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[BondFanatic]

Here are the MS designs for an AC story I'm writing. The story and two RPG's before this were on the now defunct Gundamwatch Boards.

Please nitpick.

Model number: EAMSG-113
Code name: Gundam Deathblade Hell MK. II
Unit type: mobile suit
Manufacturer: Earth Alliance North America
Operator: Earth Hand
Rollout: AC 351
First deployment: AC 351
Accommodation: pilot only, in standard cockpit in torso
Dimensions: head height 25.0 meters
Weight: empty 45.0 metric tons; max gross weight unknown
Construction and armor: Gundanium alloy; Neo Titanium alloy
Powerplant: Ultracompact fusion reactor x2, output ratings unknown
Performance ability levels: fighting 200; weapons 200; speed 200; power 200; armor 200
Equipment and design features: "Zero System" combat computer/pilot interface in cockpit; self-destruct system; 2 x hyper Jammer ECM suite on backpack
Fixed armaments: 4 x vulcan gun, fire-linked, mounted in head; 2 x dragon fang, mounted on arms, each mounts 2 x flamethrower; 2 x 20-tube missile launcher, mounted on back
Optional fixed armaments: chain rifle, clip-fed
Optional hand armaments: 2 x rapid-fire twin buster rifle, stored in hip armor; 2 x beamspear, stored in recharge racks on back; 2 x beamsaber, stored in recharge racks on legs
Remote weapons: 20 x planet defensor, generates defensive energy field, stored in racks in shoulders

The Gundam Deathblade Hell was proving to be at a disadvantage against the IM-S used by Alistair Junobida, so the North American factory of the Earth Alliance took the plans of the Gundam and completely rebuilt it, producing a true monstrosity. The Gundam Deathblade Hell MK. II was one of the most powerful and largest Mobile Suits of all time. It carried two reactors to powerful all of its weapons, including the centerpieces: two rapid-fire twin buster rifles. Sadly, Sean Durham, the intended pilot, died in a colony explosion before the Gundam could be put to use.

Several years later, Sean?s brother, Garret took the controls of the Gundam as the Colonial Alliance rebelled again. It faced off against the IM-S in the final battle over Earth and was destroyed when it was rammed into the IM-S. Garret survived though, ejecting after setting the course into the combat computer.

When Char Aznable appeared in AC 354, Garret had the Gundam Deathblade Hell MK. II rebuilt. He went up against Char in a battle over the Azores Islands, against Amuro?s warnings. The Gundam, though it was powerful, was no match for Char?s piloting skills and Newtype abilities. The Gundam Deathblade Hell MK. II was completely wrecked, and Garret barely survived. He then designed the fourth incarnation in the Deathblade series: the MK. III.

Model number: EHMSG-114
Code name: Gundam Deathblade Hell MK. III
Unit type: mobile suit
Manufacturer: Earth Hand North America
Operator: Earth Hand
Rollout: AC 354
First deployment: AC 354
Accommodation: pilot only, in standard cockpit in torso
Dimensions: head height 30.0 meters
Weight: empty 48.0 metric tons; max gross weight unknown
Construction and armor: Gundanium alloy, Neo Titanium alloy and Gundarium Gamma alloy on moveable frame
Powerplant: Ultracompact fusion reactor x2, output ratings unknown
Performance ability levels: fighting 250; weapons 250; speed 250; power 250; armor 250
Equipment and design features: "Zero System" combat computer/pilot interface in cockpit; self-destruct system; 2 x hyper Jammer ECM suite on backpack
Fixed armaments: 4 x vulcan gun, fire-linked, mounted in head; 2 x dragon fang, mounted on arms, each mounts 2 x flamethrower; 2 x 20-tube missile launcher, mounted on back
Optional hand armaments: 2 x rapid-fire twin buster rifle, stored in hip armor; 2 x beamspear, stored in recharge racks on back; 2 x beamsaber, stored in recharge racks on legs
Remote weapons: 20 x planet defensor, generates defensive energy field, stored in racks in shoulders

When Char Aznable reappeared in AC 354, Garret Durham fought and lost miserably against him. His Gundam Deathblade Hell MK. II was completely wrecked, and Char was beginning to gather forces. In record time, the North America factory constructed the newest version of the Gundam, the MK. III. There were several differences in this version. The MK. III was five meters taller than the MK. II was, and it carried Gundarium Gamma alloy along with Gundanium and Neo Titanium. All of these armor types were mounted on a moveable frame.

The MK. III proved successful in assaults on Colonial Alliance and Neo-Zeon forces, and in the final battle, was enough to repel a force of hundreds of Geara Dogas and Serpent III's.

