941_1432310904 Posted October 5, 2002 Share Posted October 5, 2002 tell me what u think, i know its not the greatest,But yeah.. I cried, Kissed my fingers. I breathed, blew the kiss. I hoped, hoped it would reach you. I called, no one answered. I was just thinking of you. I missed you. I needed you. I count the days Years. I count to five. ((Five bloody years)) I wanted to see you. I cry, but you're not here to [......]wipe the tears off my eyes. I crumble, swamped by Memories Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mitch Posted October 5, 2002 Share Posted October 5, 2002 [color=red] It's ok, but you're right, it isn't the best. I think the redundancy of 'i' kind of bogged it down some. And some of the words could've been better chosen. All in all, I'd give it a 7/10.[/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Corey Posted October 5, 2002 Share Posted October 5, 2002 8.5/10 I like repetition in poems. Did this one spawn from a personal experiance? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
zidane11 Posted October 5, 2002 Share Posted October 5, 2002 That's ok. You must really like to love poems. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
941_1432310904 Posted October 5, 2002 Author Share Posted October 5, 2002 Lol,yeah i gues i like love poems, but not all my poems are love poems..Lol just alot of them... And yeah i guess u could say it happend to me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tsung Li Posted October 7, 2002 Share Posted October 7, 2002 [color=darkblue]Do you write all your poems from personal experiance? I agree with DarkOrderKnight I like repetition in poems aswell, 8.7/10. [/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
941_1432310904 Posted October 7, 2002 Author Share Posted October 7, 2002 yah i do, Well most of them are from experience & thankz Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ke thampi Posted October 8, 2002 Share Posted October 8, 2002 why i again with lovely feeling, i missed with ,some of .. thampi [email]kethampi@hotmail.com[/email] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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