Talon Posted July 20, 2002 Share Posted July 20, 2002 The sword collapses to the ground, My eyes flutter ever so slightly. My foe cackles evilly, His victory ensured since I'm breathing so lightly. BLEED gleamed darkly in the moonlight, His claws extended toward mine throat. The final slash came through my skin, BLEED suddenly began to laughingly gloat. My breathing staggered, My chest heaving with blood loss. The dripping of my sweat and tears Ended it's journey down in the moss. BLEED took the time to stare me down, Enjoying the death of his greatest foe. My fists clenched deep in the dust, Leaving me to drown in my woe. My final breath came and went, leaving him alive and well. My failure cost me dearly, leaving me to roast in Hell. OOC:This is the way I feel right now, though my enemy isn't BLEED in real life. It's... nothing. n/m Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mitch Posted July 20, 2002 Share Posted July 20, 2002 I like it. Interesting, creative, thoughtful. 8/10[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by ElvenFoxKnight [/i] [B] OOC:This is the way I feel right now, though my enemy isn't BLEED in real life. It's... nothing. n/m [/B][/QUOTE] who is it? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mist Posted July 20, 2002 Share Posted July 20, 2002 [color=red][size=1][QUOTE][i]Originally posted by ElvenFoxKnight [/i] [B] It's... [/B][/QUOTE] Sean. Very creative and poetic, and I love your choice of words. Good job. 8.5/10[/color][/size] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BearsBaby635 Posted July 20, 2002 Share Posted July 20, 2002 Uh....Sean? Not quite but oh well...only a few ppl know bout and who BLEED is...and its very hard to explain..ah well John, its very hard to read,for me personally, but its good ^.^ I love you! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Talon Posted July 20, 2002 Author Share Posted July 20, 2002 No. It wasn't Sean. Somebody that Mike, Dani, Jaimie, and I know, and I am closer to her than most, except maybe Dani. *begins to cry* WHY THE HELL WON'T YOU LET ME HELP YOU?!?!? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phantom Posted July 20, 2002 Share Posted July 20, 2002 *clutches your shoulder in that brotherly way* ..John, Again you know I am always here for you.. .the peom, ... you frikken made it rhyme...especially while feeling the way u do... im giving it a 10... ...no man should be forced to think so deeply while in your pain... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Harlequin Posted July 20, 2002 Share Posted July 20, 2002 [font=gothic][color=crimson]Pain is an illusion of the senses. Despair is an illusion of the mind. Realise this, and you can control all hurt, all emotion. You have to think your way through pain. Great poem, aside from the last line. Hell is good, Hell works.[/font][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Talon Posted July 20, 2002 Author Share Posted July 20, 2002 Heh. I think deeply no matter my state of mind. ****, I have to rationalize in the middle of bloody, gory battles most of the time. Video games came in handy, there, though. ^_^= *smiles broadly despite gaunt and haggard look in eyes and face* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Harlequin Posted July 20, 2002 Share Posted July 20, 2002 [font=gothic][color=crimson]At least someone agrees with me.[/font][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BearsBaby635 Posted July 20, 2002 Share Posted July 20, 2002 John, you have helped me...in more ways the ever...its just I need to do this myself..its something need to do, to prove to myself that I can make it through something..alone...I have to get out of that grey mist..you have given me the lantern but now I must find the exit... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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