Model number: EAMSS-131 or EAMSD-131 (for Mobile Dolls) or EHMSS-131 or EHMSD-131 (for Mobile Dolls)
Code name: Sagittarius
Unit type: mass production general purpose mobile suit/mobile doll
Manufacturer: Earth Alliance Europe; Earth Hand Europe
Operator(s): Earth Alliance; Earth Hand
Accommodation: pilot only, in panoramic monitor/linear seat cockpit in torso; N/A for mobile doll type
Dimensions: overall height 20.4 meters; head height 19.0 meters
Weight: empty 21.3 metric tons; max gross 47.3 metric tons
Construction: titanium alloy/ceramic composite
Powerplant: Minovsky type Ultracompact fusion reactor, output rated at 1870 kW
Propulsion: rocket thrusters: 1 x 12700 kg, 2 x 9200 kg, 2 x 8800 kg; vernier thrusters/apogee motors: 12
Performance: maximum thruster acceleration: 1.03 G
Equipment and design features: sensors, range 14200 meters; optional mobile doll AI control system
Fixed armaments: 2 x vulcan gun, fire-linked, mounted in head; 1 x beam saber, stored in recharge rack on right hip armor, hand-carried in use
Optional fixed armaments: 1 x shield, mounted on either forearm
Optional hand armaments: beam rifle, powered by rechargeable energy cap; 105 mm rifle, drum-fed, 100 rounds per drum

The Sagittarius had been the frontline Mobile Suit of the Earth Alliance since the Ruravinsz conflict. When the Junobida Empire dropped forces onto Earth, the first forces to respond were the Gundam Deathblade Hell and the other Alliance Gundams, along with a force of Sagittarius Mobile Suits. The battle raged on for days, and as it reached a stalemate, a new card was played. The Earth Alliance Europe factory had produced five hundred Sagittarius Mobile Dolls, which helped end the battle and end the presence of the Junobida Empire on Earth.

The Sagittarius design was used until mid-AC 354 until it was replaced by the MK. II version.

Model number: EHMSS-161 or EHMSD-161 (for Mobile Dolls)
Code name: Sagittarius MK. II
Unit type: mass production general purpose mobile suit/mobile doll
Manufacturer: Earth Hand Australia
Operator(s): Earth Hand
Accommodation: pilot only, in panoramic monitor/linear seat cockpit in torso; N/A for mobile doll type
Dimensions: overall height 20.4 meters; head height 19.0 meters
Weight: empty 21.3 metric tons; max gross 47.3 metric tons
Construction: neo-titanium alloy on moveable frame
Powerplant: Ultracompact fusion reactor, output rated at 1870 kW
Propulsion: rocket thrusters: 1 x 12700 kg, 2 x 9200 kg, 2 x 8800 kg; vernier thrusters/apogee motors: 12
Performance: maximum thruster acceleration: 1.03 G
Equipment and design features: sensors, range 16200 meters; optional mobile doll AI control system
Fixed armaments: 4 x vulcan gun, fire-linked, mounted in head; 2 x beam saber, stored in recharge racks on hip armor, hand-carried in use
Optional fixed armaments: 1 x shield, mounted on either forearm, mounts 2 x 8-tube small missile launcher
Optional hand armaments: beam rifle, powered by rechargeable energy cap; 105 mm rifle, drum-fed, 100 rounds per drum

The Neo Zeon forces and the Colonial Alliance?s new Serpent III Mobile Suit outmatched the Sagittarius; the famous mass-produced Mobile Suit of the Earth Alliance. Earth?s government then designed a new Sagittarius, adding a moveable frame and more weaponry. This proved to be an invaluable improvement, as the Neo-Zeon and Colonial Alliance forces began to retreat. The tide was turned further when the Earth Hand discovered the plans for the RGM-89 Jegan, a familiar suit to Char...

Model number: EHMSS-141 (Earth Hand Africa Factory) or EHMSS-151 (Earth Hand Asia Factory)
Code name: Jegan Kai
Unit type: mass production general purpose mobile suit
Manufacturer: Earth Hand Africa; Earth Hand Asia
Operator(s): Earth Hand
Accommodation: pilot only, in panoramic monitor/linear seat cockpit in torso
Dimensions: overall height 20.4 meters; head height 19.0 meters
Weight: empty 21.3 metric tons; max gross 47.3 metric tons
Construction: titanium alloy/ceramic composite on moveable frame
Powerplant: Minovsky type Ultracompact fusion reactor, output rated at 1870 kW
Propulsion: rocket thrusters: 1 x 12700 kg, 2 x 9200 kg, 2 x 8800 kg; vernier thrusters/apogee motors: 12
Performance: maximum thruster acceleration: 1.03 G
Equipment and design features: sensors, range 14200 meters
Fixed armaments: 2 x beam saber, stored in recharge racks on hip armor, hand-carried in use; 1 x 4-slot hand grenade rack, mounted on left hip armor
Optional fixed armaments: 1 x vulcan gun pod, mounted on head; 1 x shield, mounted on either forearm, mounts 1 x 4-tube small missile launcher
Optional hand armaments: beam rifle, powered by rechargeable energy cap

