Biida Posted May 19, 2002 Share Posted May 19, 2002 My "poetry"... erm, just tell me what you think. O.o; and I'm sorry that they're kinda dark... ____________________ [b][u]Untitled[/b][/u] I'm scared and cold. Weathered and tired. Worrying, fretting, Hoping, regretting. Living and dying, Screaming, growing old; Staying young. Trapped in life, Set free in death. Help me... I'm praying for mercy, I'm screaming in pain. And it seems That the help I cry for, I will never gain. I want to live in the lies. Hide from shadows in the light. But I need to draw near to the darkness... Stand up and fight... I'm scared and cold. Weathered and tired. Worrying, fretting, Hoping, regretting. Living and dying. Screaming and crying. I want to die... Or do I...? ____________________ [b][u]I'm S.o.r.r.y.[/b][/u] I'm sorry for being here, And I'm sorry for being me... I'm sorry for living in death... And for not being who you want me to be... I wish I was perfect. That I could make everything all right... I'm sorry for not being who I should be... I'm sorry for crying all night. Why the f*ck am I weak? Why can't I help....? Don't you trust me? Or don't I trust myself...? ...I'm sorry.... ____________________ [b][u]Crimson Voices[/b][/u] Death is the truth, Life is a lie. Live by these words, Then wither and die. Face the truth, Feel its cold. We all have to know it; Both young and old. Sense the blade: You're filled with fear. Feel the hate And know I'm here. I am the voice inside your head. I won't leave you alone 'Till I know you're dead. 'Till you're dead. Yes, it's true... Doesn't matter to me, And neither do you. Get it through your skull: You're not worth sh*t! Just end it all! Get over it! Now grab the blade, And watch blood flow. Feel the pain? Now feel it grow... Let the darkness consume you; You have no soul. Got it? Good. Now dig a hole... A hole in your heart. Now fill it up, Hide your emotions in the over-filled cup. You can't take it anymore! Now, end it all.. Collapse, Die, Stagger and Fall. Now you're gone. I've watched you die. As I leave, I tell you the truth, "I lie." ____________________ [b][u]Hollow[/b][/u] Hollow... Alone... Tired and Cold. Trapped in Reality, Lost in a Fantasy. Is this a Dream, Or a Nightmare? I don't know... Let me run, Let me hide, Let me scream, Let me cry. Leave me, And let me be Me. I'm dying inside, Slowly rotting away. Let me die in peace. Please, Just forget I exist-- Go away... But, I also want you to stay... I need you to listen... Yet, I'm scared to speak... And I don't know what to say... God, help me; I don't know what to do. I feel so helpless, So lost and confused. No, I won't speak; Not yet. Not now... I'll just scream inside, Keep quiet, and, All my Emotions, I'll hide. I don't think you can help me, But if you want to... Please try... Just hold me and help me-- Protect me and love me-- Turn my Hell into a Dream.. Accept me for me. Don't let me feel hollow, Don't let me be afraid. Let me be human, And let me know hate. And don't let me sink Six feet under... ____________________ [b][u]A Warrior's Justice[/u][/b] A warrior died in battle today. Yet, an evil one before death, he slayed. A slash of justice, A bloody screech of pain. The evil, no more shall it gain. It screamed in horror, and hit the ground. As it writhed, It emitted it's last chilling sound. Silence, then, "It's dead" Our Hero stood tall As it began to rain. Now is the end of the Evil's reign. He coughed up blood, and weakly grinned, While his long, tangled hair rippled in the wind. He wiped his mouth slowly, Smearing the blood. And dropping his weapon Into damp, fresh mud. He soon collapsed, Overthrown in pain. Bearing a weak smile, Knowing what was slain. He ended his smile All too soon. His bloodied face accented By the bright, rising moon. He winced and looked at the mangled wound on his chest. Yes, The realm of the Living shall soon be left... Our Hero grinned, Both in victory and defeat. The gates of death, Soon shall he meet. He nodded to no one, And drew his last breath. Slowly sinking into the icy blackness of Death. So the Sword of Justice, For the last time was drawn... Our Hero is dead... Will Justice live on? ____________________ And there we have it, folks... ^_^; R&R please... :whoops: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sui Generis Posted May 19, 2002 Share Posted May 19, 2002 Well I told you before but your poems are greta!! I like the Warrior's Justice and Crimson Voices, but you knew that!! *sweatdrops* Anywayz keep writing! