Corey Posted June 15, 2002 Share Posted June 15, 2002 Fear Fear of laughter Fear of pain Fear of insanity Fear of sane Fear of hurt Fear of death Fear of a knife Sticking out of my chest Fear of alone Fear of hate Fear of unknown Fear of fate Fear of guns Fear of alone Fear of weapons Fear of things shown Fear of the bombs That are everyday things Fear of the darkness That sundown brings The never ending fear It never does ease Do I have fear? Ha! Please. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nekkyo Posted June 15, 2002 Share Posted June 15, 2002 *snaps fingers* i'm impressed. although the endings a little wierd, but it does kind of give it a nice little twist ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SS Vegeta Posted June 15, 2002 Share Posted June 15, 2002 That is quite a good poem, I will probably post a few of mine if I can find that old notepad. Where did I put that anyway? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amphion Posted June 17, 2002 Share Posted June 17, 2002 Good poem. I liked the ending.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Empathy Posted June 30, 2002 Share Posted June 30, 2002 There's a lot to fear in this world...but fear can only take you so far until you have to face the pain... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mist Posted June 30, 2002 Share Posted June 30, 2002 [size=1][color=red]"The only thing we have to fear is Fear itself." I believe that statement too. Anyway, very good job, DOK. (Something you always seem to do...perfectionist! :grumble: ) J/K! Rating: 9.5/10[/size][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Charles Posted July 1, 2002 Share Posted July 1, 2002 Well, this is the second critique in my poetry marathon for tonight (Strange mood, don't know why, lol). Anyway, I didn't like the ending. Why? It destroys the mood and contradicts the poem itself. The speaker of the poem seemingly fears being alone, as that example of fear is the only one repeated twice in the poem (see third and forth stanza). Unless this repetition was just a typo, the speaker unknowingly [I]does[/I] have a fear. The last line seemed to interrupt the rhythm of the poem as well. Other than that, I really enjoyed the pacing and scheme. 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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