Writing Fallen Knight, Rising Love (post back if you like it. it's not that good, really.)

[Talon]

His blade was wrought of mighty steel,
The sight of it made foe take to heel.
His cry for battle was well-known.
Many foes into hell he'd thrown.

He rode upon a valiant steed,
And yet he played on pipes of reed.
The hero that could never fall,
Was a bard with Heaven's call.

The dark magician, ungiving and cruel,
Wished to end the Hero's rule.
He thought long and he thought hard.
How, to Hell, could he send the bard?

His face then glowed, as he struck a thought.
Why not forge a sword, this one Hell-wrought?
He worked hard, effortlessly long.
He tossed Sharamdir into the throng.

He called the Hero to a war,
Asked what the Hero would fight for.
Kane took up Senaris into his belt
The pain of justice would be felt!

The dark magician, his name was Bast,
Told the Hero he would not last.
His sword, Sharamdir, was Hell-wrought.
Yet from dusk 'til dawn the Titans fought.

Kane's love, sweet Ami, felt the void
Of love hanging in Fate's arms annoyed.
As she ran out to see her love fight death.
The magician tried to spill Ami's last spoken breath.

Kane gave a cry, he pinned the Mage,
And ran to his love, losing his rage.
She kissed his weeping, crying lips
As he placed his hand under her hips.

He carried her into their home,
His foe's black blood began to foam.
A demon arose to finish Kane,
Ami summoned forth Pure Rain.

The angel stood and guarded her
As Kane wouldst now the demon deterr.
The demon felt Seranis sting
And a hell-born cry from it's throat did ring.

Kane swore away living by the sword.
Instead into his love his heart he poured.
He took Ami into his arms,
Never again did she come to harm.

[Barra Maral]

"BRAVO" "BRAVO"
*CLAPS LOUDLY*

[Talon]

Thank you, kindly. Hey! Aren't you the guy I pinned to a tree?!?
*leaps into audience and starts to beat the crap out of you, stops, stares at the crowd, and recollects composure* Ahem.
Small scuffle, people. No need to be alarmed.

[Barra Maral]

"YES, BE AFRAID, BE VERY AFRAID.

[Talon]

THAT'S IT!!!!!!!!!! *jumps and pins your head to the wall. gets dragged away by the guys in white coats* HE'S A CLOWN! HE'S A CLOWN! SAVE ME FROM THE CLOWN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! ARE YOU HERE TO SAVE ME?!?!?!

[Phantom]

[B]Shadow-Knight[/B]
Yee kind knight of thine holy procession... I find thy poem insightfull, skilled with the languages and thou art a potential linguist ..... For a high standard in darwinian funtion, i shareth my beleif that you wilst prove to be a mighty poet if yee work continues.

[Talon]

I humbly bow to thine compliments, and I dost hope that thou shalt twist thine tongue sweetly in our duel. Now, I shall beat the crap out of Sirven. *Beats the crap outta Sirven again*

[Barra Maral]

Hey I correct myself
your poem is great
sorry about the bad comments
you got my forum closed by continuing on it:D

[Talon]

Sirven, I would like THIS one to remain OPEN! Stop posting here!

[Barra Maral]

hey i was just informing you
jerk

[Corey]

Wow.
It would take me at least five days to finish something as good as that.
How long did it take you?
BTW, 9/10!

[Talon]

Took me an hour. And I see you've been talking to Phantom. Thank you for the praise, but it isn't that good.

[Phantom]

Yes, again.... Your work...AMAZING my friend.... for the epic tale told within thine's hours work... incredible...

[Talon]

I, again, thank thine praise. 'Tis merely a tale of a knight and his love. I merely wish that I had as much talent as you people think.

[vegeta rocker]

you write as valiantly as gene starwind is handsome. Take me on your steed oh brave knight. Could a elf ever fancy a fairy? I pray so dear one.

[Boo]

Great!
Keep it up!

[Talon]

Uh, well, Vegeta Rocker. I'm not entirely sure what sex you are, and besides, I have a girlfriend. I must make it known that HuntersArtea635 and I are married! And again, thank you Dark Apocolyps, but the praise is too fantastic.

[Mist]

[color=red][size=1][QUOTE][i]Originally posted by ElvenFoxKnight [/i]
[B]Thank you for the praise, but it isn't that good. [/B][/QUOTE]


Die, you evil elf/ranger/prince/holy knight/...oh, you get the picture..., die! J/K! I couldn't do something like that. Very good job! I'd have to say that 9/10 [b]is[/b] a proper rating and you can't argue with that!!!!![/color][/size]

[Talon]

Fine. Praise me all you like! I don't think I'm a good writer!

[Mist]

[color=red][size=1] Shove a sock in it, bud. You're starting to make me feel bad. If you're not a good writer, then I suck beyond reason...[/color][/size]

[Talon]

......I resent causing thine guilt and sadness. I look upon mine work as mediocre, and the works of all others, including thine work, as superior to mine own. I humbly bow aside, yet I steadfastly refuse to *ahem* "shove a sock in it".

[BearsBaby635]

Good Job,Love its better then the other one you wrote for me... hehe..I wish I could have your talents..oh wait...I dont have to..you write enough for both of us ^_^ *sighs* I love you!
and maybe you could take me in your wings and we could fly away into the sunset...

[Mist]

[color=red][size=1][QUOTE][i]Originally posted by ElvenFoxKnight [/i]
[B]......I resent causing thine guilt and sadness. I look upon mine work as mediocre, and the works of all others, including thine work, as superior to mine own. I humbly bow aside, yet I steadfastly refuse to *ahem* "shove a sock in it". [/B][/QUOTE]

Lol. I worry...Anyway, I don't really feel bad. I was just saying that to convey my point. :D

Don't worry about me, I'll get over my devastatment. :rolleyes:[/color][/size]

[The Harlequin]

[font=gothic][color=crimson]Normally, to get my opinion, it has to be wrenched out of me with heated iron wire. But this time, I'll concede it was good. Maybe not to my taste, but then, what is. [/font][/color]

[Talon]

*ahem* Thank you, Harlequin.