does it. I think either of you deserve a good chance to do something awesome. And no, this isn't my attempt at getting out of some work :P[/size]

[TheResplendent]

[QUOTE=Dragon Warrior][size=1]Yes, we all mourn Rach :( I hate having to choose who to vote off. But I guess it has to happen and life goes on. Having said that, we thank you for your help and support, Rach!

Also, since we have to have one volunteer for the next challenge, I'll leave it up to you two to choose who does it. I think either of you deserve a good chance to do something awesome. And no, this isn't my attempt at getting out of some work :P[/size][/QUOTE]

[font=tahoma]Captain's perogative, eh? j/k, lol.

Well i definitly don't think it should be you, but it IS hard to tell what kind of position this person will be put in. My logic about it is, DW and myself have very similar strengths and aptitudes, where as Kitty has an expertise that is exclusive to her. It might be best to have the two of you on one side, with me as the one person so it seems evened out a bit more. The only way I can see this backfiring is if the one person is heavily relied on for GFX, but i highly doubt that will be the case.

It's up to you guys for the final judgement, but that's my proposal. Since we are short so many members this is definitly an important decision, so all points and possibilities should be brought up. So we should spend atleast a couple of posts talking it over (i know Sandy is waiting for our PM).[/font]

[Dragon Warrior]

[size=1]I agree with this statement. And I don't see Sandy placing such an exclusive task such as graphics on one team member, especially since everyone has their own skills and abilities like you said. I think it's a safe bet to have you go in, and have Kitty and I sit on the sidelines. I'm not sure what this will entail, but there's only one way to find out. Kitty, what's your input?[/size]

[Kitty]

[quote name='BKstyles][font=tahoma']Since we are short so many members this is definitly an important decision, so all points and possibilities should be brought up. So we should spend atleast a couple of posts talking it over (i know Sandy is waiting for our PM).[/font][/quote] [SIZE=1]Actually, I think you just brought up all the points needed, lol. In light of your opinons, I say you should volunteer instead of me. Go ahead and PM Sandy, 'cause DW already said he's fine with whoever we decided on. ^__^

I'm still extremely curious as to what the purpose of the volunteers is, and what our next challenge is, exactly. I really wish I could just peak into his mind to get around all this 'waiting' business. D: That would make things [i]so[/i] much easier, lol.[/SIZE]

[TheResplendent]

[FONT=Tahoma]Well, It has been done. Hopefully I'm not going to be in too much danger, heh.

Hopefully we find out what's going on soon. Though i'll probably be sleeping when Sandy posts the new round up.[/FONT]

[Sandy]

[B]Announcement[/B]:
[B]BKstyles[/B] has moved to The Titans, and [B]Darren[/B] is your new captain now. Cheers!

[Darren]

I think Sandy gets too much enjoyment out of this whole thing.

Hey team, I guess I'm your new captain... :animeshy: Hopefully we'll change that after this round is over. I really don't know a lot of either of you, being that I'm still somewhat of a noob to OB, but I know of you, and that's the important thing... All I know is that Kitty is supposed to be a darned good graphics artist and that DW is an all-around a jack-- I mean cool guy. :D I've really only seen Kitty in the OtaKuties boards and I hear tons about DW every time I browse the boards; You're everywhere, man... So hopefully this won't be too awkward and we'll be able to get along just fine. I suppose that if there was any time for me to be captain, it would be now: I love debate... I've only debated policy in school, but I practice on my parents all the time. :catgirl: So hopefully, that will be able to shine through here. I'm glad that we don't have to go this first round... That way, I'll have the chance of getting to know both of you before we run in and I put us in a bad order and screw things up. *no pressure* :animeswea On to an intro:

I've already posted my intro on Mercenaries site, but I dont' feel like using the same one... So I'll just come up with one on my own. Sorry if I jump around a lot. I don't think on a set path.

My name is Darren, I'm 16... I live in the middle of nowhere and I'm constantly bored out of my mind. My love for music is only surpassed by my love for the theatre. I hope to be an actor some day soon. I don't play many sports but I jump hurdles for track, (when I actually have time) and I swim. (not competitively) Since both of those are summer sports, I have a lot of spare time in seasons like this one. Sorry-- :animeangr -- I was going to try to make a new intro that was different from the Mercenaries one that I did, but it seems to be staying the same... So I'll just stop here, and let you guys ask questions if you really want to know something. (I understand if you don't; I know I'm not that interesting)

Oh, by the way, I really hope that you don't perceive me the way you drew me out on your screenplay, DW... I don't think I'm annoying [SIZE=1]most of the time.[/SIZE] :rolleyes:

Also, since we're supposed to be preparing for a debate, does anyone have experience or are we just going to be awesome noobs? I'm fine with either, since with what I've seen on OB Survivor so far from you two is far beyond my own awesomness.

Anyway, let me know. :animesigh