Writing the band between two brothers.

[Boo]

two years and 1 day ago.
"Brother do you wanna play?" "No not now." "Why not?" "Because i dont want to okay? Now go out of my room!"
Sometimes I think my brothers hates me, that he wanted to have an other brother. Now i don't think that anymore,
because I think back at two years ago.
[I]There was a battle going on on the street. They used knifes.
We didn't knew it was going on at the time that we were there. one guy grapped a gun he shooted at a other. The bullets missed and came my way. I closed my eyes because I was scared. a second later I hered a scream. I didnt dare to watch, but when I opened my eyes i saw that my brother lied on the ground in front of me. he jumped in front of the bullets just to save me.[/I]
That's why I don't think like that anymore. I can't even think like that anymore. he is dead. I feld guilty for thinking that he didnt liked me when he laid there. But i hered him talking with his last breath. he said: "Sorry for giving you the idea that I didn't loved you."I didn't even cried out of sadness, more out of happiness that he did loved me.

[Empathy]

wow...I really like that...is that true or not? I'm really curious...either way...it mad me think about my own brothers...all five of them...

[Boba Fett]

Very nice. A tear jerker. The only thing is it needs to be a little longer. Very well written though. I cannot write very well.....

[Sui Generis]

Great!! Just could be a little longer and the grammar could be alittle better, un-less you were going for that...

[Raiha]

[COLOR=seagreen]Interesting enough. And your grammar problems have already been pointed out.[/COLOR]