After the Sagittarius MK. II was produced, the plans for the RGM-89 Jegan were discovered in an abandoned construction site. These plans were given to the Earth Hand government, who quickly commissioned both the Africa and Asia factories to produce these Mobile Suits. The Jegan Kai, as it would be called, was released under two model numbers: EHMSS-142 for Jegan Kais manufactured in the Africa factory and EHMSS-152 for Suits produced in Asia.

Model number: MSN-04
Code name: Sazabi
Unit type: prototype Newtype use mobile suit
Manufacturer: Anaheim Electronics Company; Ruravinsz Corporation
Operator: Neo Zeon
First deployment: UC 0093
Accommodation: pilot in panoramic monitor/linear seat cockpit in head
Dimensions: overall height 25.6 meters; head height 23.0 meters
Weight: empty 30.5 metric tons; max gross 71.2 metric tons
Construction: gundarium alloy on moveable frame
Powerplant: Minovsky type ultracompact fusion reactor, output rated at 3960 kW
Propulsion: rocket thrusters: 2 x 14000 kg, 2 x 13300 kg, 8 x 9800 kg; vernier thrusters/apogee motors: 28
Performance: maximum thruster acceleration 1.87 G
Equipment and design features: sensors, range 22600 meters; psycommu system; psycoframe cockpit frame; 2 x external propellant tank, ejectable, mounted on backpack
Fixed armaments: 1 x mega particle gun, power rated at 8.8 MW, mounted in torso; 2 x beam saber, stored in recharge racks in forearms, hand-carried in use
Optional fixed armaments: 1 x shield, mounted on either forearm, mounts 3 x small missile
Optional hand armaments: beam shotrifle, power rated at 10.2 MW, powered by rechargeable energy cap; 1 x beam tomahawk, stored in recharge rack in shield, hand-carried in use
Remote weapons: 6 x funnel (mounts 1 x beam gun, power rated at 10.6 MW), stored in backpack storage pods

When the presumed-dead Char Aznable made a surprise reappearance in the early UC 0090s, many surviving Zeon remnants and spacenoid civilians still desiring independence from the Earth Federation welcomed him with open arms. Thus, a second Neo Zeon movement was started at the colony of Sweetwater, with Char as its leader. A new revolution against the Federation was now brewing, and as the new Neo Zeon military began building its forces, Char commissioned his engineers to design him a custom mobile suit to take advantage of his Newtype abilities and superb piloting skills.

This design was the MSN-04 Sazabi, and it was constructed by the Luna-based contractor Anaheim Electronics. Despite its large size and heavy armor, the Sazabi was equipped with enough thrusters and verniers to make it extremely maneuverable compared to mass-produced frontline mobile suits. It was equipped with a relatively high-output generator, but most of its power was used to fire its abdomen-mounted mega particle gun, whose beam was wide enough and powerful enough to destroy several mobile suits with a single shot. A pair of beam sabers rounded out the Sazabi?s armament, a large shield carrying three missiles and a large, hand-carried beam tomahawk, and a beam shotrifle, which operated like a beam rifle version of a shotgun.

However, the Sazabi was also designed as a Newtype's weapon. Armed with six remote funnel units, Char could mentally control these weapons at great distances and without the disadvantage of Minovsky particle interference. His funnels were controlled via a fairly standard psycommu (short for "PSYchic COMMUnicator") system, but the Sazabi was also the first mobile suit to feature a revolutionary new piece of Newtype-use technology. This feature was called the "psycoframe", and it involved constructing the cockpit's frame with a material composed of microscopic psycommu receptors, thus increasing the pilot's Newtype sensitivity and responsiveness. Strangely enough, Char - for reasons known only to himself - would authorize Anaheim to pass along the psycoframe technology to the Earth Federal Forces' Londo Bell taskforce, who had also contracted Anaheim to construct a new Gundam mobile suit to be used by Char's old rival, Amuro Ray...

