Mnemolth Posted October 3, 2002 Share Posted October 3, 2002 Something for the older teenager... As usual criticisms, comments, praise and insults are welcome, as long as they're intelligible and intelligent. ;) [b]A Love Eternal[/b] There are many things I cannot do, I see you but I cannot touch you, I sense your sadness And as much as I want I cannot hold you, Caress you, comfort you. Encased in the coffin of your black dress I feel your pain and your need, Every beat of your helpless heart Only tightens the noose around your neck. I know the paralyzing palpitations That suffocate you, drown you, exhaust you. And, I can do nothing, For I stand here, Looking upon you without eyes, Listening to you without ears, A silent soul adrift Around you, about you, in you. There are many things I cannot do, Without form, without voice I?m an invisible mute. Yet, weep not for me my dearest, For our love needs no form to give it substance And no voice for it to be heard. Until the Lord brings us together once more, There are many things I cannot do, Racing along the shores of spirits Watching you pass on the river of life. I can only pray your journey is a smooth one, I can only wave and call to you And tell you how much I love you. A love that will survive, A love that will endure, A love eternal. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
zidane11 Posted October 4, 2002 Share Posted October 4, 2002 The ending isn't anything like I though it would be. It's a pretty good poem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Makai Kite Posted October 13, 2002 Share Posted October 13, 2002 That's such a sweet poem, although I have no clue what it was about. I guess I have a vague clue, vague enough to appreciate the true beauty of the poem itself. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mnemolth Posted October 17, 2002 Author Share Posted October 17, 2002 Oh? What do you think its about Kaiba? :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shinkoru Posted October 18, 2002 Share Posted October 18, 2002 well, i have osmwhat of an idear, sdly i can..well i know exactly that feelign but my love is still alive. Its about someone dead or someone u love but cant see or touch, isnt it? i knwo the feeling cuz iver never met my love, yett i love him still, heart undieing, lovign beign true to only him... anway, was i,well am i rigbt? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Red Posted October 18, 2002 Share Posted October 18, 2002 [b]Wow, I really like that poem Mnemolth, an excellent choice of words and phrasing.[/b] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shinkoru Posted October 18, 2002 Share Posted October 18, 2002 i guess this is spam but.. will some one read and reply to my poems? i have a thred it, its called hummm, poetry... plz,someone.. ide like ot kno what you think! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sere Tuscumbia Posted October 19, 2002 Share Posted October 19, 2002 Interesting poem. Nice imagery there. And MDE, try to clean up the way you write. Looks like you either can't spell, or am misplacing where your fingers rest on the keyboard. Let's see some more poetry Mnemolth! ^-^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Makai Kite Posted October 20, 2002 Share Posted October 20, 2002 I do not think it's about Kaiba! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Hyper Posted October 20, 2002 Share Posted October 20, 2002 Is it about a funeral? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mnemolth Posted October 21, 2002 Author Share Posted October 21, 2002 Yes. :D She's at his funeral. Its about love beyond death. Darn, come to think of it I think I've already posted this one when I first got here! *sighs* Sorry for the repeat. I sometimes forget where I've posted what. Sere: Oh, here's another from me. It was in another thread by tursi I think. But I think many people may have missed it. If you did look at it before, I apologise for repeating myself, but at least this time I'm doing it in advance! :D [b]Red[/b] Red is a white rose Dipped in blood Stained deep and dark But never quite enough. Red is a blind fury A whirlwind of woe A rage beyond words That swallows all. Red is a traffic light That stops us in the night Wakes us from our dreams And leaves us shivering with fright. Red is a Chinese wedding Of beauty, fortune and trust It is youth in Spring, It is the heart afloat on a crush. Red is many colours Red has many shades Close your eyes and see What red are you today? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sere Tuscumbia Posted October 21, 2002 Share Posted October 21, 2002 Ooooo . . . that is awsome. All from the colour red. Red. And you got it to rhyme. I applaud you. I can't rhyme even if my life depends on it! ("Why don't you just rip her lungs out?!" "I don't know. Lacks poetry." "It doesn't have to. What rhymes with 'lungs'?") Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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