Sui Generis Posted February 16, 2002 Share Posted February 16, 2002 We form ranks As the waves caress the banks We stand ready Holding Steady We are prepared to fight Yet we know its in spite To fight the unthinkable the un-speakable We stand here against the biggest evil It foams at the mouth scaring the devil We stand here firm Fighting this germ The Earth screams As we pour out in streams We attack the enemy and look up Only to see blood pouring from our own cup We look into our enemy's eyes Watching it as it slowly dies But then it rises up again Never caring for the fragile limb Of this worlds concrete gift Of life that is taken away so swift With hatred in their eyes they charge once more And this time we finally see the enemys face through all the gore We are struck to see That the enemies me The world is plagued by the devils gifts We humans are the ones he lifts We rise up and stike eachother Cover the world in a black smother This is the finally battle when we are through There will be nothing left....not even you... OK I KNOW IT SUcKS But with that in mind how bad does it suck?? (I wrote it off the top of my head) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Biida Posted February 16, 2002 Share Posted February 16, 2002 Oh, lighten up, Bry! It doesn't suck! It's quite good.... Better than the shizzy poetry I do.. >.< Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lia Posted February 16, 2002 Share Posted February 16, 2002 i like it Bry! its awsome, post up some more when ya write 'em and keep up the great work!:) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sui Generis Posted February 16, 2002 Author Share Posted February 16, 2002 Erm...thanks!! o.O I was kinda expecting...THAT SUCKS!! But yeah...thanks!! Erm...I'll post more if I write any or when I do Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lia Posted February 16, 2002 Share Posted February 16, 2002 heh, well its good to have courage to post up poetry, it took me a while to gather up the bravery to post mine o.o;; Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sui Generis Posted February 16, 2002 Author Share Posted February 16, 2002 We frollic and play Through the fields of gray We know not whats around Concentrating on eachothers sound I concentrate on the waves in her hair Not worrying..not giving a care We sit next to one another for one last second Wondering why her father didn't becon I see dark figures surronding us I ignore them and all the fuss They get nearer and I say my good byes As I stand up she begins to cry I draw my sword I was bound to my word I was to protect her no matter what Thats the promise I made in that old hut They are charging now from everywhere They do not see me they do not care The go straight for her ready to steal her away I stand there ready not letting it sway As I raise my sword they finally see me The death of my slowly comes with the blood red sea I swing and block with all my might Allowing her to run in all her fright Then it comes I know its there The stinch of evil in the air The pain shoots through me I feel the steel Going trough my heart no way to heal My sword slowly drops and the blood begins to pour All around me theres red on the floor I get one last glimpse before shes out of sight and I know she is free from the blight I lay in my own blood thinking Listening to the others speaking There with all of them Is what I expected even him But what I did not expect was my love Standing there shinning like a dove She had betrayed me set me here So they could kill me like a trapped dear I die with the unbearable pain Watching as she walked away her victim slain I remember the days gone by When it was just you and I But now as I die I know its true Your true feelings shine through You laugh as I die you do not care Not having a tear to spare..... *sigh* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lia Posted February 17, 2002 Share Posted February 17, 2002 great poem Bry! the second one is excellent, makes ya think ^-^ keep up the good work! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sui Generis Posted February 17, 2002 Author Share Posted February 17, 2002 You walk in your house from a long day You see your dad and to your dismay He has that gleam in his eyes ready to blame it on you Putting you through the pain he once knew Something has happened that look isn't new He is about to beat the crap outta you You steady yourself You are ready He raises his hand ready to strike You hold your self you know what its like You fight the urge to scream and yell Noone knows everyone says nothing you go through hell He strikes you once you dare not scream You just pray that its only a dream Maybe just maybe if you don't speak He might not think you are so weak He hits you twice the pain gets strong You wonder what you ever did wrong The rage in his eyes you know its not over All you can wish is for a three leaf clover This time he lifts his leg You get on your knees and start to beg His demonic smile tells you he enjoys The way he throws you around like his toys He kicks you once more and you've had enough Its your turn to act tough You reach for the gun and hold it at his face He smiles and dares your, you embrace The loud noise goes through the room All you hear is the deafening boom He falls to the floor cold and blue Now all your trouble is over and through But now something pulls inside of you You can't say what it is it must be knew Maybe its the feeling of being free But you know its the feeling of the guilt by me You slowly realize what you have done The body lying on the floor you look at the gun You raise it to your head once more You are ready to fall to the floor One last thought goes through your head You wonder what its like to be dead Maybe it wouldn't have been the same If he wouldn't have acted liek it was a game You pull the trigger let the bullet rip through It goes through your head and you You fall to the floor bloody and cold You have finally proven your bold..... *sighs* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kain Posted February 17, 2002 Share Posted February 17, 2002 BOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!YOU STINK!!!!!Actually i was just kidding.That poem cut me deep...real deep. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sui Generis Posted February 17, 2002 Author Share Posted February 17, 2002 Erm thanks I think....I have writers block right now but I will get a poem on here soon __________________________________________________ I stare in your eyes and what do I see Its not the normal happy memory It shows a time of shade You're trying to make it fade It won't work I can see through your act Something has happened and thats a fact Why can't you tell me what is so bad Who did this too you...was it your dad? You can tell me I am your friend I swore on the bible I would be there till the end Why are you hiding why can't you speak Atleast tell me now while I rub your cheak Tell me everything tell me how I don't want to hurt you now __________________________________________________ Writers block caffeine to much...tired...I'll finish it tommorrow Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lia Posted February 18, 2002 Share Posted February 18, 2002 whoa...O.O that abuse one was really deep....awsome poem! and the last one was also very good! keep 'em comin Bry! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Raiha Posted February 18, 2002 Share Posted February 18, 2002 [COLOR=royalblue]*thumbs up* Good stuff, there's just one problem, "cheak" is spelled: "cheek." Like the ones found on your face. ;)[/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sui Generis Posted February 19, 2002 Author Share Posted February 19, 2002 I stare in your eyes and what do I see Its not the normal happy memory It shows a time of shade You're trying to make it fade It won't work I can see through your act Something has happened and thats a fact Why can't you tell me what is so bad Who did this too you...was it your dad? You can tell me I am your friend I swore on the bible I would be there till the end Why are you hiding why can't you speak Atleast tell me now while I rub your cheek Tell me everything tell me how I don't want to hurt you now Just tell me what causes this pain Don't let this lead you by your reign I will help I declare I know this world isn't fair But with me by your side We will never break stride And we will live forever We will fall never This is the right way We'll live to another day Thanks for the compliments...I just finished this one...so erm...I am unsure how is it? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lia Posted February 19, 2002 Share Posted February 19, 2002 :wow: thats a great poem...above all the rest.....I LUV IT!;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kittie Posted February 19, 2002 Share Posted February 19, 2002 [COLOR=seagreen]i think you're poetry is treally kool! :D it's just that sometimes the rhyme scheme sounds....forced! try to stray from the iambic pentameter! :nervous: but overall you're stuff is good! i especially like the last one! it had lots o' meaning and feeling into it![/COLOR] :blush: :wave: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sui Generis Posted February 27, 2002 Author Share Posted February 27, 2002 Thanks for the compliment....Iambic Peremeter??? Anyway here is my 5th poem hot off the press..... ALONE I lay alone cold at night Wondering why I have to feel this pain With these questions I lose the fight My existence here is clear, My lifes in veign. I lay here and cry Shivering in the snowfall All I can do is ask why Ready to let out that last call Everyone just walks by me Walking on me, not giving a thought Everyone's eyes are closed, they will not see They just leave me here to rot I reach out ot touch them They ignore that I'm alive I'm on life's edge, the very rim They rush by busy as a bee hive They ignore me, I'm a pest FIghting the urge to end it now I wonder why I can't be like the rest Its time to end it, but how? I grab my only posessiong I walk to the woods ready to die Its time to end my torment and opression Now I will finally be able to fly With the knife raised I stare into the darkness The knife comes down opening the door My last memory was my mothers last kiss Before she fell down her blood staining the floor Now I can see her I know not where I go But we weill be happy like we once were The pain leaving me I see the doe It nudges me to follow There it steps away and disappears with its fawn Nothing is there everything is hallow There she is! I see my mom then the next second...shes gone.... I'm still all alone..... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Raiha Posted February 27, 2002 Share Posted February 27, 2002 [COLOR=royalblue]*sigh* *sniff* That's really sad. BTW, [i]vain[/i] isn't spelled like that.....[/COLOR] :whoops: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sui Generis Posted February 27, 2002 Author Share Posted February 27, 2002 Lol thanks...I knew it looked wrong...well now you can see where my weekness in English is...lol :)...But anyway its killing me someone tell me what the Iambic Peremeter is! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yulie-chan Posted February 28, 2002 Share Posted February 28, 2002 ur poems r great. u should kno that and i've told ya plenty of times. they just get better and better. remember, dont forget bout the happy one. i'll be expecting it.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
yulie-chan Posted February 28, 2002 Share Posted February 28, 2002 just tellin ya that ur poems are great once again. and that i have no ****in clue bout wut a iambic pentameter is. maybe it means to rhyme or somethin. who would really kno 'cept for the person who typed it?!?!?! i'm not big on vocab. sorry i couldnt help, but hey, ur poems are THE best & U GO GIRL! heh, *remembers play practice with the ...odd makeup....* lets not go there.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sui Generis Posted February 28, 2002 Author Share Posted February 28, 2002 *remembers the play pracice make-up* Ok...thats not funny! Anyway thanks Yulie! I know your new here...but before everyone kills you don't double post...if you gonna post twice edit your first one and put it in there....^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kittie Posted March 1, 2002 Share Posted March 1, 2002 [color=seagreen] akay, i'm sorri that i didn't answer this sooner! i didn't know it annoying people like it did! and i guess i also thought someone else would answer!! :blush: but here you go! [b]iambic pentameter[/b] - Consisting of a short syllable followed by a long one, or of an unaccented syllable followed by an accented; as, an iambic foot. that explains it, ne? :whoops: [/color] :wave: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sui Generis Posted March 1, 2002 Author Share Posted March 1, 2002 Yeah thanks!! That helps out a lot!! Yeah I have been trying on making them match alittle more if ya know what I mean...anywayz thanks for clearing that all up!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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