Always having been a soldier who preferred to lead his troops into battle rather than command from the rear lines, Char would deploy quite often in his crimson-red Sazabi during the Second Neo Zeon War that he started when he began bombarding Earth with asteroids in UC 0093. Soon enough, Char would come up against Amuro Ray in his own psycoframe-equipped mobile suit, the RX-93 n Gundam, and their battle of Newtype minds and mecha would reach its fateful, inevitable conclusion.

Several centuries later, Char reappeared, and began gathering followers for a new war of independence. He found the plans to the Sazabi and paid the Ruravinsz Corporation to reincarnate the Mobile Suit. The Sazabi was destroyed once and for all when Garret fired both of his twin buster rifles at the Gundam point blank.

Model number: AMS-119
Code name: Geara Doga
Unit type: mass production general purpose mobile suit
Manufacturer: Anaheim Electronics Company; Ruravinsz Corporation
Operator: Neo Zeon
Accommodation: pilot in panoramic monitor/linear seat cockpit in torso
Dimensions: head height 20.0 meters
Weight: empty 23.0 metric tons; max gross 50.8 metric tons
Construction: titanium alloy/ceramic composite on moveable frame
Powerplant: Minovsky type ultracompact fusion reactor, output rated at 2160 kW
Propulsion: rocket thrusters: 2 x 14000 kg, 2 x 13000 kg; vernier thrusters/apogee motors: 15
Performance: maximum thruster acceleration 1.06 G
Equipment and design features: sensors, range 16400 meters
Fixed armaments: 1 x beam sword-axe, recharge rack storage location unknown, hand-carried in use
Optional fixed armaments: 1 x shield, mounted on left forearm, mounts 4 x grenade launcher
Optional hand armaments: beam machinegun, powered by replaceable e-pac, with attached heat bayonet, 2 spare e-pacs stored on hip armor; beam machinegun, powered by replaceable e-pac, 2 spare e-pacs stored on hip armor, with optional attached grenade launcher, 1 round; 4 x sturm faust, rocket-propelled warhead, stored in shield, hand-operated or can be launched from shield

A mass-produced frontline mobile suit used by Neo Zeon during the Second Neo Zeon War, the AMS-119 Geara Doga could be considered a distant descendant of the old Principality of Zeon's original mainstay unit, MS-06 Zaku II. Although not exactly a high-performance model, the Geara Doga was sturdy, dependable, and inexpensive to mass-produce. Typically armed with one of two different beam machineguns - a larger type mounting an optional grenade launcher, and a slightly smaller type equipped with a removable heat bayonet - a shield carrying four rocket-propelled grenades and four sturm faust weapons, and a beam sword-axe, the Geara Doga was well-enough equipped for a typical grunt soldier.

Model number: RVMS-157
Code name: Alpha Doga
Unit type: prototype Newtype use mobile suit
Manufacturer: Ruravinsz Corporation
Operator: Neo Zeon
Accommodation: pilot in panoramic monitor/linear seat cockpit in torso
Dimensions: head height 21.0 meters
Weight: empty 28.0 metric tons; max gross 64.6 metric tons
Construction: gundarium alloy on moveable frame
Powerplant: Minovsky type ultracompact fusion reactor, output rated at 3340 kW
Propulsion: rocket thrusters: 2 x 17000 kg, 2 x 13000 kg, 2 x 11000 kg; vernier thrusters/apogee motors: 17
Performance: maximum thruster acceleration 1.57 G
Equipment and design features: sensors, range 20500 meters; quasi-psycommu system
Fixed armaments: 2 x beam saber with attached heat knife, stored in recharge racks in hip armor, hand-carried in use; 10 x missile, mounted inside shoulder armor shields
Optional hand armaments: beam assault rifle, powered by rechargeable energy cap, with attached grenade launcher, 1 round;
Remote weapons: 10 x funnel (mounts 1 x beam gun, power rated at 10.6 MW), stored on shoulder armor shields

When Char Aznable, the famed ?Red Comet? of the One Year War, reappeared in AC 354, he was without an army. He turned to the Ruravinsz Corporation, who instantly agreed to help him. One of the Mobile Suits they produced was the Alpha Doga, a commander variant of the Geara Doga. It was equipped with a quasi-psycommu system and ten funnels. The Alpha Doga was even more powerful than the Earth Hand Mobile Suits, but it was deemed too expensive to mass-produce. The single unit produced was given to Corrin Halik, one of Char?s top commanders, who was later killed in the final battle of the conflict.

