Writing Digimon 05 (My version)

[Alexa]

Uh, please tell me what you think. (its 3 chapters long and a prologue, I'm still working on it, and I'm flat out on ideas, any ideas would be appreciated.
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Prologue: Digimon 05 (My version)

It was four years after the D-Reaper was destroyed by the 10 Digimon Tamers and nine Digimon. Things had been peaceful in both worlds ever since, Digimon returned to their world and children in their own.. The children receive strange pleading messages through their D-Powers from their Digimon?
Remember, this is my own version of Season Five, not the official one.

Chapter 1: Lopmon Calls

Suzi brushed the magenta hair out of her eyes, and lay on her back staring at the ceiling. Lopmon? she mumbled, remembering her very own chockwit bunny. She heard a soft beeping noise but ignored it. The sound returned, more persistent and louder.. Finally, Suzi turned to where the sound was coming from--her drawers. She got up and made her way to the drawers, sound getting louder and faster. She opened the top drawer and her D-Power lay among some paper, the screen flashing white as the beeps were made. "Oh!" she gasped in awe. The D-power was taken with Lopmon when she returned home to the Digital world four years ago. She picked up the pink machine, and held it to her ears, as if to hear Lopmon, though all she heard was the soft bleeping sounds. suddenly, the sounds turned to voice and intensified. Suzi stared at the D-Power. Lopmon's face was on the screen. The image wasn't so clear but it definitely was her. "Lopmon! what is it?!" Suzi gasped. Lopmon clearly couldn't hear her. the Digimon continued in a faraway pained voice. Suzi...Suzi...help meeee...." the Digimon got cut off somehow, and the screen turned blank. "stupid piece of junk! Suzi exclaimed angrily, as she shook the Digivice, Lopmon, can you hear me?" the screen remained blank, all the buzzing and beeps gone. Suzi ran over to her brother's room and banged on the door. "Henry, let me in!" Suzi heard nothing, and pushed the door opened. Her brother was sitting numbly on his bed. "Henry?" she asked softly. her eyes widened as she saw the D-Power in her brother's hand. "henry. you got a message from Terriermon?" henry nodded. "How did you know?" Suzi smiled. "I got on too, isn't it obvious? I'm a tamer to-o!" she said in a sing song voice. "Leamme alone Suzi!" henry mumbled. Suzi sat on the end of his bed. "what did he say?" henry looked close to tears "He said, help me Henry, I need you. then something jumped at him, then the screen went blank. "Lopmon asked for my help, she wasn't attacked, but the image disappeared!" Henry nodded. "He was attacked though and I did nothing to help him, Suzi! nothing! Suzi patted his knee sympathetically ,"there was nothing you could do Henry, why don't we see the others, in case they had messages too?" Henry nodded listlessly, "I guess. I'll phone Takato and Rika.." Suzi grinned "And I'll visit the others on my bike." Suzi raced out of his room. Henry sadly picked up his cell phone and dialled Takato's number. After a few rings, Takato answered. "Takato?" Henry asked. "Hi Henry! What's the matter? You sound like your parent's have died." Henry cringed, glad that Takato couldn't see him.. "Henry? Did I say something wrong?" Takato said with a worried voice.
"Its Terriermon! I found my D-Power on my desk when I entered my bedroom, and Terriermon appeared on the screen. Telling me he needs my help. I wasn't there for him." Henry sounded tearful again. "Like he'd be for me." He added as an after thought. Takato paused. "It must be a message from Terriermon, asking for you to come to the Digital world and help him Digivolve." Henry considered these words. "I guess, did you receive a message from Guilmon?" he asked. "No. Did anyone else?"
"Suzi got one from Lopmon too." Henry replied. "I was going to phone Rika after you to ask.."
"I'll ask Jeri, Kenta and Kazu." Takato said. "Bye, phone me if anything else turns up, okay?" Henry sighed softly. "Thanks, Takato. I will." Takato grinned to himself. "All in a day's work!" and hung up.
Henry dialled Rika's number, and waited. Her grandmother answered. "Oh, hello Henry. Rika's out, she said something about helping Renamon in Shinjuku park., shall I send a message?" Henry gasped inwardly. "Um..no thanks. Bye/" The boy pocketed his phone and jumped off his bed. "Bye dad, I'm going to the park!" Henry yelled as he exited the house.

