Writing Lear and Keye

[vegeta rocker]

alright its been awhile for me, but this is something diffrent iv'e had lying around.




a king over many got all he wished
the one thing he wanted
i would not give
bring me his heart i command you Lear
or forever be banished
i speak sincere

begging to be pardoned
i bow my head
how can i survive if
i strike him dead
nonsense he roared bring him to me
hes nothing to you but all to me

arise cowardly knight
go to your task
if you don't you will feel my wrath
i rise up and call to all in the court
listen all and remember this sword

branded to the blade a dragon flew
its tail spiked and swirled in loops of two
he was our saviour i called out loud
this new king deserves nothing of the crown
remember his name i call it now
as stars will shatter and so will we
if we betray the trust of Keye

knight i am and will always be
but i now spit on thee
Lear what hath Keye
though grand he is
ever done for this kingdom since
the magic of his carcass is far outweighed
by any card you wish to play

Lear now held his shield to all
see the dragon he is us all
pointing his sword to the king he now said
i welcome the trouble thee shalt bring
for all here remember his fiery sting

taking his sceptor in his hand
the king commanded Lear face reprimand
Lear not fearful for his companion would thrive
called to all
i dare thee take me alive

[Mitch]

[color=red]This is one of your best poems in a long while. I really like it! 8/10.[/color]

[vegeta rocker]

Really? Well thanks, it is on a very diffrent path for me. I just hate this part:nonsense he roared bring him to me
hes nothing to you but all to me
its repetitive.

[jupitersun]

i like it! i really like it! its a great poem.:)