Writing The Busted & Shattered [Concept]

[Aberinkula]

[I][COLOR="77656"]Well, I've decided to start a story differently this time. Usually I just go head first into something, this time I took the time to comply a few things together. I'd really love feedback on what you guys think. Anyways, it's another story related to P&A, however just like the last one, you don't need prior knowledge of P&A to get this. This story is called The Busted & Shattered, however I don't know if that's the final name.[/COLOR][/I]

[COLOR="77656"][CENTER][B][SIZE="5"][u]THE BUSTED & SHATTERED[/SIZE][/U]
CONCEPT BY:[/b] [I]Rick 'Gunslinger' O.[/I]

[SIZE="3"][B][U]STORY-LINE: [/U][/B][/SIZE][/CENTER]
The Western Continent is very different from the eastern Continent that houses the kingdom of Doma. The kingdom of Yprez is falling after the war of Aryla, an island north that was in conflict with Yprez. Roan Terrace, a middle class boy from Yprez has just discovered an ability that has been lying dormant in his blood for years. But underneath the kingdom, A secret organization dedicated to the resurrections of three beings know as the Tri-Magi. The Tri-Magi are magic beings that helped to balance evil in the world. The three evils are Pain, suffering and desolation. The magi were destroyed by Zaelgya Terrace 500 years ago, and what was left were two children Valance and Nero. The three are trying to resurrect their masters that died before their time. However, there is another force behind it all, and in the end evil might have it’s way. But if Roan and his friends Claudio and Hailey can stop this, the kingdom and the world may be safe. And with Trachos Arthur fighting half-way across the earth, the paths may cross and it could erupt into something bigger than the planet itself.

[CENTER][SIZE="3"][B][U]CHARACTERS: [/U][/B][/SIZE][/CENTER]
[B]Main Protagonists:[/B] Roan Terrace, Claudio Munson, Hailey Jordan, Bryan Redhorn, Conrad "Conner" Gleem
[B]Main Antagonists: [/B]Valance, Nero, Tri-Magi Runus, Demus, Belphus

[CENTER][SIZE="3"][B][U]SETTING: [/U][/B][/SIZE][/CENTER]
[B]Kingdom of Yprez: [/B]The capital of the Western Continent. For half a century the kingdom has been at war with the people of Aryla. Now with the land destroyed, the kingdom ahs to rebuild.
[B]Western Continent:[/B] The Western continent is home to the world’s most advanced technology. The kingdom of Siren’layr supplies this technology to the east and mid-continents. The land however, is very rough and filled with dessert, unlike the East‘s grassy and moist land.
[B]Island of Aryla: [/B]The island of Aryla broke off the Western continent to form it’s own nation. Thought to be a waste of time, the rest of the world turned it’s back on Aryla. But fifty years ago, it finally retaliated at the world to thought little of it. Now it’s technology is starting to get far more advanced, and this could pose a thread to the continents.
[B]Eastern Continent:[/B] Home to Trachos, Alvosh and Ilo. This is where Doma was destroyed completely due to an illness that took over. Trachos is on a quest to destroy his father and avenge his friend Maloney, who was killed by her adoptive brother. But a trip to the east could prove vital to Roan and his friends.
[B]Tower of Shal’vlaya: [/B]An ancient relic called the Ourabolos rests here. It is said to awaken the powers of anyone who touches it. It is also said to house the spirit of god himself.

[CENTER][SIZE="3"][B][U]TERMILOGY: [/U][/B][/SIZE][/CENTER]
[B]The Curse:[/B] The curse is brought only to those of the Kingdom of Yprez. The curse makes a human’s blood turn pitch black. It also carries a gene that allows a human to have increased strength and abilities. However, no one ahs gotten the curse and the only person to have it is Roan, however he is unaware.
[B]The MIA: [/B]A group of soldiers who disappeared during the war. They have been sighted throughout the kingdom but they were all presumed dead.
[B]Magick: [/B]A mystic force that allows one to use powers brought by mysterious means. The practice was modernized 100 years ago by Toteleem Zalith. Now it is used as energy, entertainment and defense. Magick divided into three subgroups. Rune Magick, the uses of runes to create Magick. Body Magick, the use of the body to quickly activate a spell. This happens through a gem that can be put on a person. The gems can be removed or changed. And finally there is Summoning Magick, which is the rarest form and requires lots of strength. Those that can use it, can summon beasts and animals with magical powers.
[B]The Collective Conscience of Yvrest: [/B]Mt. Yvrest is the tallest and largest mountain on the planet. The innards of the mountain contain an ancient temple built by an unknown civilization. Deep inside is a gigantic orb of light called the Collective Conscience of Yvrest. Inside is the thoughts of all those who died in the civilization. However everyone who has tried to break it or understand it, became deranged and mad.
[B]The Blood and Body Shredder: [/B]A machine the Arylians created that could tear a body to pieces and shred it’s cells. Then the left over parts and liquids would be gathered and turned into pure energy and pure elements. Not much else is known about this Arylian creation.

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[I]This time I decided to flesh it out more, and I have a bigger diea on what I want to do with this story, more than any other story I've done. If this stotry goes off and finished, I'm going to finish P&A and the last story of the P&A trilogy which is about the third continent. The original story was my favorite concept, so i decided to conitnue it.[/I][/COLOR]