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest cloricus Posted May 20, 2002 Share Posted May 20, 2002 Really good, I like dark poems. They give me ideas on things I can write. But why in the first one did you put, "Or do I...?" It really recks the feel. No offence. And that's just my opinion. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Biida Posted May 20, 2002 Author Share Posted May 20, 2002 [QUOTE][i]Originally posted by cloricus [/i] [B]But why in the first one did you put, "Or do I...?" It really recks the feel. No offence. And that's just my opinion. [/B][/QUOTE] Hey, no offense taken, and I'm glad you gave me your true opinion. :) The reason I put "Or do I...?" is because, well, it's how the character is feeling... Angry and depressed deeply, filled with pain, but also partly filled with love. They're more than ready to die, but there's still a little part of them deep down that refuses to fade.... therefore, there's a bit of an inner conflict, which I showed in a few places in that poem, but especially in that last line. If anyone has any comments/compliments on my work, I'd really like to hear them, even if it's critism. :) ____________________________ [Edit] Here's another one I just wrote out of complete boredom... curse these Canadian holidays with a lazy overcast and no one to talk to... -.- *almost misses school* Welcome to Heaven, And welcome to Hell... Welcome to this Reality we know so well. Welcome to this Fantasy... Welcome to your mind... Welcome to all you will ever find. To endless pain, anger, hate and strife. The curse of eternal death - Welcome to life. [/Edit] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Deedlit Posted May 20, 2002 Share Posted May 20, 2002 I liked that one. Do you have any more? :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Biida Posted May 20, 2002 Author Share Posted May 20, 2002 [QUOTE][i]Originally posted by kool_aid13 [/i] [B]I liked that one. Do you have any more? :) [/B][/QUOTE] Thanks. :D And yes, I actually have quite a few more.. although, I don't have 'em with me, so I'll post them next time I go to my dad's. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Morph Posted May 20, 2002 Share Posted May 20, 2002 [size=1] Heh, Britty, you know my answer, its good, just that I don't like the meaning, so I hate it :p Jk its really good [/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Biida Posted May 21, 2002 Author Share Posted May 21, 2002 [QUOTE][i]Originally posted by Hybrid [/i] [B][size=1] Heh, Britty, you know my answer, its good, just that I don't like the meaning, so I hate it :p Jk its really good [/size] [/B][/QUOTE] Thank ya. :) :D ____________________ [b][u]Untitled[/b][/u] Depression... Hate... Fear... Demonity... Let it control you... Let the pain come... Feel the Blood flow down your arm, Feel the cold sweat on the back of your neck... The fear builds up... 'Till it's near a breaking point... You urge to scream, But hold it back... Now you see who I am... Who I have become... Who I am not... And it will happen to you too, If you let it.... So let the Fear control you, Then come to me and save me. ____________________ [b][u]Yet another Untitled one[/u][/b] Quickly, I'm falling... Slowly, I'm dying... Hearing their "comforts" and knowing they're lying. Hearing their comforts And creating my own. Into the lion's den I am thrown. Creating my masks... my life... my lies... I'm out of view of unsuspecting, untrained eyes... Showing truth to only those who deserve to see... Showing to so few, The inner real Me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sere Tuscumbia Posted May 21, 2002 Share Posted May 21, 2002 *dies* I love these poems! You're such a good writer that I seem like a kindergardner to you! How do you do it?! I envy you . . . >>;; Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Biida Posted May 21, 2002 Author Share Posted May 21, 2002 Heh... thanks, Sere. ^^ writing come naturally to me, I guess... and your work is really good, so you shouldn't be envious or anything. :) Anyways.. here is yet another one. ^^; ____________________ [b][u]How Do You Heal A Broken Heart?