gouf Posted May 12, 2002 Share Posted May 12, 2002 A dark doom lunges forward. Three warriors come to face it, after countless souls have tried. The leader, holding the silver bladed sword Excalbier, faced the dark doom with anticipation and fear. His friends though reacted with more fear than anticipation. One nervously let his whip dangle from his side. The other stood ready holding tightly her magical staff. They go to face the doom "I am ------ I have come to put a end to your evil." (Heavy breathing) (Sends out a energy wave knocking all three warriors down) the demon dashes forward and drives his scythe into ten second warrior with the whip and then the girl with the staff zaps the demon he falls and appears to be dead he jumps up and strikes the young warrior with the sword he stops it but the scythe breaks the sword. He swings the sword and cuts the blade off of the scythe " ha now what are you going to do no weapon no victory. The demon throws the stick down and out of his arm comes another scythe. RUNS PAST THE WARRIOR AND STABS THE girl. Warrior turns demon turns THROWS HIS SYTHE BREAKING THE SWORD AND killing the warrior. Darkness covers... we got a package (opens it) scream its excalber buts its broken: note ha your brother lost his life for nothing hmp me in disbelief NOOOOOOOO I?ll avenge his death. I leaving I?m taking the excalbier 2 AND AVENGING HIS DEATH. Now his left his village. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fall Posted May 12, 2002 Share Posted May 12, 2002 Ok, well, if you put a few more fulls stops in the right places, and spelt a few words correctly, I would've enjoyed it more. Though I did read it, and it's going along well. Keep it up, maybe try to finish this story if you can? I like these kind of stories........ :) Just try to fix up the grammer a bit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gouf Posted May 12, 2002 Author Share Posted May 12, 2002 Yeah, i put it in word. Thats not helping is it? i'd finsh but the thing i don't have time and uselly i get my freinds to come over and act it out ask cloudstrife00 he was in the frist one this is the seventh Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Axel--Ignition Posted July 2, 2002 Share Posted July 2, 2002 Sure am! I'm a summoner or something. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flipmodesquad Posted July 6, 2002 Share Posted July 6, 2002 well.....i thought it was okey but maybe more detail and maybe more characters and maybe more EVERYTHING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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