Chapter 2: I'll come for you

Suzi stopped by at Ai and Mako's house. She knocked on the door., and Ai answered. "Oh, hi Suzi, its only you." Suzi looked at the girl with a faint look of hurt in her eyes. Mako smiled. "She was hoping it was Impmon. We got a note from him.." Suzi sighed. "Just what I wanted to ask you. My brother and I got messages from our Digimon, we were hoping that if we found out from the others anything, we could put two and two together and figure out what's happening." Ai nodded. "Impmon spoke to us through our Digivice. He wanted us to be there and help him."
"He looked so hurt and sad. After he talked, a Digimon that was really big picked him up, he shouted in pain and then the whole picture disappeared." Ai burst into tears, and Mako patted her shoulder awkwardly. "Don't worry Ai, we're going to the Digimon's home to rescue Impmon." Suzi stared at them. "How are you going to do that?" Mako shrugged. "We've got to try. We miss Impmon and he needs us. He said so." Suzi sighed. "Henry and his friends will know. Why don't you come with me, and we can ask him?" Ai smiled tearfully. "You mean it? Thanks, we'll come, right Mako?" the small boy nodded and smiled. "Anything to help Impmon."
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Henry ran across the streets, despite the funny looks passer byes where giving him.. He ran into the park, where the D-Ark had brought them home 4 years ago. "She's got to be here!" Henry thought. He circled around, but there was nothing. He decided to go to what used to be Guilmon's hideout. "HENRY!" a voice shouted. Rika? He thought. It was only Takato followed by Kenta, Kazu, Jeri, Ai, Mako and his sister Suzi. "Uh, what are you doing here?" Henry said, his eyes wide with disbelief. Kazu rolled his eyes. "I case you haven't noticed, Henry, we all have Digimon needing our help." Henry blushed. "Oh, sorry. You got messages too?".
"Where's Rika?" Kazu said, changing the subject. "She went to look for Renamon." Henry answered. "I can't see her anywhere. Her grandmother said that she's here." Kazu nodded. "Ryo's not here either. We need all the help possible." Ai began to cry again. "How do we get to Impmon?! What about that man that helped you come home years ago?" "Yamaki." Takato whispered. "He left the country sometime after the D-Reaper was defeated. He's gone." Ai just continued crying. "I'm finding Impmon!" She shook her D-Power hard. The machine vibrated and the screen lighted up. "Oh?." She murmured. The light grew brighter. Ai and Mako both held the Digivice. "We wish that we could be with Impmon and help him". The D-Power glowed brighter, and the light swallowed the twins. "They're gone." Jeri whimpered. "All, of us apart form Takato had messages.. We should, uh wish for our Digimon." Takato looked a bit upset. "Where's Guilmon then?" as if in response, his Digivice materialised in front of him and glowed. "Takatomon?help?me?"
The boy hugged the D-Power to him. "Guilmon, are you okay boy? Please be!" a tear slipped down his cheek, as he disappeared into the light. "H-he's gone!" Kazu gasped. "No more waiting. I there for you Gaurdramon! Please be okay!" "Me too, MarineAngemon. I'm coming for you." Kenta added. "Leomon, I won't lose you again!" Jeri said softly. "I'm coming too, Lopmon.. I can't just let you stay all hurt and sad."
Suzi cried. Henry grasped his sister's hand. "I'll always be there for you, Terriermon.. In my own world and yours." The children's emotional words activated their D-Powers, and sent them to the Digital world. "Were going back." Henry said softly, as he shot through the link between the two worlds.

Chapter 3: Relief

Rika walked along the dusty plains. "Here again." She muttered out loud. She held out her Digivice ahead of her, like a compass. "No Data!" she said angrily, but she continued looking for something to help her find her Digimon. The red dust blew into her eyes, stinging them. She slipped her sunglasses on, shielding herself with on hand and holding her Digivice with the other, she disappeared in the scarlet sandstorm.
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Suzi jumped up and brushed the loose red grains off herself. "Everyone okay?" Takato called. A round of grunts answered him.
Mako glanced at his sister. Impmon is our friend. He can't die, I'm going to kill that Digimon, or whatever hurt him. He fingered his Digivice. We're going to turn him into Beelzemon, and he'll be safe.
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Impmon weakly opened an emerald eye. "Ai..Mako.." he whispered. "I?can hear you." He wished he could send a telepathic message to his partners. "Where are you!" He said louder. He tried to see where he was, but darkness engulfed the confided space in which he lay, tied to the wall, battered. He remembered the smiling young faces of his partners, pondering if he'd ever see them again. "GET ME OUTTA HERE!" he shouted, to the approaching footsteps "Shut up, you sleaze bag." An angry voice thundered harshly. "NO ONE CALLS ME A SLEAZE BAG AN GETS AWAY WITH IT!" Impmon screamed angrily. "Whatever." The patrolling Digimon muttered, moving over to the other cages, leaving the fuming Digimon shackled to the wall.

