Writing A very little ditty

[Ravenstorture]

[color=darkgreen][font=garamond]Unfortunately I don't have time to write creative stories anymore. But I do still write, as much as I can - just to keep myself fit.

I really, really hate rhyming poetry, most of it is pretentious wank - so I force myself to write some every now and then. Get your black berets on, kids!

Push out the poisons
You sound sad
Didn't think that he
would really be glad
To see you go,
just said it to freak you out
you thought
but you were wrong. Doubt
seeded in your mind, it grew
pulled the cracks in the pavement apart
and before you knew ?
he was gone, and the phone lay silent.
Three weeks passed before you grew violent!
Well done, a small voice says to you
For holding on that long
When we really thought we knew
It would happen before he'd gone
Good thing for him it didn't
You are armed and dangerous
But with emotions, not objects
Words cut flesh deeper than knives can
And I pretend I'm not hurt but you know I am[/font][/color]

[liamc2]

[FONT="Trebuchet MS"][SIZE="1"]*puts on black beret*

I enjoyed it, you've conveyed emotion brilliantly of a situation that many have gone through at some stage or another. [Hooray for relationships].

I particularly enjoy these lines here [b]"Well done, a small voice says to you/For holding on that long"[/b]

To me I appreciate the almost seemingly sarcastic tone there. I dunno, it could be just me reading that, but I enjoyed it none the less.

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[Ravenstorture]

[color=darkgreen][font=garamond]Tick - yes to the sarcasm. No, surprisingly I've never encountered a situation such as this. Feels odd to wirite about things you've never experienced. Thanks for the comment!
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[Sabrina]

[FONT="Tahoma"][quote name='Ravenstorture][color=darkgreen][font=garamond]I really, really hate rhyming poetry, most of it is pretentious wank - so I force myself to write some every now and then. [/font'][/color][/quote]Well you may hate it, but you did a good job with it. ^_^ I like this line the best because it's so true.
[INDENT]Words cut flesh deeper than knives can[/INDENT]

Anyway, I too enjoyed reading it.[/FONT]

[Raiha]

[quote name='Ravenstorture'][color=darkgreen][font=garamond]Tick - yes to the sarcasm. No, surprisingly I've never encountered a situation such as this. Feels odd to wirite about things you've never experienced. Thanks for the comment!
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[COLOR="DarkOrchid"][FONT="Times New Roman"]It's okay to try though. But as long as you remember it's just your imagination running and not an experience you thought you actually had...

Good last line. Since I have experienced that.[/FONT][/COLOR]