Writing 3 poems for your souls

[Mitch]

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Hypocrisy
The hypocrisy of his mind
it seems he will never find
known to all except himself
corrupting all he tries to be
holding true to all he sees
the hypocrisy is there
like a flaw inside his tear
bringing stress upon those he holds true
concocting into that leathal brew
it poisons deep within
rooting upon him creating mortal sin
the hypocrisy controls his very being
yet he is unkowing to what he is
that hypocrisy so deep within

The Chains
These chains upon my arms
bending me to their will
keeping me so still
I just want to break them
crackle them into fragments of distaste
make them into nothing but ignorant waste
rebel upon its very face
break from its dispicable control
become my very own soul
find myself in these broken chains
the chains of all my neverending pains
they force me away from all my dreams
making everything never be
but someday
someday I will break from thosse chains
be rid of their unbearable embrace

SunShine
The sunlight shines upon my eyes
burning lies so deep inside my crys
covering up my wrongs inn deep ashes of hate
breaking evils of endless create
the sunlight cleanses wounds of exit
deep down in the endless pits of remorse
bringing light of a new day
washing away all the hate and pain
enclosing its self deep inside my soul
that hurt and pain
goes into my endless whole
becoming but another problem deep inside
deep inside my complex self
just waiting to replace the mercy of my heart
the sunlight shines
bringing hope upon these eyes [/color]

...wrote these last weekend and this week. Comments?

[Raiha]

[COLOR=seagreen]Red. Not bad. Of course, if you wanted, you could save yourself a topic and just post these in Today's Poems.[/COLOR]

[Tima]

that was pretty good. i liked it. nice job.