[/b][/u] How do you heal a broken heart? It's causing me so much pain... It hurts deep down, It won't go away... I feel cold and alone.. Scared, shattered and pained. I feel like sh*t... I want to curl up and die. Oh, how do you heal a broken heart? You told me you loved me, Played with my emotions. Lied to my heart, My soul. "I love you". Then you let yourself go. Broke away from me; Shattered what I've delicately worked for. Ripped me to pieces-- Broke my heart. How do you heal a broken heart? I want to run... I want to hide... Get away from you. I want to forget; I want to lose it all... ...I want you back... How do you heal a broken heart? How can I heal my broken heart? It's so hard to forget; So hard to let you go; So hard to move on. How can I do it? Heal a broken heart... Heal my broken heart... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sui Generis Posted May 22, 2002 Share Posted May 22, 2002 *jaw drops* Jeez I never saw those....nicceewe....O.O...I agree with Sere... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MysticalShawty Posted May 25, 2002 Share Posted May 25, 2002 Hey Britty, i really liked the one " A Warriors Justice",You have a Really great tallent, Keep Writting poems,And dont forget to show them to me, Ashley Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ravenstorture Posted May 27, 2002 Share Posted May 27, 2002 yeah, the juxtaposition between the warrior and the moon was really clever. I like them all!! I write heaps of depressing poetry, but they're a little.... too depressing sometimes.... *glances at scarred wrists&forearms* but these are really really good!!!! MORE, DAMN YOU!!! GIVE ME MORE!!! Ahem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Corey Posted May 27, 2002 Share Posted May 27, 2002 Ummm. This is going to sound a little odd... Could I maybe use your poem "Crimson Voices" for a book I'm writing? I swear I will give you credit. It just sounds so appropriate. My book is kinda about Satan trying to take over the earth. There's a lot of stuff in there and at the end I was thinking about Satans host, maybe i'll post the book on the board after I get it copywrited..., commiting suicide at the end and maybe that poem could tie in somewhere. Please?:angel: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Biida Posted May 27, 2002 Author Share Posted May 27, 2002 [QUOTE][i]Originally posted by DarkOrderKnight [/i] [B]Ummm. This is going to sound a little odd... Could I maybe use your poem "Crimson Voices" for a book I'm writing? I swear I will give you credit. It just sounds so appropriate. My book is kinda about Satan trying to take over the earth. There's a lot of stuff in there and at the end I was thinking about Satans host, maybe i'll post the book on the board after I get it copywrited..., commiting suicide at the end and maybe that poem could tie in somewhere. Please?:angel: [/B][/QUOTE] Sure, that's fine with me. :) Just say it was written by Britty , and I guess if you need to include anything else, my e-mail's [email][email protected][/email] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Morph Posted May 27, 2002 Share Posted May 27, 2002 [size=1] Thats such a good Poem... Here Britty, HAVE A DONUT! BWHAHHAHAHAHA! EAT IT NOW! Alright yes, I'm COMPLETELY Insane I'm going to make a Donut Poem!! - Hybrid; Donut Armada Leader [/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sui Generis Posted May 27, 2002 Share Posted May 27, 2002 MUHAHAHA I knew it!! See Britty now you are getting published too!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mist Posted June 7, 2002 Share Posted June 7, 2002 I must say that Crimson voices is the best one. I should print that out and put it on the front of my journal...it'd be funny to see my parents reaction since they read it all the time... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Raiha Posted June 8, 2002 Share Posted June 8, 2002 [COLOr=seagreen]Nice work! Very charming........actually, more along the lines of "dark, antipathic, and gothic," definetly more along the lines of something you would read if you were feeling suicidal. And from me, you can...erum, take that as a compliment. :D[/COLOR] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mist Posted June 11, 2002 Share Posted June 11, 2002 Speaking of sucidal, your poetry is a killer...literally. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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