Nomad Posted July 18, 2002 Share Posted July 18, 2002 ok what do you think? Last Minutes SHUT UP! Stop talking, Lying, yelling, putting me down! Your 'Purple Haze' seems, soothing, calming, then again, antagonizing. Get it out of my head! Out, leave, stop saying that! 'Hey Joe', Watchya' doin'? I'm sorry for that stuff [censored down to the word "stuff"] What's wrong? Tired? Yeah, tired, Who's that little sucker[censored down to the word "sucker"], with the scythe and black robe. NO! Back demon, :devil: 'Freedom' is mine to hold! No, was, was yours to hold. Now your 'Freedom' belongs to satan. 'Angel'? No, spawn of the devil. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jesus Chicken Posted July 19, 2002 Share Posted July 19, 2002 Once again, good work. I noticed your style is very similair to the last one, so it looks a bit like you have just switched the words. There is nothing wrong with the actual poem, by the way, Do you like Jimmy Hendrix? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nomad Posted July 19, 2002 Author Share Posted July 19, 2002 yeah I like jimi hendrix thats the references I use (Purple haze, hey Joe, freedom, angel). The poems I write are in free verse format, and are usually weirded out by words or meanings of certain lines. Free verse is just like writing a story to me. it's sloppy but I like it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted July 19, 2002 Share Posted July 19, 2002 Hmm, interesting... The format is odd and i am not sure what the message you are conveying means. HOWEVER, i love free verse, keeping it plain, simple... spitting out the meanings that come first, spewing the splayed message in bits. in an agonizingly attenuative illustration.... GOOD WORK mano. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nomad Posted July 19, 2002 Author Share Posted July 19, 2002 the message of the poem is of a drug addict during his 'Last Minutes' hints "....Scythe and Black Robe..." as the Grim reaper, and "...Angel..." as heaven and "deviL" as hell. he's arguing with himself somewhat. I use "purple haze" as a drug reference (Although hendrix uses it as a reference to a dream he had of walking under water). "Joe" is the guys name. He's "...Tired...", well, he's dying. then death for Joe. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Corey Posted July 19, 2002 Share Posted July 19, 2002 You should publish a book, man. 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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