Writing my first and probably last peom i'll post

[jupitersun]

i wrote this about my dad i hope you like it.

~crying~

Why?
why do you yell at me?
do you enjoy seeing tears come from my eyes?
you say i hate you but you act like yo uhate me!
dont ever try to make it betterbecause every time i talk to you i want to cry.
your angry voice brings tears to my eyes
you dont understand, you try to control me,
everything i do is never enough.
but you praise me in front of everyone, you treat me like an angel.
but when we're alone you yell and scream
and try to break me but it wont work. you say you love mebut yell and hit me.you dont love me im nothing to you.


and im stopping here the rest i still have to write

oops i speeled poem wrong^^

[Sui Generis]

Its really depressing. I've never seen that style of poetry, but personal I like it. Maybe just cuz I've been through it. *shrugs* I like it!

[jupitersun]

^^ thanks duo yeah it is depressing but i dont have many happy poems i dont think i'll post ne more poems unless people want me to

[ifm2181]

Sad, yet good. I like it :)

[vegeta rocker]

if you want people to ask for more work i will oblige you. Its intriguing and i wouldnt mind seeing more.

[jupitersun]

well i dont have many poems and most of them i dont want to post because they're pretty personal but i have a few more thanks VR

[Corey]

If that is true, I feel so sad for you.
The poem is wonderful. I would strongly encourage you to post more of your work.
And keep writing.

[Talon]

[color=teal]I like it. I really do. And, from what people say, I know poetry. Check out my poems for proof! Evereybody says that I'm ACTUALLY a good poet. I don't happen to think so, but hell, they do. But I really like yours, Jupiter. It's one of those rare poems that made me cry. I also can relate to it. My dad's the same way about me. Well, good work, and I hope to god it isn't the last one you post! I wanna see more![/color]

[jupitersun]

-DISFUNCTIOANL FAMILY-

Hate the way you say no
and the you always lie.
Hate the way you're greedy
and the way you make me wanna cry.

Hate it when you're here
and love it when you're not.
Hate how you think you're so right
and you're wrong a whole lot.

Hate the way you yell at me
and tell me I'm stupid and dumb.
Hate the way you never care
and how it makes me feel so numb.

Hate the way I feel right now
and how I wanna cry.
Hate the way I just can't
and if I do I'll wanna die.

Hate the fact that I have to come back home
and the reasons for me writing this.
Hate how much I wanna stay here
and if I come back I'm gonna be pissed.

Hate the way you act when others are around
and how you change when leave.
Hate the way you say you won't
and that it always makes me grieve.

Hate all your reasons
and they way I don't even like you.
Hate it how you don't care what Tom does
and when it comes it to me you do.

Hate how I don't wanna live with you anymore
and how you won't let me go.
Hate it that I have a choice
and how you won't let me make...you blow.

Hate how you try to keep me sheltered
and how you don't care how hard it is for me to stay away from pot.
Hate it how you say its my choice
and I know it's really not.

Hate it how you don't know Tom threatens me
and if I don't do drugs he'll hit me.
Hate it how I have to talk to you
and you're dumb and don't see.

Hate that dad only wants me there
to do things for everyone else.
Hate how he doesn't give a damn
and cares only about Tom and himself.

Hate the way people say I can't
and how it makes me so damn mad.
Hate everyone that has done anything to me
and how this thought makes me sad.

Hate the fact I haven't talked to any of my friends in like 2 months
and how you act when they're around.
Hate the way you talk to them
and how you walk on me like I'm the ground.

Hate how you ask them questions about me
and tell them cuz they hang out with me they're bad.
Hate when I ask you about this you deny it
and it makes me sad...and mad.

Hate how much I wanna live with my cousins
and know you'll never let me.
Hate how if you don't let go I'm gonna leave
and that's how you'll find out...you'll see.

Hate how you and dad say I lie all the time
and that I don't lie barely ever.
Hate that if I do it's always for Tom
and that I won't lie for him again- never.

Hate how so many guys have screwed me over
and the way my best friend helped out.
Hate the way my family sets me up for drugs
and the way it makes me wanna shout.

Hate how my step-dad's so nice
and how he puts up with you.
Hate that I love HIM so much
and how I don't feel that way about you two.

Hate how you say I'm lazy
and you're a fu***** secretary.
Hate how I know I'm not
and how I work a lot you don't get off your a**...well barely.

Hate the way that when I'm in a bad mood I still always seem to smile
and even though I smile my eyes tell everything.
Hate how people are so judgemental
and how I don't think this last crush is just a fling.

I hate it when you're here
and love it when you're not
But you're my family and because of that I still love everyone a lot.

By Brandy angel's cousin.

It's kinda negative but my family pissed me off. I just wrote it today hope you like it. If not oh well...

[jupitersun]

here's two more they're not very good but hey...

~golden night~
As i stare at this ball of light,
my eyes are fixed i stay there the whole ngiht.
watching it get brighter,
rising of the floor going higher and higher.
Suddenly the light turns gold,
I shouldn't touch it so im told.
It's so tempting and beautiful.
I dont know if i can bare it.
Reach to touch it and i begin to fall down a coml dark pit,
i fall for days , still it has no end.
the pit of misery will never bend.
I have been cursed,
with the curse of misery
looks can be desseiving and i'll never stop beleiving.
Beleiving misery has no end unless you make it.

-moral-
even the most beautiful things can cause pain

[jupitersun]

~feelings inside~
nothing can describe the way i feel inside
or the torment that i hide.
\No matter what i do,
It stuck ther like glue.
But i dont care.
I sheild myself from everyone.
I try to hide my feelings,
but everyone figures me out.
i want to be free from misery,
free and happy.