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Takato frowned in thought, "how do we get back home after this? There isn't the ark to help us again, it disappeared when we used it last" Kenta shrugged, "Fly up there? It might work. We can see home from down here." The children gazed up and saw the Earth hanging mid air among blue streaming lights." Jeri smiled, "that might work, why don't we split up? We can cover more space and find Rika and our Digimon easily." Henry looked at his sister. "You'll come with me Suzi" "I'll go with Kenta" Kazu offered. "I want to go with my brother!" Ai said, clutching Mako's sleeve. "That left Jeri and Takato. "We better go on now."" Henry said. The groups left in different directions.
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Rika peered through a hole in a giant rock where she thought she heard screams. "She placed her D-Power near the hole. It read nothing, but a small red dot blinked on the screen . "Is that Renamon?" she whispered, not daring to raise her hopes. Another red dot blinked on the screen, to the left of the first one. Soon, many more dots blinked all over the screen. "what's the matter!" she growled, shaking the D-Power, and trying to get a reading. She banged the Digivice against the wall with the hole, and among several sparks the thing went dead. "ARRGH!" She shouted, stuffing the Digivice in her pocket "who made these good for nothing things anyway."
The girl focused into the hole, and saw a figure at the other end of the rock, which appeared to be some sort of hollow area. "Hey, who's there?" She said defiantly, though inside she really didn't want to know, but she asked just in case?.
"Just stay away from me, will you?" a familiar voice mumbled. "I'm in enough pain and stuff as it is" It suddenly hit her. "Impmon! Is that you?" She called. "I'm Rika!"
"R..Rika?" Impmon asked wearily. "Yeah! How did you get in there? Do you know where Renamon is? Are the other Digimon there? What happened, you sound as if you've been trampled by a herd of bulls!" The Digimon scowled in the darkness. "On question at a time kid. I don't know why I'm here, I don't know where Renamon or those other Digimon are, and I've been trampled, just not by bulls. Now I've answered you're stupid questions can you get me out of this stinkin' cage?" Rika frowned. "How do I get in?" she asked. "I don't know, kick the wall in or something!" Impmon said impatiently. Rika shrugged and kicked the wall with as much strength as she could muster. It cracked a little, so she continued slamming her feet against the crumbling rock.
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The graceful figure darted across the soft misty place. "Where are you Rika!" She whispered. "I know you're out there!" Renamon continued to race across the pastel clouds, until she saw a deep crack with a shining light at the bottom. "Rika?" She mumbled to herself. "It cant be, I can sense she's close by, alone! What if that thing attacks her like it did me?" The fox leapt in a neat arc, and hopped lightly to the bottom of the gaping hole. As she slipped deeper and deeper, in cold inching fear she realised the light wasn't exactly what she thought it was.
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Rika cleared the rocks with her hand, and squeezed into the narrow hole she'd created. Suddenly the
Dark room illuminated with light. Rika saw Impmon, his tied to an iron bar with chains. "That'll be hard to cut off. She thought to herself as she glanced around the room. It led to another passageway, that was to dark. The girl saw cages and cages lined up with Digimon, all shackled in a similar way to Impmon. She didn't recognise any of them, but one. "Terriermon?" She walked over to the cage with the white Digimon inside, "What about me!" Impmon moaned. Rika pushed the case door open and tugged at the chain. It looked loose but was stuck firmly. She quickly went over to Impmon's cage and tried to pull it open, but it stuck.
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[Na'dou]

That was very intertaining D*Star, write more, write more!

[Mist]

[color=crimson][size=1] That's pretty good! Keep going![/color][/size]

[neoakira70]

this is sum great fan fic