Model number: CANMS-001
Code name: Serpent III
Unit type: mobile suit
Manufacturer: Colonial Alliance
Operator: Colonial Alliance
Rollout: AC 354
First deployment: AC 354
Accommodation: pilot only, in standard cockpit in torso
Dimensions: head height 16.6 meters
Weight: empty 8.6 metric tons; max gross weight unknown
Construction and armor: neo-titanium alloy on moveable frame
Powerplant: ultracompact fusion reactor, output rated at 2998 kW
Propulsion: rocket thrusters: 72030 kg total
Equipment and design features: quasi-psycommu system
Fixed armaments: 6 x 12-tube missile launcher, mounted in shoulders and legs
Optional hand armaments: 2 x double Gatling gun, can be stored on backpack storage racks; bazooka, can be stored on backpack storage racks; beam cannon
Remote weapons: 2 x funnel (mounts 1 x beam gun, power rated at 5.3 MW), stored on shoulder armor

At the beginning of the Junobida Empire crisis, the main Mobile Suit of the Empire was the Serpent II. Based on a design by Oz, it quickly was replaced on the frontline by Nekonokaze Mobile Suits. To allow more pilots to use the powerful Nekos, the Serpent II?s were often equipped with Mobile Doll AI systems and relegated to colony defense.

Years later, when Char Aznable reappeared, the Colonial Alliance was nowhere near its former glory. They had only the outermost colonies under their controls, and most of their factories were either captured or destroyed. When Char Aznable came to the Alliance to look for followers, he found the Serpent design to his liking. He took over the Colonial Alliance?s construction lines and began producing the Serpent III, a dangerous upgrade to the Serpent. Equipped with a quasi-psycommu system and two funnels, the Serpent III became a cheap alternative to the Alpha Doga. It was upgraded from the original Serpent and Serpent II in many ways. For instance, it carried 6 12-tube missile launchers, and a second double Gatling Gun, making it a very powerful Mobile Suit.

[zidane11]

You really like gundam. What were you, bored as hell or something? I just couldn't right that much.

[Kent]

Damn! now that was impressive.
Well done, and I would have to say you have quite a love for gundam. Keep it up.

One thing though, in the performance... you had accelaratory G's at 1 something.

I would have made it higher considering an f1 race car can reach 3.0 G's in turns and current fighter jets like f-18s can reach 9 G's.
Just something to think about.

upon doing more research, i found that the stuff you had for numbers and equipment is all based on other known gundam info, which makes this all the more impressive and makes what i said about the g's a gundam dishes out, well... stupid.
sorry.

[Amphion]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by zidane11 [/i]
[B]You really like gundam. What were you, bored as hell or something? I just couldn't right that much. [/B][/QUOTE]


Its called being a Hardcore fan. Many people call them selves hardcore fans of something when they are not. But this is a good example of some one who IS a hardcore fan. (Tips hat to AlmightySSJ4)

I see you love the Dragon Fangs as much as I do. All the specs seem sound to me. Are you gonna post some bios for the new pilots? I would be interested in reading them.

Nice job.

[BondFanatic]

[QUOTE][i]Originally posted by gokents [/i]
[B]
One thing though, in the performance... you had accelaratory G's at 1 something.
[/B][/QUOTE]

Even with the large amount and power of the thrusters, compare the weight of an F1 racecar and a Gundam. The GDBH MK. II is 25 meters tall and weighs 45 tons, and the MK. III weighs 48 tons and is 30 meters tall.

[Domon]

Do you got any pics of them yet??? I would really like to see them. But yeah you are a major hardcore fan!!! I'm impressed

[Nimrod]

Wow, I have to say that I'm impressed. I never would've taken my time to do that. I mean I've drawn my own Gundams and stuff but ummm wow.

Oh yes, one quick question. If it's AC timeline why are there Neo Zeon mobile suits? Especially since AC is supposedly an alternate universe. If it were UC I think it would work better.

[BondFanatic]

The reason why there are suits from UC is because in the story, the timelinbes are crossed, so Neo-Zeon exists in the AC timeline.

[Amphion]

Yes, I would like to see some pics too. If you can do some rough sketches, I might beable to build a 3d model. I like the ideas of the UC and AC crossing. Gives you the best of both worlds.

[Domon]

Cool, i really want to see some pics!!! Pics really help me get the idea of how the mobile suit operates. oh can you give us some sketches of the cockpits and weapons??? Those would really make me drool!!!

[BondFanatic]

Problem is, I stink at drawing. I only have a sketch of the GDBH MK. II that someone else did. I can't put it up though, because my computer was just recently sent in to be repaired and all the files were deleted, including the installation for my Zip Drive, which is where all of my files are.

[Domon]

*Mouth drops down in total horror* AAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!! I'm majorly sorry AlmightySSJ4 that has to suck.